This is a bedtime story of how two ponies, an earth pony that wanted to fly and a pegasus that doesn't want wings. This story is about how they make their wishes come true and stuff.
It's actually pretty simple and my first story I'm posting here to see how it fairs instead of collecting dust in my hard drive. I made it while chatting with my friend online when she asked for a bedtime story so I kind of went over the top with it and made this. So yeah. Read and Review it and tell me what you think of it.
The cover image was used with permission from MysteriousKaos.
Chapters (1)
Random...and cute
It was... simple. Yeah. So nothing bad with it, really.
Too many exclamation marks is probably my biggest issue with this. Yes, it's supposed to be a sort of upbeat bedtime story type story, but this is... ridiculous. Exclamation points make up more than half of the sentence ending punctuation here.
Also, as a tip, there's an option for linking cover image source in the story editor.
4477451 Thanks! And yeah I kind of edited this as it was or tried to leave as much of it in contact as it was when I originally wrote it. And then it was really really broken up like every 2 sentences most of the time. But I'll probably go back and edit it a bit later xD Right now it's 1 AM so I need to sleep! But thanks for the input!
I haven't read anything yet, but... why is it that it's Rainbow on the cover who does not want wings? She loves her wings. She needs them to fly. How would she get into the Wonderbolts without being a pegasus? Depicting Fluttershy or Twilight as an alicorn on the cover might make more sense.
4477596 That's just the best pic I could find that represented the story it doesn't really mean that the RD wanted to lose her wings!
And maybe you're just looking at the picture in a different light than I did! Maybe it's RD who's been the earth pony and AJ is the one who wants to lose her wings! 
But honestly, to quote "Bridle Gossip" Don't judge a book by it's cover. 
4477608
Damn. You win this time...
Though, canon-wise...
There are too many exclamation points in this story! It's kinda making my face hurt! No real problems besides that, except for the fact that it's pretty rushed! But judging by the fact that you made this story a long time ago, I wouldn't blame you if you don't want to edit it!
6.5 out of 10!
I can imagine reading this in an excited voice to my younger siblings before bedtime. There were a lot of exclamation points, but they don't bother me.
4477789 I understand what you mean
there were a lot of exclamation points in your comment! 
But yeah I actually do want to/did edit this because I actually put some minor effort into it when I made it years ago 
I've edited it now and am wondering if the score has improved at all now. 
And thanks for the criticism!
4479392 Well, I'm glad you're putting effort into it. And the exclamation points in my previous comment were to poke fun at you...sorry, I'm an insurmountable, incredibly rude smarta
sometimes.
Now that you've edited it, the exclamation point problem has gone away. It's still rushed, but less so. On my scale, you've raised your score to a 8 out of 10.
4479988 Thansk!
I'm honestly probably going to continue to edit it for a while! 
Though there are a few things I'm unsure of going forward. 
Like should I name the earth pony and pegasus? Or keep referring to them as just ponies so the reader can fill in what they're like with their own mind? Ah well that's a bridge to be crossed later and to contemplate until insanity sets in 
Don't be sorry!
It actually made the message get across that much better 
And thanks! 
it's great to know I'm improving! 
I can only hope to make it even better!