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Pen Mightier


I proved my namesake in a duel of honour. The crayon never stood a chance.


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Nightmare Moon was indeed banished. Where to was another matter entirely. Through an unfortunate series of events poor wittle Woona ends up sealed away inside a young boy living on an entirely different rock. Then one fateful day, on the verge of death, the boy gets to meet his inner self. He certainly wasn't expecting a little blue horse intent on snuggling him the rest of the way to death.

With the ninja exams quickly approaching, the boy needs help. And the ever-helpful Woona knows exactly who to ask. Ponies of course, cause ponies are always nice and helpful! That's what big sister says! Now armed with the power of the pony summoning contract, the boy attempts to summon a pony able to teach him something, anything, other than the absolutely deadly 'death-by-snuggles' technique.

Naruto crossover. Yet another one of my stories that will explode violently if taken seriously. Handle without care. Leave your sanity at the door. You have been warned.

Featured 4 - 6 June 2014. I'm not even entirely sure how, but many many thanks for all the interest and support that made that possible! You guys have double-double-doubled the fun!

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 327 )

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just the description made me laugh

Great story I hope their is more.

Damnit... I... Damnit! I want more but I agree with you that there's little more to be done with it. I'll just have to satisfy with this and say you did a great job. :twilightsmile:

*tombstone* Here lies Orpheus Defense.....He died of an exploding heart caused by cuteness overload.

ALL THE SUMMONS BE FILLIES/COLTS! :yay: :scootangel:

Continue on, good sir.

Apparently I love everything you write! :rainbowlaugh: Honestly I just love the brand of comedy you have. It's always fun from start to finish!

This is great and I think you can make this work! Please if you can make it a story!!!!

Favoriting just in case there IS more.

But, where did the scroll come from? :fluttercry::pinkiegasp:

Great story though! So glad I'm following you! Like a stalking stalker type person!....so stalky! :rainbowkiss:

This is just beautiful, I love it!
Please, PLEASE consider continuing this story as I have never read something like this before.
I like it how Luna was a little filly... And am kinda worried about where she pulled that scroll out from...
There is so much left to learn! So much to read!
I really hope you continue to write this. :)

A brilliant tale thus far! I cannot begin to say how amazingly well you've written it. The comedy was simply hilarious and I would love to see more of it.

Best of luck to you,
-That Hooded Fella

Every time luna speaks in this I go: DAAAAAWWWWWW:rainbowkiss:

Not bad. I don't always read Naruto fics, but this... Please, carry on! :pinkiesmile:

Please do more pwetty pwease?!?:raritystarry:

I like. I like a lot. I'll be keeping my eye on this one in the hopes that you continue it.:twilightsmile:

:twilightoops: And there goes my heart. Woona-tized cuteness overload.

but its not finished, :applejackconfused: what is this? i want to see the senin shit themselves over the most cute summons and arguably the most powerfull. :yay:

You, sir, were born to write comedy.

So... It's not a legends of the legendary heroes crossover. Honestly, this is probably better. But you had me going for a second until I saw the cover.

This story was also lots of fun. One more like this, and I'll have to start following you! My only criticism is that Woona is 'slightly' hard to understand. But the adorbs make up for that, I think.

MOAR! DAMMIT! GIVE ME MOAR! :flutterrage:

If you don't continue this awesome story, I will report you for trolling.:ajbemused:

Thwice darn, I thawt I was ovew my Woona addiction...

There is NO WAY this can be a one-shot. Too many feels, too much potential...TOO MUCH WOONA!!! Seriously, I am tempted to PAY YOU to continue this fic! Seriously, it's good, great even!! Moreover I'd say the idea of Naruto eventually gathering the Elements together, and better still being the force that heals poor Luna of her scares from being Nightmare Moon would be amazing! Also, possibility Naruto goes to Equestria either as Luna's container or she's freed from him and he hitches a ride there has me chomping the bit here!!

Great work, and hoping for more!:pinkiehappy:

Another oneshot turned into a story. You gotta stop doing this to yourself.

Needs more Moons Eye Plan. :moustache:

a bit OCC but i dont care it was great

It's too bad, this premis certainly had potential. Elements of Harmony banish NMM to Naruto's world, NMM replaces Kurama, then when the Fourth Hokage split the 'demon's' chakra between ying and yang it effectively separated the Nightmare from Luna, with so much of Luna's power(and mind) taken by the Nightmare she is regressed into a second childhood. Lower the silly by about 40% and you could have a real, quality story here.:moustache:

... Could you maybe continue this? (Though you can, you know, cut back on the 'Woonaisms'. We understand that she speaks like a foal. You don't have to spell is all out. X3

(It's fine if it's left as a one-shot, but if you do decide to continue this, please dispense with the Woonaisms in future chapters, fr readability's sake. We can easily add the Woonaisms in our head.)

Why is Luna de-aged? It's cute and all, but why. I never got the whole Woona thing. Please explain.

Also, that couldn't have been Rainbow Dash that save him. If Luna is still banished, then RD shouldn't even be born yet.

