Lost at Sea
I always used to envy Link whenever he set out on his own. Most of the heroic deeds he accomplished were those he did without the help of his loyal horse. He found lost treasure, saved people from horrible fates and defeated enormous monsters. Sure, Navi and I were a big help and part of the team, but the hero of the day was always Link. Most of the time, I accepted that and was happy with the role of the humble helper. But there were times I wished I was the one who could face the dangerous beast in battle and defeat it in a glorious way, with heroic strikes.
This moment when I was at sea with my daughters and their friends? That was the moment when I wished I could take all my previous wishes back. The first thing that ran through my head when that ugly sea monster rose up in front of me was: 'How does Link deal with such things all the time?'
But I had to keep a cool head. Link was not here, so I had to deal with this on my own. A tentacle as thick as my own body came crashing down on the deck, so I quickly dodged out of the way. At least my pony shape was much more nimble than the horse body I had in Hyrule.
Meanwhile, the three kids were running around in a panic.
"Aaaaaaaaah, that thing's bigger than the octopus in the lake!"
"It's gonna eat us!"
"We're all going to diiiiieeeee!"
"Stop running around like a bunch of headless chicken!" I shouted. "Captain! Do you have any cannons on board?"
"Uh… can't say I have," the captain said. "This is a merchant's ship, lass, not a combat vessel."
"What about catapults?"
"Not a single one," he said.
"Bows and arrows?"
"Nnnope," he said, sounding almost like my son.
"ANYTHING we can use to shoot that thing?" I shouted exasperated.
"Sorry, I wish I could help you," the captain muttered. "I really wish I could." Another wave hit the deck and soaked me and the captain from head to hooves. "What the…? Blisterning barnacles! Now see what ye've done, ye overgrown squid: My pipe went out!" Grumbling, he reached for his matches and tried relighting it.
"Looks like it's close combat for now," Applejack grunted as she bucked a tentacle that tried to wrap itself around the main mast. "Horseapples, who could have known we'd be attacked on the open sea?"
"You wanna shoot something at that beast?" Rainbow Dash asked as she flew up. As soon as she was in the air, all her seasickness seemed to be forgotten. "How 'bout a cloud that shoots lightning?" Like a flash, she flew up and pushed a small cloud down, towards the monster. She kicked it once with her legs, and a bolt of lightning shot down, electrocuting the beast. "HA! Take that!"
"Whoohoo, way to go, Rainbow Dash!" Scootaloo cheered, her terror forgotten for a moment.
"Nicely done, Rainbow," Applejack smirked. "Looks like it pays off havin' a pegasus with ya on a boat trip."
I admit, for a moment, I had almost forgotten that pegasi could do that. I've really left Equestria for too long. But I could see that this would not be enough. "Don't cheer for victory just yet, girls," I muttered. "It's far from over."
The lightning had left a nasty, black burn mark on the monster's right side. It let out a wailing screech of pain, but also anger. I turned its one eye towards the cyan pegasus. Most of the bigger tentacles were out of Rainbow's reach, but the ones on its head suddenly shot upwards. Rainbow tried dodging, but to our all surprise, the head tentacles turned out not to be tentacles at all, but instead actual snakes. By the time Rainbow realized that, one of the snakes had already bit her in the leg.
"OW! Hey! Let go! Stupid thing!" she shouted and flailed around, but the snake kept its grip on her while the rest of the squirming appendages surrounded the helpless pegasus from all sides.
"Um, uh-oh," she gulped as she realized her predicament. "Help?"
"Hold on, Dash! I'm-a coming!" Applejack yelled as she pulled a rope out of her hat, twirled it around and threw it all the way over to the monster. I held my breath when I saw the perfect throw… it seemed like in the years of my absence, my daughter had turned into an expert with the lasso. The rope wrapped itself around most of the snake heads, and with a firm pull with her teeth, the scaly menaces were tied up. At that moment, Rainbow managed to free herself with a strong kick to the head of the serpent that was holding her.
"Ha-ha, trussed up like a turkey!" AJ grinned. "What d'ya say now, Squidward?"
The monster's answer was a long tentacle that came at Applejack from behind. "Look out!" I shouted, but it was too late. Applejack was snatched up from the deck and raised up high into the air.
