In his search for a heir he used one of his treasures a mirror which lead into another dimension. In this dimension there are no Ponies but bipedal beings called humans. They have great potential for hatred and malevolence, in the time as he watched them there where so many wars and bloodsheds. One night in this dimension he took an infant a girl with him home. The child didn’t changed the form like him it stayed as a human. He would raise this girl shape her, teach her make her his heir and he name her Isis Calcite.
Art is from ZantyARZ
Chapters (1)
I like the idea of this story!.. But it looks one of my past stories, save the atrocious grammar doesn't should replace don't many times and it just looked bad.. and the story was so rushed like it wasn't even a epilogue? I don't want to sound rude but your story needs a lot of work and if your like me never post on this sight if your not well known.
You get hate, which now I only write for myself and don't show anybody.. good luck and get an editor.
4482648 No I don't mind it, I know I am not a strong writer and the worst english isn't my first language. I try my best and hope that someone likes it, I didn't wrote it to be in the featurebox just for fun.
Now someone has to write a story called sombras hair make it happen people
4482944 About how fabuless his hair is even better than Rarity
4482971 yes make it a total crack story
4482692 and that's why your an amazing author you do lt for fun this story has potential a few grammar mistakes but English isint your first language will you continue this story?
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That is one of the best reasons to write, because you enjoy it and want to do it for fun.
love it. great idea
I clicked on this because of the cover art. I'm marking it "read later" it because it seems interesting.
I love it post more soon please
4486686 Sorry I got this idea long time ago and It is still a different story as yours. Here a link that proofs that it is a seperat idea date of the thread 05/05/14.
4486744 Oh sorry I didn't know but I really didn't try to copy you! Now I feel bad but it is still a different plot than yours. If you got a problem with my story I'll take it down.
4486776 I read through the first chaper and it is different so much different. I wanted to make a HiE story which is possible even in the MLP universe and I wanted to give Sombra a bit more personality.
This was the biggest grammar problem I saw. Interesting premise. Look forward to future updates.
I.NEED.MORRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEE
And dude please keep this story up its relly good soo far
Good idea, but you REALLY need to work on your grammer
Right, six sentences in and you seriously need some proofreading help on this. And don't ask if I know where some are, because I don't. Now I go and read something else until I can read this without turning on autocorrect in my brain. Not your fault, just the grammar and punctuation sucks.
4490120 Thank you and I agree with you but I got no luck with finding a proofreader or editor.
is English your first language? I only ask because when I was helping you with another thing you had a comment that made me wonder ( I don't recall it at all)
4501430 No english isn't my first language and when I talk it is hillariuos because accent.
Call him a tyrant if you will, but sombra isn't necessarily wrong. To quote a certain badass in anime"
"A king… The king must be greedier than any other. He must laugh louder and rage harder. He must exemplify the extreme of all things, good and evil. That is why his retainers envy and adore him. And why the flames of aspiration, to be as the king is, can burn within his people. Proud king of chivalry… The righteousness and ideals you bore may indeed have saved your nation once. However, I’m certain you know what became of those who were saved, but left to themselves."
4501445 ah I thought so. Also good concept.
4501457 And believe me when I say it isn't so bad. In my school days I got in english (hhmm amercian grading) D or E.
4501474 u got an e? wow it doesn't even exist in our system. props man
4501482 oh than I made a mistake her in germany there is the rating system from 1-6 and I thought it was in america the same with letters
4501491 nah we go A B C D F. cause ya know fuck e
4501499 Okay something new learned today.
4501509 (rainbow appears overhead) The more you know.
4501451 Well I never watched Fate/Zero maybe I start to watch it
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Episode 11 stand alone is well worth the watch, especially since almost all info is pretty much dumped on you in the first episode or two.
This is a very interesting concept. However, as others have stated before me, there are an astounding amount of grammar problems. You don't have to have a person on site be your editor, by the way. A good friend or family member would work fine, if you can't get someone here.
4501499 some schools use e.
5296199 shhhhh no one needs to know
Shame you didn't go further with this story.
This has so much potential...