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Monochromatic


People tell me I'm just like Rarity. Except for the social skills. And the vocabulary. And the generous spirit. And the fashion sense and finesse. Actually, I'm nothing like Rarity.


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Much to Princess Rarity's displeasure, her father has decided it's time the young princess selects her lifelong bodyguard. She honestly finds the entire process rather dreadful. She's supposed to pick a bodyguard based on strength alone? What if they're boring? What if they have nothing in common?

Even with Fluttershy there, Rarity is convinced she's going to be bored out of her mind... Until her curiosity is piqued when she notices a quite cute soldier who just can't put her book down.


Part of the Bodyguard!AU Series, based on Earthsong9405's AU where Twilight is the bodyguard to a "Princess/Queen Rarity". Prior knowledge of the AU is not necessary to read the story.

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neat :3

pretty funny as well. But why wouldn't Twilight simply have the book and scroll in a pair of saddle bags instead of in the bushes? Seems like a weird storing place

Why are so many of the best AUs stuck in lousy old tumbler? :fluttercry: Lady Fluttershy and I would like to see a full length story in this 'verse.

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Thanks! And whoops, mostly my logic was that she couldnt have those things while
Training! Although it's a good point so
I'm gonna reference it somewhere whoops

Thank you ahh

This AU is consuming you, eh? Oh no! Does that mean there might be more of this to enjoy endure? Oh, woe is us! Whatever shall we do? :applecry:

I suppose there is no other choice than to read, upvote and favorite them. Yes, it is quite terrific terrible, but someone has to do it.


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Good, good, let this AU consume you.

I love this AU, so no qualms from me!

would not get

-not only get

to chose this

-choose

It was a surprised expression

Try to avoid redundancy with phrasing. Perhaps switch it for: It was a look of surprise,

was thr masked

Twilight, you're making weird noises again.

Rarity nodded earnestly. "She does, doesn't she? Not to mention that she is absolutely adorable. Did you see the way she got all excited over her book?"
Fluttershy laughed. "If I didn't know you better, I'd say you have a little crush on her!"

Missed a spacing.

And do you know how many years it took for father and Nicholas to get along?

Hey! We get along just fine, thank you very much!

And then they fucked!

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I'm going to blame the both of you when my social life crumbles because I can't stop writing these accursed ficlets

Thanks for liking them ouo BUT NOT FOR ENCOURAGING MY DESCENT INTO THIS MADNESS

This is the 200th story i've favourited! :yay:

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Ahhhh thank you so much!!! I've corrected them all c: Really, though, thank you for taking the time

and yes, yes they did

Definately interested to read it later... Dun have time now, BUT is definately worth a watch

:pinkiehappy: Heh, that was adorkable t way :twilightsmile: was techinally diggin herself into a grave :ajsmug: but, lucky for her :raritywink: took a early likin to her :yay:. Yet, if it was me i wouldn't care if this AU thingy was cosumin me; i'd be lik 'cosume away my friend' :rainbowlaugh:

4539040 I would gladly commit more sins if it means more Rarilight. The enjoyment quenches the guilt in my heart. Tell us how they got together next!

I really love what you two with these two. Well done!

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Ah, thank you! I'm really glad you liked this one and the other fic!!

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Oh my god I'm working on it, and it's ruining me. I had like two WIP rarilight things before this AU and now they both were put on hold because of this AU. As for how they met, I may not write it because I have a little idea but it's not very good, and I don't know? I guess I only like publishing or writing things if I think the idea is good and will be well received.

I have to admit I'm pretty self-conscious about my writing, so it's almost a miracle I even posted this one and the other fic here on fimfiction, instead of just leaving them on tumblr. I have so much unpublished rarilight stuff that I haven't posted because I'm not very confident in it ahahaha,,,

I need more MLP skype friends to discuss them with u.u

4540573 If you need someone to discuss Rarilight with, I can totally help with that.

Good good let the AU take over.:pinkiecrazy:

It looks like Earthsong's AU is going to be quite popular here in FimFic, with Authors from here starting to follow her prompts...:pinkiehappy:

Nice to see someone brave enough to make it into a story! Now, time to read. (Will edit comment later.)

It was because of this that Rarity had to choose carefully who she would be entrusting her life to.

I THINK it should be whom, no who, and remove the 'to'. It's a preposition, and you don't end sentences in prepositions.

"Shall we be off? We might still make it to the theatre." After receving a nod from

Fluttershy, Rarity turned to Twilight and grinned.

Any particular reason you added a paragraph space in the middle of a sentence?

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Ahhh, thank you! I've corrected them both :D

4545502 Huzzah! (And the peasants rejoiced... (Sorry, stupid Home Improvement joke. <.< ))

Two issues:

Rarity couldn't stop herself from giggling, her own cheeks also becoming a very light shade of pink. "Well then," she exclaimed, lookin at Fluttershy. "Shall we be off? We might still make it to the theatre." After receving a nod from

Fluttershy, Rarity turned to Twilight and grinned. "I expect I'll be dropping by tomorrow during your training. It's better we start getting acquainted with each other as soon as possible."

Shouldn't be a line-break there.

Maybe Fluttershy doesn't know me as well as she thinks.

"Does" makes more sense.

This story is great and so are you.

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Actually, it's a bit odd, but "doesn't know me as well as she thinks" is actually correct. Fluttershy said, "If I didn't know you better, I'd say you have a crush on her!" This implies that Fluttershy thinks she knows Rarity well enough to realize that it's not actually a crush... but she's wrong. So perhaps Fluttershy in fact doesn't know Rarity as well as she thinks.

Edit: "who she would be entrusting her life to" was correct. You could also use "to whom she would be entrusting her life" if you want to avoid ending the sentence with a preposition, but frankly that's an archaic rule that you shouldn't feel obligated to follow. However, the new "whom she entrusted her life" is not correct, it does require the "to" somewhere; "her life" is the direct object, and the "who" or "whom" (depending on where the preposition goes) is an indirect object that requires the preposition.

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Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

And yeah haha In the end that's why I didn't correct the "doesn't know me as well as she thinks she does." As for the "whom" section, it /is/ much better with the whom. Thank you so much for the help! :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by Karrakaz deleted Aug 15th, 2016
Comment posted by Monochromatic deleted Aug 15th, 2016

bravo bravo bravo

Thus AU is adorably hilarious, there are far worse things to be consumed by.

THIS AU IS MY FAVORITE THING YOU WRITE. At least, that I've read. I still have a fair few stories to go through. And I hear great things about The Enchanted Library, which I can't wait to start soon. I follow earthsong9405 on tumblr but honestly, the way you write these gives me life.

I swear one day I'll leave you an actual, informative comment. It just get so full of wordless happiness from reading your stories that I don't know what to say right after reading.

This fic is like soulfood.

Every time I come across it, I feel a deep and abiding satisfaction.

There is little in this world greater than two best friends geeking out over trashy romance novels

Hnnnng love this AU, so glad I finally got a chance to sit down and read the latest installment

Edit: huh this is an old one not a new one... How have I just now read it!?

Why didn't I read these sooner? :facehoof: I'm grinning like a complete dorkchop! :rainbowlaugh:

These are adorable!

I absolutely love these stories. Sure, the paradigm shift made it a little harder to start, but once I got past the initial awkwardness of said shift, I fell in love with the concept. The carry-out in both stories, might I add, is nothing less than superb. Job well done, old chap. :moustache:

yeeee

On a side note, EarthSong's Bodyguard AU seems to be heavily buried somewhere now, and finding pics of it is a bit difficult

when does Rarity confess? i love to read that X3

this is a good AU I like it

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