I narrowed my eyes. "All right… enough is enough! I've lost my husband, was almost crushed by a meteorite, was abducted through time and space, turned into a horse that was not even able to talk, was attacked again and again by monsters, was sent on a guilt trip after getting angry at my fairy friend, was unable to keep my Hylian friend from being abducted… and now you giant pile of sushi think you can take my daughter away from me, too? Forget about it!"
I snatched the matches away from the captain, ignoring his protests. I reached into the bag of supplies I had brought from Manehattan. I took one of the bombs I bought, lit its fuse, threw it up into the air, turned around, gave the spherical explosive a good buck and watched how it flew all the way over the water, into the monster's face.
When the bomb exploded, the beast let out its most horrible screech yet. The one tentacle that had Applejack lost its grip on her, she fell down and was snatched out of the air by Rainbow Dash.
"Need a lift?" the cocky pegasus grinned.
"All right, Mom!" Apple Bloom pumped her hoof. "You did it!"
She was right. I saw that the monster didn't have much longer to live. In its throes of death, it twitched and flailed around, whipping its tentacles everywhere. I was about to let out a sigh of relief, but then one of the tentacles came down right where I was standing.
"MOOOOOOOOOM!" Apple Bloom shouted as I was thrown overboard. Everything else I witnessed after that was a chaotic blur of images and sounds. I remember hitting the water and sinking down below. I know I struggled to get back to the surface and then hit my head on something, maybe a plank. Just before my senses left me, I saw how the dying creature was using its final breath to pull the ship apart into two pieces.
Nabooru was standing on a balcony, looking over Canterlot and the vast world of Equestria that was behind it. But her thoughts weren't focused on this new world, they were focused on a dilemma the current Gerudo leader found inside her heart.
According to the goddess her people had revered since forever, the Gerudo used to be ponies of Equestria, instead of humans from Hyrule.
Nabooru was born a human. She was raised in the Gerudo Fortress to be a skilled fighter, thief and leader. In her youth, she loved going on treasure hunts. But as she grew older, the tribe's welfare became more and more important to her. Unlike others, she had realized that following Ganondorf meant not only abandoning old traditions, but also submitting yourself to the dark forces the former king of thieves was tampering with. Conquering other kingdoms? Enslaving, even killing women and children? She would rather die than see her tribe turn into a tribe of monsters.
Ever since Ganondorf was dealt with, her path in life seemed to be clear, guided by the winds of the desert. But now? What was she supposed to do now? Her tribe deserved to know the truth, right? And what would happen if the truth came out? Would the other Gerudo be appalled? Frightened? Curious? What if some decided to go to Equestria and worship the goddess in her own world? The tribe would split and maybe be torn apart because of it.
She looked down at herself. Four quick legs carrying a sleek, sinewy body covered with only the thinnest amount of fur, a fur whose color strongly resembled the bronze skin of her human form. A flowing mane and tail, just as fiery red as her hair. The same bracelets and necklace, adapted to fit her new shape. The same jewel ornament in the middle of her forehead.
'This is what I would have looked like if I was born in Equestria?' she wondered. 'I'm still learning the extent of my powers as a sage. All I did was allowing the spell to adapt my body to this world. Did the magic know my tribe's past here in Equestria and chose this form for me? What about the others? Rauru, Saria and Impa seem like pretty normal ponies. And what about Ruto and Darunia? Do creatures like the ones they turned into even exist here?'
"Are you okay?"
Nabooru turned her head and saw Saria standing there, looking at the older female with concern.
"Saria… what do you see when you look at yourself?"
The filly looked back at her changed body. "A pony, I guess. Is this a trick question?"
Nabooru chuckled. "No, it's not. Sorry, I was just thinking. It's just so weird, being in this new body. And to think that this might be what my people used to look like…"
Saria walked up to her. "You know… there isn't a lot of change happening to a Kokiri's body. Unlike Hylians or you Gerudo, we never grow old. We always stay the same, never changing. There really isn't a lot in our village that ever changes. We live the same careless lives, no matter how old we grow. We stay the same curious, innocent children, not really knowing anything about the world outside of our forest. As for me, I am a very unusual Kokiri. I can leave the forest without having to fear any negative consequences. And the more often I leave the forest, the more I learn about the world. I don't think I'm as innocent or naive as I used to be. My body stayed small, but my mind grew. But now that I changed my body to that of an Equestrian… it's really the first time I ever changed on the outside. But you know the most curious thing?"
"What is it?" Nabooru asked.