In a large puff of smoke, another horse appeared, although this one was slightly taller and very purple. "What?" it said, blinking and looking around. "What happened? Where am I?" It looked at Naruto, pointing a limb at him. "Who are you?"

"You have a duty, miss Unicorn," Naruto said in his best mock movie-announcer voice. He pointed at Sasuke. "You see that monkey over there? The really moody douchebag with the blue hair?"

"Yes?" the horse said, its large eyes shining.

Naruto recalled the brief description of this horse from the summoning scroll, and quickly formed a fool-proof plan in his head. "He hates books."

The horse twitched.

"He thinks books are stupid and useless. The only way to learn things is hands-on. Teach him a lesson."

The horse looked like it was about to have a seizure. "Hates... books? Useless? Stupid?! HOW CAN YOU HATE BOOKS!?" it shouted. "BOOKS ARE EVERYTHING! WHY DOES THERE EVEN EXIST A CREATURE THAT HATES BOOKS!? I HAVE NEVER EVEN SEEN SOMETHINGSOSTUPIDANDCONTRIVEDHOWCANANYPONYHATEBOOKSIDON'TEVENHOLYCELESTIAJUSTWHYWHYWHYWHYIDONTUNDERSTAAAAAANDD!!"

Naruto felt a bead of sweat trail down the back of his head as the horse convulsed on the floor, its limbs flailing every which way. "That didn't go like I thought it would..."

more more more :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

Okay.
He either summoned Nightmare Moon...or Celestia.

Either way, awesomeness abounds.

I couldn't stop laughing throughout the entire story:rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy:. Please do more of this...I'm begging you.

Okay, the description made see how incredibly stupid this is... Of course that means I'm going to read it.

Added to Later Reads and Upvoted cause I giggled.

Well I'm guessing he summoned Rainbow Dash.

This was stupid but amusing. But it could definitely use a decrease in the :ajsmug:"Fucking Annoying":ajsmug: factor if you continue it.:moustache:

I'm a sucker for a good Naruto crossover, but this one needs a bit of work.

First off, I get cognitive dissonance trying to follow Naruto's thought pattern - one second he's a winy, infantile brat; then he's an intellectual. Then he's done with extremes and it's like I'm reading the mindset of an average person.

The second thing that really makes this hard to enjoy is Luna's lisp. Apparently she's been regressed in age far enough that she can't even speak; but she can perform advanced magic and has full knowledge of the art of summoning. That's like a toddler spouting off trigonometry. To be honest, Luna's entire dialog made me cringe.

Finally, I get thrown off by references that don't fit the world they are used in. There are no nukes in the world of Naruto - so phrases like "nuke crossing the tracks" feel really out of place.

Aside from that, I really like the story idea, and I hope you continue this!

This story kinda gives me an idea. What if Luna or Celestia were the ones sealed within Naruto instead of the Kyuubi. It would make a good series.:rainbowkiss:

Ugh. Too many "Woona-isms" as several posters have called them. A bit of a lisp is okay. It can add character to... well, a character. The occasional vocal stumbling is okay, but with how much you used it? I don't care if that's a direct transcription of how toddlers speak. It's painful to read, and it is an acceptable break from reality to write speech in a way that is easier to read.

The colloquialisms are also a bit of an issue, but not that big of one.

I can't believe I'm going to follow a Naruto crossover. Based on the shitty-ass dub that is #2 on my most hated dubs.
Oh Celestia, here we go.

PS: Ignore everyone who dislikes the Woona voice. That's flavoring the hell out of the story for the rest of us. Despite the indignant bullcrap the haters will spout in response to this. More Woona!

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I just hurt myself re-reading what I wrote. :rainbowhuh:

Yes, I admit I overdid it with Luna. Fixed (and left a little bit in places where I think it still works without taking away from the story). And apologies to anyone out there still trying to clean the sugar shards out of their eyes. With luck, the fun has now been doubled! :twilightsheepish:

Please let me know if there's anything else that needs fixing/can do with improvements. I'm painfully aware of what a rushed job it was and the comments really do help. Thanks.

Just an idea, if you're unsure of whether or how to proceed with this, you could just try to recreate certain points in the Naruto series with Luna in the Kyuubi's place. You could still use these to develop the characters and also have some really good scenes, like action and such, but you wouldn't need to worry about it being incredibly long. Just a thought for if you wanted to continue this as I did enjoy it and would like to see more.

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Not many get two die twice in a day.

That should just be "to".

I want to 'what.' right here, but I'll stay around if this promises to be as funny as it is. Naruto's terrible characterization aside, these characters are amusing.

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No. Stations of canon are a bad thing and you should feel bad for suggesting that he should adhere to them.

W-Woona d-did not give you permission to hug Woona...but...but....it's owkay

Soooo Tsundere! But, needs less Woona and more Luna...maybe if this was purely a crackfic that might work, but not for anything else.

WWWWOOOOOOOOONNNNNNAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!

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