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CoastalSarv
Old donkey from the north. Likes pie and strong black coffe.Avatar by KeePony: http://www.fimfiction.net/user/KeePony
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You have no reason to be sorry, my friend. I'm still giggling.
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Good job............
*runs away*
But yeah, not a bad story. I could picture each of their reactions quite clearly based upon your descriptions which added to the feel behind it. Having Twi have that kind of an explanation behind it is actually quite plausible too... which is a little creepy and amusing at the same time. Soo..... yeah. Nice work on this one.
Oh dear god.
Ahahahahaha wow. It was... weirdly in-character. I wanted to stop reading but... I could not. And that's pretty epic. Just like Twilight, really, to study that part of her life with as much intensity as everything else.
Loved Twi's research it was so in character! Great story and I do tend to find Rarity as a lesmarian more believable than some of the other characters. Looking forward to any future efforts.
hahaha not bad not bad had me laughing till the end as soon as i read the zebra fetish i knew rarity and twi were gonna go a round lol
Wow. Just. Wow.
Somepony put a lot of thought into how Twilight would go about studying sexual preferences before writing this. I began reading this because I thought it would be amusing. I continued reading because I couldn't stop laughing at all the little things that tickled my funny bone in just the right places.
Well done. I was quite impressed.
Oh my god I loved this lol.
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Smoking grass, not eating it? Now this is new! (Fluttershy's dealers?)
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Thanks. The "weirdly in-character" comment feels best, because I worked hard to make them stay the *same* character during the story, never mind in-character with the show. I sat editing it and thinking "dear god how can I have her say A AND B, that's not possible" and keeping the general lines but moving them between speakers to at least create an illusion of consistency.
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Yeah, it was rather obvious. Rarity coming onto Twilight is the thing I feel the least satisfied with; I feel it comes out of nowhere. Her dare was added late in the process, actually, just because A, humiliating Rarity is hilarious (she is best pony) and B, I wanted to have a bit of shipping at the end which worked as revenge for Rarity's Greatest Fantasy.
BTW, if you want to keep your thoughts dirty, imagine that Twilight has a whole box of "ethnic" costumes for various non-pony ungulates, and that they went through it all in one night. Besides the official African zebra and Native American buffalo (this show is weird), I am writing a serious fic about what is essentially Scandinavian reindeer ("Hello. I am Inga from Sveden!"), and I am sure you can make up more, you naughty people. But I aint gonna write it. So there!
Short enough that one doesn't feel weighed down by the length, yet long enough that it has good substance to it, and it keeps you intrigued throughout. I saw no grammatical mistakes, and the text flowed fairly nicely from one paragraph or dialogue line to another; there was the odd jerky moment, but few and far between - it didn't make the read an unpleasant one. Overall, a simple, funny story. Good show.
Now if you'll excuse me. I have to go and finish laughing my face off.
Well that interesting haha. Good story.
Good story. The one thing you'll want to watch out for is Flow. There were a couple places towards the beginning where more than one character spoke in the same paragraph. You'll want to break those up. Also, there are a number of places where the speaker could be made a bit clearer. For example, take these two lines:
”But Twilight...” Fluttershy asked. ”This was really dangerous! I mean, you could have got sick, or with foal, or hurt by some maniac...” Twilight nodded.
”I knew that. The theoretical literature concerned such dangers, since much of it discussed the morality of sexual behavior and possible dangers. But I made sure I took all precautions!”
This could be made clearer by writing
”But Twilight...” Fluttershy asked. ”This was really dangerous! I mean, you could have got sick, or with foal, or hurt by some maniac...”
”I knew that," Twilight nodded. The theoretical literature concerned such dangers, since much of it discussed the morality of sexual behavior and possible dangers. But I made sure I took all precautions!”
The first way it's written, the reader might do a double-take to confirm that Fluttershy said that second sentence. For the most part I didn't have much trouble keeping the speaker straight, but there were a few instances that threw me off. Just something to consider.
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Thanks a lot. This is exactly the kind of advice I need for writing!
I actually personally prefer writing using a dash to start lines of dialogue, but it seemed people didn't like that, and I still find myself fumbling when using quotation marks. Thanks for helping me!