Saria smiled. "It didn't affect my mind at all. At first I was afraid that my very first physical change would leave a big impression on me and change my whole view of life forever. But nothing of the sort happened. I'm still the same Saria from Kokiri Forest. Becoming Link's friend, becoming a sage… those things have changed me more than this transformation would ever have."
Nabooru contemplated that. "Are you telling me… that this change does not matter?"
"At least not the physical change," Saria said. "We are formed by our experiences in life, by the decisions we make and the friends we find. What we look like does not usually affect that."
"You're right," Nabooru said. "This form should not matter to me. All that matters is the future of my tribe. And whatever they might think of this, I as their leader should help them make the right decision." She looked down at the forest-green filly, gratitude in her eyes. "Thank you, Saria. Among us sages, you are easily one of the wisest."
The Kokiri smiled. "I'm just helping a friend, that's all. So, are you feeling better? Because Princess Twilight and her friends offered to show us around Canterlot."
"You go on ahead without me," Nabooru said. "There's something important I have to take care of first."
"Oh, okay then. See you later." And Saria left.
'I have to talk to my goddess,' Nabooru thought. 'I want to know as much about the past of my tribe as possible. If I'm going to tell my people about this, I'm not telling them just a half-truth.'
When I woke up, I was gently rocking on the waves. I was lying on a single plank of wood that was floating in the middle of the ocean. Around me, I saw several ship parts here and there, but no ship, no monster, no land and most worrisome: No pony besides me. I was all alone.
I sunk my head. It was probably dumb luck that I fell unconscious on this single piece of wood while everything else sank to the bottom of the sea. I failed them all… my friends, my family, everypony.
"I'm so sorry, Applejack… Apple Bloom…" I sobbed. "I should have never brought you along on this trip… I couldn't protect you after all…"
A splash coming from my right startled me. My eyes went wide when I saw none other than my youngest daughter breaching the surface of the water, holding the unconscious form of her friend, Sweetie Belle.
"A… Apple Bloom?" I stuttered. "Y-you're alive? But… but how?"
"Long story, Mom," the filly gasped. "I'd love to tell you every little detail 'bout it… but before I do that, could you give me a hoof here? Sweetie's heavier than she looks."
"Oh… of course," I nodded, reaching for the unicorn filly and pulling her on top of the plank. After that, Apple Bloom swum next to me and took hold of the makeshift raft as well.
"Dang, I'm beat," she groaned. "Placing you on top of this raft here was hard enough, and then there was Sweetie… I almost thought I couldn't make it."
"Wait, what? Don't tell me you're the one who saved me…"
She nodded, exhausted, but obviously proud of herself. "Sure did. Looks like all that training I did for the Ponyville Swim Meet I joined with Granny sure came in handy." She grinned. "When I fell overboard, I saw you sinking down like a rock. I couldn't get to the others, so I wanted to save at least you. And then I saw how Sweetie was paddling around. I wanted to calm her down, but she was panicking so much, I don't think she even heard me. Then I swum over to her and tried grabbing her, but she just kept flailing her hooves around. I heard slapping panicking ponies helps to calm them down, but I guess I slapped her a bit too hard." She looked at her knocked out friend. "I hope she's not mad at me when she wakes up."
"I think that's the least of our problems, seedling," I muttered. "We're in the middle of nowhere, and I don't see the others anywhere."
"I'm a bit worried about Scootaloo, but I'm sure Applejack and Rainbow Dash are fine," Apple Bloom said. "They've been in tough situations before and always came back."
I felt new respect for my little filly and her trust in her sister. I wished I could feel the same. "Aren't you worried she might be in danger?"
"Well, the first couple of times I was. But Applejack always came back. She promised she'd always be there for the family, and she never breaks a promise. So no, I'm not worried. At least not for them. What about us, Mom? What do we do?"
"We sure can't stay here," I said. "I just wish I knew where we have to go. We can't be that far from the Saddle Arabian mainland, but in which direction should we swim?"
I then felt a stirring next to me. Sweetie Belle was coming back to her senses. "Oooouuuuuh, my head… feels like that one time we went crusading for a headbutting cutie mark."
"Sweetie Belle!" Apple Bloom shouted with joy. "How're ya feelin'?"
"My head hurts…" she grunted. "Where are we? And where are the others?"
"I don't know either," I said. "I suppose none of you girls managed to bring the ship's compass along?"
Apple Bloom shook her head. "No. But Mom, I thought you were an experienced traveler. Doesn't that mean you have a good sense of direction?"
