XX - Denouement
Dear Journal,
Where did the seasons come from? Did the alicorns decree that they were to exist so that nature could take a break from time to time? Were the first ponies who walked this earth in need of a schedule for doing their harvest? Could it be that the ancient goddesses were just bored?
It's snowing outside; snowing hard. What month is it now... November? December? I don't really know. I haven't gone out in a while.
There're plenty of goods in the cabin. Al has lots of food and water, and there's enough wood to keep the fireplace going. I think I can last inside here for a while.
I can't say why, but I'm just not in the mood to go outside. I was never a big fan of snow, or winter as a whole. This time of year makes me think of the holidays, and that makes me think of Mom and Dad.
I think I'll lie down and get some sleep. It's so quiet around here. Even Al isn't purring like he normally does.
Not sure what I'll do when I wake up. It would be nice to have something to read. What do I normally do to pass the time? Oh well, I'm sure it'll come to me.
Dear Journal,
I've been sleeping too much. My mind is reeling from serious cabin fever.
So, today, I felt like doing some work, even if I had to find myself some labor worth the attention. I decided to gather more lumber for the fire. I fetched the axe and went into the backyard. While there, I discovered something peculiar.
There's... a cellar behind my cabin. I have no better word to describe it, really. In the backyard, a lone wooden shack sits. Once the door to the tiny building is open, the interior reveals a series of earthen steps leading deep underground.
I lit my horn and followed the passageway down. To my awe, I discovered a rectangular enclosure—a little room, if you will—about ten feet wide and twenty feet long. There was an unlit lantern hanging from the middle of the ceiling, and I found a metal stand and a stool resting next to one another.
What is that place for? Not only that, but where did it come from? I certainly don't remember an underground chamber being here when I built this cabin. Was it part of the old barn that Rainbow Dash tore down? If it's supposed to be some kind of storage room, I can't imagine how it'd be of any use. And why would there be a shack covering it? It's too small a door and passageway to carry things down.
This discovery has been troubling me all afternoon. I abandoned the search for firewood; I think I can go for another night with the lumber I've currently got. This will give me time to peruse my journal. Maybe somewhere in my past writings I can find out where the cellar came from. I mean, it's entirely possible I simply forgot about it. My mind's been preoccupied lately. I suppose it can explain all the time I’ve spent sleeping.
Al wants more food. I need to stop writing. Blessed Celestia, there's so much snow. I really wouldn't mind seeing some grass and leaves again.
Dear Journal,
I resumed the hunt for more firewood today. It was the least I could do to feel better. Chopping wood really helps me relieve stress, even if the exercise is all in the mind.
Where do I begin? I went back and read through the journal. It's the first time I've done so in months. What I discovered was that I had left several pages blank. Quite literally, there were moments when I would finish a journal entry on one page, and instead of continuing it on the next sheet, I'd skip two, three, sometimes even four or more pages and continue from there.
What stresses me out is that I can't figure out what would have possessed me to do such a thing, and on multiple occasions for that matter. I have always had a thing for neatness and conservation; it's a trait that Twilight infected me with, I suppose. Even back in grade school, a wasted sheet of paper lying smack-dab in the middle of a written manuscript bothered the heck out of me. As a matter of fact, my hoofwriting is typically small and compact, precisely because I like fitting as much onto a single page as possible.
So why would I have left so many sheets blank? This is pestering me to no end. I'm certain I didn't slack off that much while I was in college. My professors would have hung me from the highest bell-tower.
Come to think of it, I only had two or three professors, but that doesn't make sense. Surely, if I graduated from my university, then I must have taken over twenty courses. How could only three professors teach twenty separate subjects?
The fireplace is going to be bright tonight.
Dear Journal,
Ever feel so cooped up that you're absolutely certain you'll go insane? Ever try to amend that by going outside? Ever follow through with that plan, only to end up in a worse place than when you started?
That happened to me today. I decided it was time to stop sitting around in my cabin, staring out at the dreary weather. I seemed to have lost my hoodie, but that was no big deal. I put on Rarity's sweater and trotted into town.
Imagine my surprise when I saw ponies taking down huge bundles of bright red and green decorations from the rooftops and storefronts of Ponyville. I asked them if there had been a parade in town of some sort. Everypony just looked at me funny and said that they were trying to get a leg up on things. When I asked them to explain, I got quite a shock.
This is not November. Nor is it December. We are in January. New Year's was six days ago. There was a great pageant in Canterlot, supposedly the best of its kind in decades. Twilight and all her friends were playing the parts. There was even a famous article about it in the Equestria Daily. I read it with my own eyes, feeling the blood in my veins freeze over.
