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Twilight wakes up in a hospital near the border of Changeling country, but something about her is...off. She remembers nothing of her adult life, in fact she doesn't seem to be acting like an adult at all, and she seems to be juggling a bit of an alter ego. An evil alter ego. Maybe, when she took in the magic of the princesses, she took in a bit more than magic.
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yay! new story
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You're too kind. It's not my strongest work, but I think it's a decent start to a story. Best of all, I think I set up enough momentum from this first chapter to actually take it a few chapters further. Hope you like it. 
You peaked my curiosity, but now you have my dying interest... George demands more!
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Wow, you ponies are great! I love comments.
You made my day.
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My, my what is this?
you need to define the story. is it dark, comedy, adventure, or other?
4548662 Fixed it, thank you!
You sure have a knack of cranking out clever new stories :D So Nightmare Moon is in Twilight's body huh? Boy this should be good :D
You have my interest!
There needs to be a Nightmare or Luna emote...
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heehee, thanks for reading!
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4548737 That is litterly the best thing anypony has said to me all day. Thanks.
4548987 I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading!
4549031 :D
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So, let's see what we have here...(with rating scale)
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Mental age regression
Nightmare Twilight
Identity crisis
High potential for it all to hit the fan
Okay then, let's see what happens next.
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Thank you for reading. 
4549178 Well, I hope future chapters won't disappoint!
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-Heh, oops
-Well, that's not good, is it?/Aww nuts.
-Well...Celestia buck it.
-That's good!
-That's good, right? Maybe?
-Oh, it's on.
Thanks!
Oh, I forgot to put the rating scale! (It's a reaction scale on how Twilight would react)
4549948 Oh, so my story was good?
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Eeyup
Rating:
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You know, I'm starting to like the split personality here, and I think I have it figured out!
If she's afraid or angry, she becomes Nightmare Twilight.
If she's genuinely happy or calm, she's normal, er, adult child Twilight.
Am I right? Because that's how it looks so far. (for becoming Nightmare Twilight, anyway)
Yay new chapter!
Poor wittle Twily shes sooo confused
Hopefully Nightmare or Tia will help her. Hmm would Nightmare help her? ... Probably not.
Obi one tia your her only hope!
-troll
4551218 You would be correct. Negative emotions fuel dark magic. Or at least, in this fic they do..
4551221 Celestia help her. Literally.
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All it takes is a little thought, right?
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Ya, more or less.
Nice. A small thing I'm going to point out though. You keep using wordily when you mean worriedly. Wordily means relating to words or containing them. Worriedly means in a worried manor.
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Fixed it. Sorry for the ytpo.
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Now we just need more chapters!
4551631 I find this comment ironic :D
Another great chapter! That poor cab driver... talk about a hazardous work environment.
4552036 Well, if you want a little hint, the situation gets worse. So much worse.
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Oh really?
Hey, Coolaid!
OH YEAH!
what the fuck is going on?.....
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yup.
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Is that a good 'wtf is going on?' or a bad 'wtf is going on?'?
4552610 it's a wtf is going on?.....
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Oh. Well I hope you liked it all the same. 
4553514 i can't know if i like it yet shit's happening and i don't know why.....
4553657 Well it's a mystery! Thant's the point silly.
You're not supposed to know the whole story immediately, it will all become clear soon. 
this story has really gotting beter and it only ch2 so please make more ch when you can and I also look forward to more storys you make
4555419 D'aawww thank you!
I totally will update. 
I can imagine Twilight having a lot of fun rediscovering her powers :D I'm excited to see what you do with a dream sequence! I've written a few and they always turn out... strange. Very strange. :D
Great work as always! Keep it up :D
4558147 Eep!
Thank you for the feedback. I was pretty worried about this chapter. 
But I'm glad somepony thought it was good. 
Question, I want to do a scene with the princesses are discussing the events of the story, hopefully, it would be full of hints pertaining to what happened leading up to the beginning of the story. Also, it will show whats been going on since Twilight disappeared. My question is this, should I do the scene next chapter, after the dream sequence (which would include a major POV switch) Or as a stand alone interlude thing, or not at all?
I'm having trouble deciding.
4558207 Well if you want a way to transition to this new POV I would recommend that you do it immediately after the dream sequence. Since Luna has the ability to peer into ponies dreams she could feel the disturbance of Nightmare Moon's presence in Twilight's dream and could then discuss it with Celestia. This would be a pretty good segue into the scene you want to do :D
4558260 Awesome :D
4558243 Absolutely! I was thinking of doing something similar. This should be fun.
4558267 Indeed it should be :D
Well, I can assume it's gonna be one buck of a nightmare!
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You'll see
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Sounds sketchy...
And that fact make the anticipation all the greater!
I hope Luna tries to somehow help Twi in this story.
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Of coarse. I wouldn't be so mean as to make Luna join Nightmare or anything. You beleive me right? 
