• Member Since 7th Apr, 2012
  • offline last seen May 21st, 2012

the_guy


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this is story of vinyl scratch, how the legend started, her ups and down, right up to the interview. I don't really know how to describe stuff sorry

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 17 )

"This startled Vinyl, she had never been asked this before. The emotion is Grey's voice was very unexpected, and almost alien. The question caught her off guard, it took her a little bit to recover." My comment is that I get it. she's startled, it came from nowhere. please, stop beating me over the head about it. Everything else is good, a few errors here and there but overall good. ON TO CHAPTER 2
:pinkiehappy:

"One time when I was about ten my mom took me to the market. We lived in the outskirts of town, so when my mom took me to the market I would always got so exited, because from the first time my mom took me there..." so much repition. I'm only saying these things to help, no malicious intent, I promise :scootangel:

528620 thanks :pinkiesmile: I will try to remember those for the future

ok. good. i will watch you to see other stories you write. I've lost my interest in this story. only cause im not interested in vinyl, but if i was i would keep reading! :ajsmug:

Most of the errors I noticed were simply typos. My suggestion to combat this: either slow down when typing or re-read through your story to make sure everything is spelled properly.

Seems nice. Would love to help proofread if you need it.

528834 that would be really helpful, but how?

Wow! What a cool story :rainbowkiss:

535473 hmm, I don't know. I can message you a list of corrections.

Great chapter! Only one minor thing. "I loved every minuet of it." :pinkiesmile:

546720 o lol, my bad, thanks :twilightsheepish:

Is it just me, or does it sound weird that a 31 year old stallion is so close to a 14 year old mare?

551580 ya I figured some ppl might think that way, but honestly, in true friendships age should not matter right?

Just if it's not perverted in any way, yeah. Although True did kill that guy, so... a little weird.

551619 don't worry, there will be no shipping between these two, and honestly, this entire chapter was not planed in the slightest, it just came out of me, you kno what i mean?

hello everypony, for anyone who is interested, I am taking a break from this story. I will finish it, but I have started to get slightly bored with this story, and it is going a whole crop ton slower than I thought u would be, she should of been in ponyopilis by now if we were following my original plan. i apologize to anyone who wanted to keep reading this, but you need to admit, this chapter was lacking, even I could tell, and i was getting some serious wright-er block. so I hope you can forgive me. I am righting another story right now however, it only has one chapter so far, and at the time of making this comment has not been approved yet, so if it is up by the time you read this, please check it out.

The_Guy signing off :twilightblush:

hello? Hi this is DaFuqIDontEven, but I am also The_Guy the writer of this story, Uuuuuuuuuuum it just so happens that I got banned... I duno if I'm going to be able to get my account back, but I'm gona try, maybe I could re-post these fictions and just say I have permission from the author... which i do obviously.
so what happened was I made a new fiction, and when it finished "moderation" I got two E-mails the first one said that I passed moderation, and the second one said I fail moderation. one line said "Your story love letter has failed moderation on FimFiction for the following reason:" and then nothing after that. in the line below it says "Please make the required changes and resubmit." but I cant do that cuz 1 Im banned and 2 YOU GUYS GAVE ME NOTHING TO CHANGE!!!!. so if anybody has any ideas I would really appreciated it!

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