How could I have missed Hearth's Warming? For that matter, how could I have missed two whole months? I now look back at all those days I spent sleeping in my cabin, and I wonder if there was something wrong with me.
I was in sour spirits all afternoon. I wandered through the snow-laden streets limply, watching with a lethargic gaze as ponies carried fake, giant candy canes and huge heaps of garland into yearly storage. It wasn't that I wanted to feel mopey or anything. It's just that Hearth's Warming is a special time of year, and though I know nopony around here has the wherewithal to remember me for long, it still would have been nice to share in the cheer somehow, if even for a little bit.
I haven't been feeling very cheerful lately, so I decided to do something about that. Before sunset, I stopped by a store downtown that sold novelty toys. I found a little squeaky mouse on a string for Al. As I paid the mare at the counter, we broke into pleasant conversation. She made several jokes in her Stalliongrad accent that cracked me up. There was something warm and happy about her voice; I kept smiling, hoping she would never stop.
Her name is Bon Bon, and apparently she owns a confectionery shop two blocks down. The novelty store, as it turns out, is an expansion to her business. She hopes one day to own a chain of candy and toy stores from here to Canterlot. I hope that her dreams come true; it makes me happy just thinking about it. Nonetheless, night was coming, and I left, but not without giving her my well wishes. If only a small part of her would remember my words...
Dear Journal,
Al loves the toy mouse on the string, and I love it when he loves things. His fur is so warm as he sleeps against me. Even now, I have to lean over him as I write this.
Not sure why I'm making an entry here. I guess it's because my mind tends to wander in strange directions these days. I feel as though my thoughts might disappear if I don't write them down. Now that I think of it, it is rather odd that I keep a journal. After all, I'm not exactly a creative unicorn. It's strange to think that I ever summed up enough sentences to fill such a thick diary.
It's really dusty in this place, and cluttered too. Goddess knows why I've collected so much junk over the last year and a half. For instance, why do I even have all of those musical instruments on the wall? Maybe a mule's trash cart collapsed in the road outside the cabin one day and I just went crazy.
It's not like I can afford a job in this town; I think I'll take the instruments to the marketplace and pawn them for bits. I'd best remember to do one item at a time. If the broker doesn't remember my face, then there's less chance of the instruments' value depreciating. It's cheap of me, I know. But how else am I going to earn money?
Come to think of it, how did I afford these clothes, the firewood, or this cabin? Are the ponies of Ponyville really so generous?
I'm tired of writing so many questions; it's not like they'll be answered anytime soon. I figure it's best not to dwell on it. Al's starting to purr. I think I'll follow his example and go to sleep.
Dear Journal,
Something strange happened today. I heard a loud noise, and next thing I knew I was standing in the center of Ponyville, watching with gawking eyes as Big Mac pulled Berry Punch's house clean off its foundation. He accomplished this quite absurdly, leaping forward in great bounds while having chains affixed to his body.
Believe it or not, that is not the strange thing that happened. What's strange is that after I witnessed this, I stumbled about as if coming out of a dream. I grew alarmed at the loss of snow. Had winter stopped already? Was there a heat wave out of nowhere?
I thought I had grown accustomed to asking ponies strange questions. Nevertheless, I trembled as I marched up to one of the spectators of the Big Mac debacle and awkwardly inquired what day it was. I was told that it was Hearts and Hooves Day.
How is it February already? Just yesterday, it was still blistery, dreary January. Wasn't it?
I immediately thought of Al. I galloped home in a blur. When I arrived, not only was he okay, but his dish was overflowing with cat food, as if some mindless automaton had dumped the edibles there without rhyme or reason.
In a panic, I whipped open this journal and looked at the previous entry. The last time I wrote about anything, it was in regards to pawning a bunch of dusty musical instruments I had lying around the cabin.
Musical instruments? Why would I be carrying those around? I checked my bit bag; sure enough, the thing was brimming with golden coins. The money surely had to have come from somewhere, but it just doesn't make much sense.
That isn't all either. I discovered a trap door beneath my rug in the center of my cabin. There was a wooden hatch, and beneath that was a velvet satchel that looks large enough to fit two dozen horseshoes. What was I using that for? I'm certain at this point that I had a use for it, only I can't remember it now.
How many other things can't I remember? Maybe I should think about perusing my old journal pages...
Dear Journal,
The weather is getting warm. Where did the winter go? I feel like it was September just yesterday. My only regret is missing Hearth's Warming. It makes me think of Mom and Dad. It's been so long since I've seen them.