"I never had to have one," I grumbled. "Whenever I needed to find back to Link, all he had to do was play that song on his ocarina."
"What song?" Sweetie asked.
"A really sweet tune a girl named Malon came up with. She even named it after me: Epona's Song." I had to smile at the memory. My good friend Malon… I wondered what she'd say if she knew I was paddling in the middle of the ocean. Would I ever see her again?
I shook my head. This was not the place to be daydreaming. We could not stay here forever. I looked left, right, forth and back but found no evidence whatsoever that could give us any hint about where we were.
'Dangit, Link,' I thought to myself. 'Where are you?'
Deep in the Moon Temple, the adventuring trio decided to take a short break. Both Link and Daring Do would have been able to go on for hours without a rest, but Rarity wasn't used to such long-lasting endeavors.
Link took a bottle filled with Lon Lon milk out of his bag. "Here, guys. Take a sip. We'll need all the strength."
"Thank you most kindly," Rarity said. "I'm so thirsty… but wait, what about you?"
"Ah, I've still got some energy left," he smirked. "I found some hearts in those pots." He ignored Rarity's aghast expression, handed her the milk and sat down next to her. Looking back into the bag, he found the Ocarina of Time. 'Good thing they didn't take this one out of the bag,' he thought to himself. Leaning back against the wall, he raised the ocarina up to his lips and played the first tune that came to mind.
No matter what kind of horrible visions Link's words had instilled in Rarity's mind, they were all gone once she heard the music. "Oh, what a beautiful song," she gushed. "What is it called?"
"Epona's Song," Link replied as he interrupted his playing for a moment. "You know, I always used to play this whenever I needed her help. And she always came running. I can't tell you how lucky I was to have her at my side."
"That sounds like she is a wonderful pony," Rarity smiled. "Applejack can be proud to have a mother like her… and you can be proud to have a friend like that."
"I am," Link smiled. "Because no matter how long my adventure lasted… every time I played this music, I remembered that I was never alone."
He kept playing and Daring Do looked at the little instrument with a little melancholy. Maybe having somepony you can trust in can be nice after all. Her first meeting with Rainbow Dash had helped her realize that, and what she just now heard from Link confirmed it even more.
I was completely lost. North, South, East and West all looked the same to me. I was about to give up finding a clue and just swim in any direction, when I heard something. Something familiar… Confused, I looked around. "Do you hear that?"
"Hear what, Mom?" Apple Bloom asked.
"Sssshhhh, there it is again. Don't you hear it? That music…"
"Um… I'm sorry, Mrs. Apple, but there is no music," Sweetie Belle said.
"But I can hear it. That song… I knew it! It's Link, he's calling for me!" I felt an undescribable amount of joy welling up inside of me when I recognized the tune to be Epona's Song.
"Mom… are ya feelin' okay?" Apple Bloom asked.
"I think she hit her head harder than we thought," Sweetie Belle whispered.
"Be quiet, girls, I'm not imagining things," I grumbled. "And of course you wouldn't hear this, Link is using the Ocarina of Time to call me. Come on, he's in… this direction!" Without any further doubt, I turned our little raft west. "Come on, girls. Start paddling!"
"You sure this is okay?" Sweetie Belle asked.
"Well, I've got no better idea, we might as well try this direction," Apple Bloom shrugged.
I smiled. "Good girl!" Together, we started paddling our hooves.
"Besides, I heard it's not a good idea to disagree with crazy ponies," she added.
I grimaced. "I'm not crazy!"
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Good idea to use Epona's Song to call Epona's party. I can't wait to learn more about Nabooru and the Gerudo.
^ < > ^ < >
A cute, albeit random, reference there.
I just got to thinking that there would be potential for some good exchange of information if Link decided to play Saria's song.
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Yes, if he remembers to think about it.
These are the top 5 jokes I can make about this part of the story.
5. Isn't Squidward supposed to be bald?
4. I hate tying my babies into ponytails!
3. Can someone help me with my hair knots? Oh, thanks Applejack!
2. Let's go pony fishing, Tentalus!
... And the number one joke is...
1. My Little Pony: Hairstyle is Kinky
Gah... sitting juping in my rocking chair I want more
to intressted not trying to figure out everything going on "behind the scenes"
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Haha, nice one.
4531741 Well... as the author, It's YOUR job to let him remember
4532013 Let's add on the fact that Rauru is written within this story as a Hyrule Historian meaning that he may have an idea on who Ghirahim and Demise are.
