CHAPTER 6 RELEASED! "Intuitive Espionage" ~ A tragic incident leads Twilight and Applejack on another dangerous adventure against a team of rouge assassins, and a money-hungry business tycoon as their leader who intends to use his vast amount of wealth to plant a bomb in the heart of Canterlot City in an attempt to assassinate Princess Luna and to unleash the ultimate economic plan. With help from two unexpected allies, Twilight Sparkle and Applejack must protect those who are targeted and eliminate their next vindictive adversary on her Majesty's Royal Guard.
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I like what I've read so far. I haven't read any 'Con Mane'(Or how did Pinkie call him) stories yet so I hope that this one will turn out to be awesome.
Anyhow - keep up the good work!
The name's Joe, Pony Joe, EBI.
^ First thing that came into my mind upon viewing the title image.
I'd say this has some sizable potential as a story really, but there's a notable problem painting itself across my vision in the gaudiest of colors. That problem is the fact that while you've got plenty of story and character depth, the origins and the "how we got here" of it, the prologue such as explanations of why Rainbow is spoken of as if dead, what the heck Nova Spark's Rebellion was, etc., are not covered at all. I would focus on resolving these problems personally, before attempting to continue the story.
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Well I appreciate your criticism, I really do. If you're not familiar with my work then I should probably say that this is a sequel to my previous fic. This is probably why you're confused with the first couple paragraphs. Thinking about it now, I probably should have come out with a separate prologue chapter at first. Don't worry, I'll get to work on it.
666032 You're welcome, I will be happy to read this again when the prologue chapter is up. It truly is an interesting premise.
I smell more trouble.
And a rat in a suit, though it pains me to think so harshly of a character simply because of the convenience of his job and position. Ah well let the games begin non'?
Nice work with this one. After reading all of your previous fic I can tell that since the beginning of "equestria is not enough" you've improved your writing skills a lot. I'm looking forward to another great story. Keep it up!
Very interesting. I can't wait for the next part!
Seems like the pieces are already moving, and we don't even know the game yet. Most interesting...
and AJ having stallion issues? makes sense I suppose...
733187 It definitely throws in a twist
That 32 carat gold necklace actually made me look up on google if such a thing even exists - and it does!
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Although I misspelled carat...