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Octavia has reached a breaking point with her roommate Vinyl's behavior. So what better way to teach a pony with a blimp sized ego a lesson than by blowing up her like a balloon?

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I might give it a read, im gonna favorite it so I can read it later.

4508759 y not just add it to ur 'read later' list?

4508829 then I might forget it, if I see the "1" red star, I will remember, I have a lot going on in my life so I might forget if I put it in my "read later" list.:applejackunsure:

This is actually...a really hilarious fanfic...wubloon lol I laughed out loud a few times...you captured what I believe vinyls personality would be and the ending made me snicker as well....my only criticism would be that there are a few grammatical errors....so I think you should consider using a proofreader...I am thinking those errors may be why this story has so many downvotes already....and it's too bad because the idea and dialogue are quite good :)

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Glad you liked the story, as for grammatical errors I already put it though at least two people so there shouldn't be that much in the way of mistakes (though I am horrible at self correction so what do I know?). Regardless, I'll try to find the time to look the story over and see if I can't fix any of these mistakes. As for the down votes, it's a little disappointing (what with this being my first Fim story and all) but I'm not bothered that much by it really. The grammar might play a role in it, but I think it might have more to do with the fact that some folks just don't like inflation stories like this.

Still, glad you liked it and that I got you to laugh if nothing else.

4509538 Well whenever you find the time to read it, be sure to let me know what you think! (Also, apologizing for any grammatical errors that might still be left over, I'll be sure to look the story over one final time for any remaining wrongness when I get the chance.)

Very nice!

I finally got around to reading it, it was awesome. THUMBS UP.

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Thanks! Happy to hear that you liked it, anything in particular stand out story/writing wise?

4547115 I think it was cleverly written. Had a good sense of humor, those are the big dogs right there.

Slowly, Octavia turned around only to get a very up close view of the filly's flank. “What do you see there?”

“S-some pants and what looks like a boiling cauldron?”

“Exactly, do you know what that means?”

I'm sure you meant 'plants' there, but that made me wish Octavia had replied, "You're good at doing laundry?" :rainbowlaugh:

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Ah. Grammar errors. Yes, I did indeed mean plants there. Hopefully you liked the rest of the story, though.

Oh, sure. I always like an expansion story where the protagonist is having fun with it, and this was cute and funny. I just liked that line, too, regardless of it being a typo.

>“What about accidental popping?” Ocativa asked
-Just pointing ->Octavia.

> 'Blimp N Bloat' seemed to be EXCATLY
-Exactly.

>That is until she Once they had explained
-Huh... I think words were forgotten or the phrase was half-done ?

>the Blimp n Bloat from Apple Bloom ()
-Not sure how those errors happened ?

An interesting take on the concept. :twilightsmile:

I would point out that there are some grammatical and typographical errors, but it seems that has already been spoken of. Since it doesn't look like they've been corrected, I will remind you that it is possible to edit a chapter even after it is published. You just go into the chapter and hit the edit button on the top left (assuming you're logged in as the author). It seems like most people don't realize this. :applejackconfused:

5694666 I am aware that the story can be edited and while it is on my to-do list of things to do... I unfortunately have other things to take care of that are higher up on that list, and when combined with my natural laziness... Yeeaaahhh. Granted, I will eventually get around to looking the story over for errors and the like, so thanks for the reminder. And, incidentally, thanks for faving both stories! Anything stand out in particular between them?

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I can't really say on the second one, yet. It's in my to-read pile. :twilightsheepish:
(This is a remarkably large pile, but it is near the top.)

I do appreciate the fact that the first thing on Octavia's mind was devourment.

5705566 Thanks, I think? Think the inflation scene turned out alright?

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Although I'm no professional when it comes to criticizing the pacing and all that, I think it turned out great!

Pretty good story.
I liked it. 10/10.

5937400 Thanks man! Know it's not perfect by any means, but I'm glad you liked it!

Aww,I want a Derpy inflation now:derpyderp2:

Y'know, I was having a pretty bad day... and then I found this fic, and it gave me a really good laugh and made me feel better! :rainbowlaugh:

It's definitely one of the better fics I've stumbled across! Really nice!

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Considering how old this story is, comments like this are a surprise to be sure, but a welcomed one. Glad my writing cheered you up (considering I went for a more comic then out and out fetish tone for this one). Wrote a sequel to this story, too, if you're interested enough to want to check it out.

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