What do you get when you cross a down-on-his-luck earth pony, an ex-Enclave pegasus mare and a naive unicorn from Stable 6? One of the strongest friendships forged in postwar Equestria. (Spin-off of "Fallout: Equestria" by Kkat)
4512484 Thank you for the feedback! I shall take your advice to heart and begin revising the chapters. Your comment was very helpful, which gives me a much better perspective on my writing. Not only that, but feedback implies that this story is salvageable. Whether that's true or not, we shall see when I'm done editing chapters 1-5.
4513229 Right. You're referring to the "Show, don't tell" rule of writing. I've considered what you said. Chapter 1 is still a bit short, but I've nearly doubled chapters 2-3's length. It adds more detail and such. I'll work on chapter 4 next, but I feel that chapter 5 might not need such heavy revision. Thank you again for being so helpful.
needs work
4511890 Thank you. That was very informative.
4512484 Thank you for the feedback! I shall take your advice to heart and begin revising the chapters. Your comment was very helpful, which gives me a much better perspective on my writing.
Not only that, but feedback implies that this story is salvageable. Whether that's true or not, we shall see when I'm done editing chapters 1-5.
4513229 Right. You're referring to the "Show, don't tell" rule of writing. I've considered what you said. Chapter 1 is still a bit short, but I've nearly doubled chapters 2-3's length. It adds more detail and such. I'll work on chapter 4 next, but I feel that chapter 5 might not need such heavy revision. Thank you again for being so helpful.