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The Dreadful Mark

What happens when an innocent young filly is trapped in the clutches of evil. As she escapes the only home she ever knew, she is pursued by the nightmare of her past, and the promise of dark future.

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Gabriel LaVedier

Gabriel LaVedier #1 · Jun 9th, 2014 · 2 · ·

Curious. Very curious. Naturally I'm not sure what tonthink since it's still in the pure mystery phase.

I noticed some minor errors but the one that stands out is the beginning. "Fillies" is plural. "Filly's" is singular possessive.

Akiba

Akiba #2 · Jun 9th, 2014 · · ·

Could do with a bit of editing.
Dark mark.

NobleValor

NobleValor #3 · Jun 9th, 2014 · · ·

Good start, although in addition to the "fillies" being changed to "filly's", the sentence, "...close to being finishing just to..." should be either, "...to finishing..." or "...to being finished..." Looking forward to more.

Slooth