I....really don't know how to react to this
I-I can't stop giggling, at the end I had a
face but your comment at the very end just had me falling over with laughter, I still can't stop laughing. Great job with making this fic cause I know that I had fun reading it, oh man I need to tell my friends about this.
ok can't belive twi has a "kinky" side(well in this story) and i'm confused of how to react
wait:molestia:
eyup she's coming
This is full of awesome.
Wow, this is awesomely hilarious.
Luna approves of Twilight's studies.
Instant favourite! I hope we get to see some more :D
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Not of this story in itself; it is completed, as you see. But I seem to have a talent for writing this kind of story, so there might be more of those.
The laughes! they come and take away the ..... dam! they took it before I could write it down. Much praise is given!
Oh the lulz! This is fantastic! The little verses Rarity does at the end are hilarious.
By far one of the most amusing things I've read in a while. Well done!
It was a good read, I enjoyed it.
Seemed a tad forced in a few places, in my (not so good) opinion. But it made me laugh, a lot. So what the buck... XD
That pretty much sums my reaction to fic so GOOD JOB!!!
19377 IT MUST BE DONE
You really put a lot of thought into this, didn't you?
I have to say, though, that this was a really funny read!
Good job!
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I'm not only a neurotic librarian like Twilight, I actually share her tendency to overthink things.
Glad you liked it!
I found this incredibly amusing (read: laughing my ass off), but the Rarity thing was kind of forced. I personal would have liked to have seen what Pinkie Pie thought once she had read the essay in its entirety, perhaps when she returned it the next day, but I don't know. That's just what I would have done. Otherwise, Great job!
I don't have much to say but I thought it was very funny and stayed in character well enough. I'll say no more because I want to read Twilight's explanation for the "sleep" study again.
I like these stories dude. Keep at it. 
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Thanks for the kind words.
I agree with the forcedness of the hookup at the end; it wasn't well prepared enough. I have no idea of what Pinkie would have thought about the essay at further reading, mostly since I don't know what it contains more than what is said in the story! One idea would be very farfetched but strangely logical: when you prepare an academic paper, most often you are supposed to have someone "oppose" you and deliberately find faults so you can improve on your research. Since the paper was a private project, no one did, so Pinkie could turn up and start doing that, donning a mortarboard hat or something. But I think I have exhausted that bit of humor already, and it would be less fun to people who didn't have to do it IRL.
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No words to describe it. Poetry! They should have sent a poet.
Just a few things-
This picture of Twilight is one of the very. very few things concerning character development that are
a- WAY off the way they get over in the series but still
b- it could have happened like that.
(Meaning that it's not like that happening in her 'background-story' would contradict with the way she is portraied.)
And just for the sake of completeness:
”Looking for the Checklist?” wondered Rarity. “Because I wash every day.” priceless!
5 / 5 !
I'm glad I decided to read this on a whim.
It was a very amusing story.
I'll be sure to keep an eye out for more stories from you.
Keep up the good work!
This was great! Very funny and in character - I enjoyed reading it :)
It`s... most definitely giggleworthy.
Well that was just fantastic! I was laughing the whole time. I even snorted at AJs comment about Twi and her books. Snorted. I haven't snorted in years! And the whole thing was so detailed. I could clearly imagine every scene in my head. On top of that, they were all so in-character. You got their personalities down. I dont exaggerate when I say this, that was quite possibly one of the best and most entertaining stories I've ever read! Bravo sir, bravo. You are a gentleman and a scholar. Have some SWAG emoticons.
Very, very funny, and like many people have said, almost disturbingly true to the characters. Twilight would do something like that.
Science, Science everywhere...
Hilariously done
Awaiting picture of Rarity in zebra getup
Up until the last bit, I enjoyed this, even if my brain blew a few fuses trying to understand Twilight's logic.
i demand comics of this
I didn't expect to enjoy this one, but I read it anyways, and I was pleased to be wholly incorrect. Quite amusing! Huzzah!
I was surprised though, when Twilight denied borrowing Princess Celestia's stash...
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Well, y'know, you don't tug on Superman's cape, and you don't mess with Celly's stash. Known fact.
Thanks for enjoying it.
384864 unless your luna also now i strangely want to read a fic of twilight going out with a griffon o btw which sex was the griffon twi had the stand with?
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I haven't the faintest idea. *literally tosses coin* Male?