4532052 The last Zelda game I played was "Mayors Mask" but never ended it. I even never really finished "Ocarina of Time".
4532052
Well, Rauru must have had some sort of life before the events of Ocarina of Time. And since he's wearing a robe, the most plausible explanations are that he's either a scholar, or some sort of mage, priest or nobleman.
4513606
Was that your way of making your comment 20% "Cooler"
rofl,
hehe sorry couldn't resist
4532069 Uh... you mean Majora's Mask? <…<
This is what I played for the end.
4532352 Yes, this guy.
"It's called epo-"
*tabs out and plays song*
4532615
Nope, the plant creatures he meant were the Kikwis.
So even the Songs work in this world....
Will Link Make it Rain inside?
SQUIDWARD!
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4532069 Mayor's mask.. idk why but this is the first thing that came to mind when i read that:
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Well, Ocarina of Time is my second favorite Zelda game. But I love all Links equally.
4532069 I laughed sooooo hard! I kept imagining Link holding a mask that looked like Mayor Mare...
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1- it doesn't make sense. You can't go "it's gameplay mechanics, Link can't fight well without his weapons" to brush away such glaring plotholes, when by those gameplay mechanics we know that Link can kill enemies just as easily by using improvised weapons, not to mention he has superior mass, skill, reach, etc over everybody present if we go by the narrative. Again, Link has magic, magic that makes him absolutely invulnerable, battle magic that can arbitrarily select its targets and leave other things untouched. Not to mention, he could have done that at any point BEFORE they were brought to the temple. Hell, a very simple Farore's wind when the thugs were moving them away from the Twins' eyes, and everything would have been solved before it was a real problem. You could have then the Twins feeling magic, even though they haven't shown that skill before and were surprised by Link's presence in fact which would be another plothole now that I think about it, and dispelling the Farore's wind and putting anti magic on the cage... btu you already showed that they can perform magic from within the cage which is yet another plothole.
But again, you are not explaining those things in the fic, it comes as you forcing things to happen because the plot demands it, it is a plot hole. If you're going to say that the cage was on the way, then show Link removing the mask when the Twins aren't around, trying and failing to break the cage with any means he has, and I mean ANY means, like setting the place on fire and protecting Rarity with his body because that's something Link would actually do. If he is worried that the Twins are going have "higher security measures", that is because he is planning to escape, but he was never shown doing any of the sort. The story comes as "Oh wait, I can remove the mask!" rather than being a tactical asset. A tactical asset that nobody in Equestria knows exists because the Equestrians think that travelling to Equestria means everybody is turned into a pony equivalent, even though you have shown that Link and the Sages actually bypassed that entirely, creating an out of context problem for the Equestrians.
Also, did you forget the bad guy to good guy ratio in the games? There's a reason why Link is considered a one man army. He can take on an army by his own because he is strong enough, brave enough, and clever enough to use everything he can to get the job done. Hell he can kill ghosts by using rocks and sticks, he can neutralize the king of evil using seeds, he can strap a bomb to his face and detonate it at will because it works for him.
This fic's Link is a Link with a decade of experience. Unless he was forced to sleep again most of the time between Termina and this adventure, then you need to explain why Link is unable to get free at any point or even improvise at all. That's such a big plothole I keep thinking of more and more ways that the plot could have been derailed so many chapters before.
Link's main weapons are his strength, his incredibly bright mind, and his will to keep going despite the seemingly impossible challenges. Saying that it's not enough that he only has his strength and brain makes no sense!
2- Ok, I can see that happening.
3- It's another plothole, and it's against what actually happened and is happening. Demise is being destroyed inside the master word and Fi is "keeping watch" over the process. He is being weakened, he isn't growing stronger. If Demise, the real Demise, escaped from the master sword that means that Fi's and the first Link's mission wasn't complete, it means that Fi will reactivate and look for the Hero to help her kill and capture Demise. If you want the events of this fic happening, then Fi should have become part of the cast from the first chapter and explained what is happening, once again derailing the story.
Understanding that there's a plothole doesn't fix a plothole. There shouldn't be a plothole to begin with!
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If you don't know my plans for the fic and the background information the readers just don't have at the moment, you can't say it's a plothole.
4546700 you are presenting it as a plothole. Unless you have presented reasons why it isn't a plothole, it remains a plothole.
