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Alchemystudent


Loves to read and write, I decided to try writing fanfiction after a long hiatus thanks to ponies


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Nyx, daughter of Twilight Sparkle, awakes to a world torn by war and ravaged by nuclear fallout. Alone, she is given the task to write down the final days of the heroes of Equestria to let the world know of their brave exploits, but is given a much harder task-to live her life as best as she can.

But, how can one live, if one sees herself as a monster. How can one live on, when there is nothing to live for?


All thanks to Kkat for the world and Pen stroke for the always lovely Nyx.

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 176 )

Interesting. I'll keep up with this one for sure :)

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I hope to keep you entertained with this

YAY!!!!!!!!!!! Finally a story that I've always wanted to read! I'm gonna guess that nyxs innate curiosity and need to protect others will get the best of her on several occasions. Does this happen before or after lil pip comes to the library. I'm gonna also guess that nyx will be pissed off at what the raiders have done to her home.

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It happens two years before Little Pip leaves.

Also, stay tuned, some of the FOE cast might make cameos.

I absolutely love the concept of Nyx in the Fallout setting. However, in my reading of the chapter I couldn't help but notice there was either not enough or misused punctuation.

and I was in need

Double space between 'was' and 'in'.

Is it perfect? By no means. Is it readable? Of course it is, but you may want to have someone else to pre-read for you too. There are so many portions of the chapter that could be re-written to be just that much better, and it would get you that much more good attention towards it.

Overall; I liked it, so you get my favourite, upvote, and follow so I can read subsequent chapters. I'm eager to see where you are going to take this.

it finally happened. Find a way to throw in something from " my little dashie" and you will have all of the big three.:scootangel::pinkiecrazy:

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Thanks for the small review, I'll look into it.


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Dang, there goes the plot of chapter 10
:pinkiesad2:

I love Nyx :twilightsmile:

I love Fallout Equestria :pinkiesmile:

but together? :twilightoops:

unthinkable! :pinkiegasp:

but yet thought of! :pinkiecrazy:

congrats cant wait for more :raritywink:

Past Sins and Fallout: Equestria were some of the first fics I read in this fandom.
And you combined them.
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Thank you.

been waiting for something like this :yay:
could you somehow add changelings?
I plan to add them to my own Fallout Equestria story
(when I make one)
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Heh, one of the first things I had thought of when I had finished listening to both was, "how would Nyx handle the wasteland"


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Thanks you, I do try


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Maybe

Thanks for adding your story to the Fallout Equestria Group! Feel free to PM me if you have any questions! :raritywink:

Somewhat intriguing, but I have to point out while assigning base stats is fine, it seems a little funky to give her substantial skill scores in weapons she presumably never came into contact with. It seems unlikely that Nyx would have any skills with regard to survival or bartering since in old Equestria everything was purchased with bits and prior to the conflict with the Zebras there would have been no need for survival skils. I'd advise removing all the weapon skills you have except for firearms and melee as it's possible that anyone from old Equestria might have some basic weapon skills and some perhaps had training in melee combat. If you can't stomach that, you might want to spend some time explaining how she acquired those skills either here or somewhere earlyish in the story.

P.S.
That perk description seems kinda awkwardly described and it seems awfully early to be handing out perks since those are usually gained after two levels are gained in the games. Also, I could have sworn two tagged skills was the default.

I'll be keeping this on my read later list. Shows some promise, but I can't make a definite decision just yet on a rating.

Looking forward to more material

Seems interesting. Some minor ooc problems and strange things but apart from that, good beginning :twilightsmile:

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Just wait, the skills have their purpose.


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Thank you, I'll try to live up to it


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I am going to try and keep her as close to who she normally is as possible.

Thanks for the comment

So much want for the next chapter. Oh and feels. Many feels.

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Just to be clear, that wasn't about whether they have/had a purpose, but rather about whether there's any good reason for Nyx to even have that much of any skill starting out.

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I'm mostly speaking from a non-Past Sins fan perspective. I don't know about Nyx outside of small bits and pieces that my friends (who are blatant 'haters' mind you) tell me. I'm not making any judgements until I know everything for sure.

You don't have to go out of your way to meet my expectations, mostly because I don't have any. When I know for sure I'll like it or not I'll make my final judgement.

Does have a good start up though.

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I'm more talking about Twilight :raritywink:

Funny thing is I also wonder what would happen with Nyx in the FOE universe. A part of me would think things would devolve into nukes sooner/ war would ended quicker. Mainly because Nyx is the thing the zebra's feared in the FOE universe.

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Seeing how it happens 2 year pior.... I think you shouldn't have many cameo's of the original FOE crew. Steel Hooves would have mention that not all alicorns are members of Unity in the original story. Calamity, if I remember, first time ever seeing an alicorn was during the raid on old Appleossa. Velvet and Little Pip are still in Stable 2 and as for the Zebra of the group (Sorry I forgot your name:fluttercry::fluttercry:) I believe she was in Filly at this time. Spike would have mention her to Pip as a candidate for a the Element of Magic. As for other characters well, I think they would end up mentioning Nyx during any conversation about alicorns.Also given the Fact that Nyx is a Black Alicorn with a Cutie Mark, she stands out greatly ccompared to the rest of unity. I think the best chance you've got to escape breaking the FOE cannon while keeping cameos is two ways: 1. Make the Characters she meets play a minor role in FOE and that doesn't get a large amount of "screen time", like Jack from the cheese shoppe. 2. A memory tampering spell.

