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My name is Twilight Sparkle.
I am three hundred and seventy five years old.
Except for Spike, all my friends are dead...But not for long

Betrayed by Celestia, and isolated in her castle with only Spike for support, Twilight Sparkle enacts a powerful spell to reincarnate the element bearers through her own body.
Her friends will be reborn, and, with the trials of being a mother to her friends ahead of her, an unraveling secret from the past following her at every turn, and the possibility of a brand new life so close in reach, Twilight just might be reborn too.


Credit for both the inspiration for this story and cover picture go to
Crystal Leviathan

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 1016 )

not exactly into the idea that celestia got the other mane six killed.......... like at all.

love this story and
Spike and twi forever!!!

This looks interesting, it needs some serious work, but the idea has potential. I shall follow this for now and see where it goes.

4507724 I agree with that sentiment.

However, if we get to see Celestia's reasoning behind it I will know whether she is to be a villain, misguided mother figure, or if she just made a mistake. So far the premise is enough to keep me interested in seeing where this goes. I will happily be giving you updates as this progresses. Updates like, "Oh I liked that chapter," or, "That was a little boring," or, "Hey! You spelled 'flowers' wrong."

4507724 I think that's more of a misunderstanding on twilight's part.

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It could be about interpretation, about Twilight feeling that Celestia is directly or indirectly responsible, whether it's true or not doesn't matter because it's what Twilight feels

I'd recommend getting someone to proofread your chapters before you release them, but the idea itself is one I'm quite intrigued about. You have my attention. :raritystarry:

i really like the story:pinkiehappy: but i got to know how come Twilight did not add Shining Armour to this spell since he is her bbbff and her is just as in portent to her as her friends:rainbowhuh:

Well that was... something.
I look forward to seeing what new things you have to bring with this story. :pinkiehappy:

Oh...my :rainbowderp:
Thank you so much everybody for all the comments
Just, wow.
I'll definitely take into consideration all your feedback (Especially the comments about proofreading, I know that's definitely one of the areas I struggle with) and I really, really appreciate it. :yay:

WOW!! Seriously, I think there was a fic or two who tried something like this. But in all honesty, I want to see where you go with it! I'm liking this so far, and can hardly wait for more!! Good luck, and man do I want to see how Tia screwed up here.

Hummmm, seems interesting. This will be in the read later until there are at least 3 more chapters.

4508372 I feel that is probly closest to the truth. Celestia has always been a motherly figure, albeit a medlesome one, and her concern for Twilight is in line with that charactor.

My question is how will the other Five feel about this? They may be foles now but how will they react when they are older? Would they want to be reincarnated (perhaps multiple times) to be with eachother again? Will they be the same ponies they once were after a different upbringing? Will Twilight regard them as her friends or her children? How will they see each other?

Will the princess attempt to end these 'abominations'?

What, if anything, will they remember?

Is Celestia evil?

awesome start to a promising story.

At the summary you had my curiosity. . . now you have my attention.

Very interesting concept for a story. I can see so many possibilities with this one.
It needs a little work in editing, but not so distracting that it takes away from the story.
I can't wait to see what you do with this. I will definitely be watching this one.

You have aroused....my curiousness for this story

Could have sworn I read a oneshot with pretty much this exact premise

EDIT - Ah, I did

I didn't know what to expect, clicking on the link, but I think this is honestly one of the most interesting concepts I've ever chanced across. I'm surprised at the ingenuity and flow you've employed here. I do, however, have a few concerns:
-The "monster" you described could be referenced as something less...bland. Perhaps give it a name or something of the sort. I don't picture Celestia being all:trollestia: "Oh, Twilight, don't cry, I know what killed your friends. A monster." :trixieshiftleft: ..See what I mean?
-Your spacing is a little iffy, we see walls of text instead of neat, spaced-apart paragraphs.
-A fair amount of grammatical errors sitting around throughout the fic.
It appears that despite the calls for editing, nobody is offering services. I'm opening the option of taking a run thru and PM'ing changes if you'd prefer.

Hoping to see this become something great!
~Dash The Stampede

Hmm I've read a story like this before, where Twilight returns her friends back into babies and repeats this cycle for a few hundred years before Celestia puts and end to it.

Okay. The idea of Twilight 'giving birth' to her friends has me curious. According to Twilight's nightmare, Celestia, disguised as a monster, killed her friends. I am anxious to find out what really happened. As for what Twilight is doing, using magic like this to recreate life, has to have a steep price.
"There are three sides to every story."

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Didn't Bad Horse or Obs do one like this? Where Twilight would age-regress the remaining girls (Fluttershy died of old age, which made Twilight snap in the first place) back to foals each time they were about to die. And she'd educate them each time on how to be a perfect clone of the girls she knew the first time around?

And Celestia showed up trying to convince Twilight to stop fucking around with nature and what she was doing to the girls was beyond monstrosity.

Nice so far.

Just a note, 'prolouge' is actually spelt 'prologue'.

Comment posted by AustralianSenior deleted Jun 7th, 2014
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Hmmm interesting. this bears watching to see where it goes.

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Is the shift key on your computer broken or something? Because I never see you use capitalization in your posts...ever.

4509732 what a fitting avatar...:trixieshiftright:

This story has all the earmarks of a spectacularly ugly train wreck in the making, and I'm not taking that ride with you. I wish you the best of luck trying to make this work.

You absolutely MUST get an editor and prereader.

This is an extremely interesting story.:twilightsmile: I do suggest you get a proofreader, but here's a quick tip. Every time you have quotation marks, make sure to put a comma or period (or exclamation or question mark!) at the end. For example:

"Please" a voice pleaded, too fuzzy to make out it's owner "It's been months"

Becomes

"Please," a voice pleaded, too fuzzy to make out its owner. "It's been months."

Punctuation aside, the premise is interesting and I can't wait to see where this goes. :trollestia:

-Spirit

With some editing here and there could improve the already awesome story into something more amazing. :pinkiehappy:

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It was this story here. I'm be interested to see where The-Pony-Librarian takes this plot bunny.

Having them killed left a dark taste to this prologue, dying of old age would've been fine. Maybe add a dark tag? It feels dark

You know what would be awesome?Them still having their memories.Id like to see this premise.

Needs spacing but apart from that-... I am so following it.

God I want to see more of this. It actually sounds like an interesting story and has my attention like a Venus fly-trap has a fly.

I'll be watching this one and see where it goes. To let you know, however, you have big shoes to fill with a premise like this one. Best of luck!

4510327 It's been done before yes, but as you said let us see how this one works out. Any author can put a new spin on a classic story and make something worthy.

Wait how did they die?

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Oh, well that other story had them dying of old age before Twilight kept unaging them along with Fluttershy having been dead for a long time. So this story is actually different by quite the large margin in that respect. Regardless, I enjoy seeing different renditions of similar ideas so even if it was the 'same" I'd be curious of how it'd go when presented by a different author.

I should have placed that link and my statement of how I was interested in this plot unfolding separately, looks like having them together like that made it seem like they were together in that context.

4509999 because I don't bother using capitalization in just comments.

Please continue, I like where this is going :pinkiehappy:

Please continue! I really like this so far! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Concept flying out of left field for me, but I can roll with it. Digging the sleek creepiness of the whole thing.

I like how twisted the idea is to give birth to your friends, and raise them as your children. this is good :3 I want to see more. :ajsmug:

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From old-age I would assume.

I believe that it's spelled "Prologue". I love the story so far! Please continue it.

*sniff* so they died by a monster:fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

This intrigues me, I'll have to keep an eye on this story:duck:

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Peek-a boo, I see you!:pinkiecrazy:

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