It's like saying, the sun exploded, but there's still day and night and nothing bad happened to anybody, so it's the same but the sun exploded. No, you can't say nothing else is different! If you have a person pointing out there's still day and night, and then explaining that this isn't the same world but a space station that is controlling the time and night cycles, the sun did explode and we are in this spacestation because we escaped the event, then there's no plothole
You are presenting so many things that don't make sense, having the characters gloss over the inconsistent stuff, and having things happen because you said so without any logical reason. Those are plotholes, and you said that you wanted people's help to point you to those plotholes. If these many plotholes aren't plotholes, then don't say "Oh, it's not a plothole" outside the story, you have to show in the actual story why it is not a plothole, not tell.
It's like when you had Hylia being the three Sisters' mother and I pointed out that it didn't make sense, that Hylia was subordinated of the Sisters and not really a goddess at all, you fixed that. But all these are plotholes that should have derailed the story so long ago, that this story couldn't exists as it is.
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I'm presenting it from the characters' view. Of course it won't all make sense at once. Does Luke Skywalker know right away that Darth Vader is his father? Does Harry Potter know he's the chosen one? Does Link know Sheik is Zelda? No. Not everything is explained at once and there have often been parts in books and movies were certain plot points don't make sense unless you know the background behind it.
And yes, I will show it in the story. It will be shown in later chapters that are not written yet. I'm still telling you here because you are complaining because of problems that aren't there.
Still, you were right about Hylia and I thank you for pointing that out. But just believe me that some points in this story will make sense when all chapters are finished.
4546449 As far as I'm concerned, I think you are taking too serious. You can point the plotholes, even correct the whole story. but in the end it's the authors decision .
1. Yes, the story has dozens of plotholes, so many I even saw it. I know Link from the very beggining (first game ever played!) and his strength and brilliant mind aren't a lie.
But something has been bothering me... I can't put my finger on it, but it's something related..... 
Ugh... I don't know what it is... Meh, can't remember. Maybe you know? 
Meanwhile, Link is supposed to be a one man army.
Yes, I can't argue against that. His unique abilities make him the perfect hero, well if it weren't for the constant need of wearing thighs and skirts. Many still mistake him with a female gender. Curse you, Miyamoto. It's a boy. Boys don't wear skirts. 
BWAAA. But anyways, the author (probably) knows about this and decided that doing so would have ended the story way long ago. 
If he beats the hell out of his enemies with a simple deku stick, we would be seeing whether Epona decided to stay in Equestria or leave, which I think it's not going to happen. Or maybe it will. 
MEH. 
2. Yeah, it took me a while to figure it out as well.
3.
Remember Demise's curse? 
That's how he at least managed to show his communication through the Twins's talking thingy, a sacrifice ritual. 
The curse hasn't been broken at all, otherwise none other Link would have appeared every time something evil happened. The twins wanted revenge on Link for what he did to them in the Spirit Temple, so they obeyed their 'master' , which in this case is Demise, to accomplish that. A sacrifice just like in Zelda II was the solution to bring him back, even when he was growing weaker inside the Master Sword and Fi's control. 
Both Fi and the Master Sword couldn't control what was happening on the outside and wasn't capable of avoiding resurrecting Demise through a sacrifice or by any necessary means. That's Link and the sages' Job. And their allies as well. 
Heck, it's anyone who isn't evil job.
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That defense doesn't hold any water from the moment you changed the characters' view to somebody who is in the know. It is a specially bad example because you're using Star Wars and Harry Potter, both which showed hints towards the reveals, for example having things happening from Darth Vader's perspective to hint he was related to Luke, and Harry's where the POV never changed unless it was the prologue, and even in HP they outright explained things, while showing hints while working towards the true reveal.