That being said, their are only two ponies that could get away with seeing Nyx and getting away with not telling Pip and the others in the main story: Ditzy, cause the tongue issue. And Homage, cause she would spot a giant black alicorn roaming the Wasteland and if she is fast enough, Nyx can ask her to be quiet about it before any of her deeds hits the radio wave. Hey when you deal with a black alicorn people take notice, and when they do things just get crazy...........

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If this join by FOE Standards, then we are going by FO3 rules in terms of levels which is 1 perk every levels up to level 30.

Interesting... this could either flop, or be the greatest sub-fandom crossover ever written.:raritystarry: As far as I know, it's also one of the few FOE concepts that hasn't been done yet. Good luck, and I'll be giving a preliminary thumbs up and fave:pinkiehappy:. Props for proper indentation and formatting.:twilightsmile::moustache:

I can't wait to see Spike and Nyx reunite. They're each all the other has, now.:fluttercry:

God Bless,

Blackstaff

Keep this up, and don't rush yourself with this. Pace yourself, and properly plan this, and it can become really good. Can't wait for more.

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Trust me, many feels will be had.


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Glad to get you excited.

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Assuming by the cover pic,which is awesome by the way, Nyx is full grown with lots of natural power, right? Can't wait for the other "alicorns" to see her.

A Nyx FoE Story? Count me in! :pinkiehappy:

I new and I am sadly advertising my skills if you want a poem for your story please contact me I need to start somewhere

The unfairly large amount of downvotes are those who hate Nyx. The onIy real error I found is that, in the format you have written it in, 5 should be five, as in five mares.

5 as in the passcode was 55463, five as in there were five.... it just flows better in my opinion.

Great start, I really want to see where this goes.

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Really now? That could be true, but it's possible that some people just don't like the story. You don't have to hate Nyx to dislike a story with her in it.

4539613 True, but I see a very noticably larger amount of dislikes on a Nyx story.

Ooh, Nyx and FOE! (there are people who downvote both genres, so don't be discouraged!)

I saw a few errors, nothing that interrupted the flow of the story-- er, the one you really might want to fix is 'suppository of books' into 'repository of books'. Since a suppository is uh, usually medication you stick into various bodily cavities that are not the mouth. :pinkiegasp:

So here's a question that some will ask later on and probably find the answers later in the story. Did nyx know about the vault experiments and another is the part where twilight says she had two children, are you referring to project horizons on that.

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I'll answer the second one, actually she is referring to Spike. I have never read PH, I am kind of waiting for it to be done before I tackle it.

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Actually it has always been three tagged skills.

*sits patiently awaiting another chapter...also for Nyx to get a plasma minigun!*

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Hmm. Well... odd. I'll have to take note the next time I play Fallout 3 or New Vegas.

Interesting premise!
Always eager to find Nyx fics.

I am going to track this until it has more chapters first before reading though.

I'm really interested in seeing where this goes.
Do you mean this story starts 2 years before LittlePip leaves the Stable, or is the whole story happening and ending before that time?

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This story starts 2 years before Little Pip leaves the stable

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Then I wonder how things will go next, and if Nyx will meet Spike, and LittlePip and Fluttershy when their time comes.

Indeed, there is always the danger of making a character too powerful, bordering invincible. Adding a sniper to the thugs, right at the start, would have been too much, I think.
Also, good thing to equilibrate between action and character's development.
I'm eager to see how Nyx will fare next.

Ouch. Poor Nyx, to see Ponyville in such a state... unthinkable. Another great chapter, but most raiders wouldn't bother talking to a non-raider before the shooting starts (unless they have very evil karma).

As for her first battle, I think, caught unaware, it just a tiny bit implausible that Nyx would walk away with only minor injury; though that's not impossible, considering her nature.

I'd say an elegant weapon such as a Katana or Hoof Wrappings (not Boxing Gloves) would suit Nyx later on (A magical version, if possible), but then, that's just me.

Welp, it had to happen. Nyx was going to deal with the raiders sooner or later.

Also, I am a bit peeved about the result as well. There is two roads I figured you would have gone. The high road where she uses magic to put them all to asleep, and the low road where she would have to knocked them out with what she had.
Being Twilight's daughter and trained in the guards, the spell route would have been preferable and more to her nature, in my opinion. Plus since in the only two FoE stories I've read have both main characters only have Tk in their kit from the start, I wanted to see how a magic adept would have handled it.

But since you did go the low road, I was thinking that she would come out with some more scaring and maybe a concussion. So to see that her worse wound is a bullet to the leg, I feel a bit cheated.

But hey, this is the just the beginning, But I do hope that we see more of Nyxie's arsenal of spells in the future.

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Just wait, I think you might like what I have in store.


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Ok, what you said helped to clarify what Khelbun said. When I wrote the fight, I thought that I had damaged her enough, but I see that will be something I need to improve on later on. Thank you for the observation

Also, don't worry, you're going to see some more of what is in her arsenal.

“Guys! Look, Look!” Cheered Applebloom as she ran to us, turning to show off a flank with a hammer and a nail in an apple.

'Cheered' shouldnt be capitalized.
...
Huh, nice start. It would be interesting if the flashbacks were to be a mainstay in the story. It could provide a more solid perspective about what happened during the War while deviating enough from the memory orbs from Fallout Equestria for originality.
I'm also looking forward to when Nyx meets the "pseudo-goddesses".

I'm waiting for Nyx to snap and go god mood on some raiders/bad guys. But that's most likely way later on though.

4528140 when you say cameos from the characters, does that also include side fics with characters from before lil pip.

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No, mainly the main fic due to I havent read some of those others.

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