In HP example, let's go with the first book. The kids figure out it is the philosopher stone due to the hints that they kept finding, that Voldemort wants it for eternal life, and that one of the teachers was helping from inside the school. The book didn't suddenly go "Oh no, Voldemort is attacking, the teachers can't do anything for reasons and only the Trio can save the day and it's Quirrel behind everything!" No, they were finding out clues through the entire year, heck even finding the Centaurs in the forest is explained because the attacks to Unicorns wasn't a sudden thing, it had been happening for a while and the Centaurs were looking for the culprit, and then the Centaurs outright explain things to Harry, who it was attack and for what. In fact the day of the attack was a silent thing, with Quirrel and Voldemort luring Dumbledore away so they could try get the stone. The story misdirected the readers into thinking it was Snape by using the bias of the unreliable narrator to hide the fact that the same evidence pointed towards other people. It was a logical progression of events that lead to the events, which the heroes were figuring out through the entire book. You are having things happen because you said so, regardless of how senseless they are
You have to show it in the story, you can't go "Oh boy, somebody pointed a plothole, I will explain it later" No, you have to give hints on the way there. You can't say "Suddenly it was somebody else who was behind everything all along and since forever! And the heroes can't use their powers at the worse moment! But I haven't written it." Let's see Puella Magi Madoka Magica, they did such a good job at foreshadowing events that what seemed plotholes or things that dind't make sense at first were actually used to figure out the time travel aspect of the show, by using the rules the series had provided until then and that stuck with; it was Homura trying to throw off the "villain" of her true agenda, effectively throwing off the less attent audience. People figured that Homura had time related powers, or she was a time traveler, as soon as the third episode of the series. If you are going to show that it was never really Demise, then that would help fix one of the most glaring plotholes (due to the myriad of other events that would break the stablished past of this fic to allow it to happen), but you still have to hint that it was not really Demise. You have to show that Rauru, Zelda and the rest of the sages didn't notice Demise escaping the sword, you need to show that Fi didn't react, you need to show why the master sword is still evil's bane despite not doing its intended purpose, you need to explain why the original curse is even around, creating people like Ganondorf, when Demise is active, because otherwise it nullifies the point of the curse
Look, if you do things as simple as have the Twins say that Link can't remove the mask while he's in the cage, that's ok. If the Twins make the cage anti magic and Rarity is shown unable to use her magic, that's ok. If Link removed the mask and couldn't break out of the cage, that's ok. If Link tried his spells in the past and noticed they aren't working for unknown reasons, that's ok. If you have shown Link unable to fight back against those odds before Daring helps them escape, that's ok. If Zant is immune to the Light spirits' power, and can control them to mortally injure Midna, and you have foreshadowed that Zant got powers that were unlike anything in the Twilight and that the source of these powers helped him become the usurper King, that's ok. If Ganondorf did nothing after he put in danger the Kokiri, Goron and Zora as a plan to get somebody to start moving to fix things, collect the spirit stones, and force the reveal of the Ocarina of Time, tools he needs to gain access to the Triforce, that's ok.
Ocarina of Time has the twist of Ganon entering the sacred realm right after Link removes the obstacles. People didn't go "it does't make sense", because it actually makes perfect sense, because Ganon has been shown to be a schemer and manipulator who has done things in a way that he doesn't need to be there to get things done.
You want mysteries and reveals and twists? Write it as a story that makes sense, not as a poorly thought plot full of holes
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You know what, I'm tired of having to defend myself. There are obviously people who enjoy the story the way it is. If you can't enjoy it like this, feel free to stop reading. I'm thanking you for your advice, but I think you are overanalyzing things. As long as there are people who like the story as it is, I will keep it that way. I won't say anything else to this.
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As for the first counter point, I agree that Link might be able to escape, but remember that not only is he being watched constantly, but he also has Rarity to protect. He needed to wait for an opportunity to escape WITH Rarity, with no weapons he could take out grunts with ease but fighting Twinrova and keeping Rarity safe is a tough bill to fit.
On your third point I agree some explanation is in order, but there are many times in fiction, even within the Zelda series where the villain appears before the game explains how he escaped from wherever.
The point I'm trying to make is that there are potholes to be filled, but there is opportunity to fix them by the end of the fic.
Huh? A single bomb downed the giant octopus? Silly, everyone knows it takes at least three hits to kill a boss!
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It was a very big bomb. To the eye.
Nah, just kidding. The monster was a wuss.
Just a little piece of info for my readers: I'm already working on the next chapter, it should be out not later than tomorrow. So, stay tuned, everypony.
4532666 aah very well
"Besides, I heard it's not a good idea to disagree with crazy ponies," she added.
I grimaced. "I'm not crazy!"
Link, Hyrule logic doesn't work the same way in Equestria.
So, Squidward, eh? I never thought of calling Tentalus that.
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I always considered the Hearts in Zelda games to be some sort of fruit with medicinal properties rather than human organs.
Don't know about you guys but all of this is way too dramatic for a monster that can take less hits than Trixie. I mean seriously, a lightning bolt does damage too it? Rainbow uses lightning for pranks against ponies.
5148760 I actually never thought of that! I always thought they were vessels that contained some sort of healing magic.