I need a hobby. My days lately are spent sitting in the shadows, staring at the fireplace. It's almost spring, and I have fewer and fewer excuses to light a fire. Maybe I should go out on walks more, but whenever I do, the weather feels like winter again. I should really look into getting a sweat jacket or something. This red sweater Rarity made for me is nice, but I always feel like I should save it for a nice occasion. Besides, it looks rather bright and festive, and I'm not exactly a “festive” unicorn these days.
It's no use staying here. Even writing this journal is a waste of time. I have a bag full of bits for some reason, but I know that it won't last forever. I need to find a way to earn money, to get food without reducing myself to a homeless beggar. I wish I could read back to one of my journal entries and find an example of what I did to make money in the past, but I can't find anything. Besides, I'm too irritated by all those blank pages. Why did I even bother writing anything to begin with if I was only going to slack off?
It just started raining. I've left the window open. It's nice to have something besides the fireplace to stare at. A smell fills the room, and it tastes of April afternoons. For some reason, that frightens me. Why should it? I like April. I would like April even more if I could find a way out of this town, out from under this curse. I wonder what Mom and Dad are up to.
Perhaps what I need is a hobby, or I should consider going on walks more. Still, the thought of it makes me shiver. Maybe I can look into getting a sweat jacket. I like this sweater of Rarity's, but I've been wearing it far too much. Besides, it looks “festive,” and I'm not exactly feeling “festive” lately.
Why am I staying here? Even writing this journal is taking me nowhere. I have a bag full of bits, but I don't know from where. How did I get them? Do I have a job?
It's raining. Feels like April. I could have sworn it was February... or maybe September? What ever happened to Hearth's Warming Eve—Twilight had a pageant, or was that last year? I got roller skates. Mom and Dad were so happy. I guess I was happy too.
Rain.
I think something is wrong. I think...
Dear Journal,
I couldn't find my way home tonight. I swear, there are so many country roads, so many forests, so many wooded thickets bordering this town that it gets confusing at times. I must have wandered about the north edge of Ponyville for hours. It got very cold. My red sweater had fallen apart. I don't think it was ever made to handle any situation that wasn't delicate. Still, it looked expensive while it lasted. I'm not sure what to do with it now. Maybe make a blanket out of it. What I need, though, is a jacket of sorts.
Anyways, I kept walking for hours, but then a mare ran into me. I pleaded with her to help me look for my house. Naturally, she asked me what it looked like, and I could only gaze at her with a stupid expression. I wasn't sure how to answer her.
Somehow, I was able to change the subject of our conversation, which wasn't very hard to do. She kept rambling for minutes on end about apples, filling my ears with stories of her “Ma and Pa” and some huge apple grove north of where we were trotting in circles. Sooner than I realized it, we were strolling by the cabin. I realized the house was mine because I could see Al peering at me through the window, meowing his head off. I told the mare I had to go, but she was suddenly looking at me with a foggy expression. I felt a chill, and I galloped away from it—away from her—and shut myself inside.
Al practically pounced at my legs. His food dish was empty. There was barely any water left for him to lap from. I fumbled around for his food, but I couldn't find it. I started to panic. A part of me wanted to rush back into town and buy some more cat chow before closing hours, but I was terribly afraid that I might forget the way home by the time I got there and Al would end up starving.
Well, I did find the food, only because I heard it crunch beneath my hooves. Al had torn into the bag beside my cot at some point while I was away. I soon discovered that his litter box was full, and he had made several messes outside the bin.
I really, truly don't know how long I was gone for. I'm not sure I want to know. I just want to hold Al. He won't leave my side; it's hard to write with how heavily he's purring. He's just happy to see me.
I want to be happy too. I really do.
Dear Journal,
Everypony in town was talking about the Royal Wedding. At first, I thought it meant that Princess Celestia was marrying some lucky stallion. I then heard that there was a ceremony in Canterlot honoring the engagement between Shining Armor and Princess Mi Amore de Cadenza. I couldn't believe it; Twilight's brother was getting married!
I had to congratulate her right away. I searched all through town for hours. To my luck, I caught her just as she was exiting her treehouse with a bunch of other mares. I told her how happy I was that her brother had fallen in love and met his future bride. I wished them luck, and that their days together might be long and happy.
Imagine my shock when Twilight simply stared at me in confusion. I asked her jokingly if she hadn't heard the news of her brother getting hitched. She told me that she had; she just didn't understand why I of all ponies was congratulating her on Shining Armor's marriage. I laughed and suggested that if Moondancer was there, she'd be sobbing from all the salt in her wounds. After all, that unicorn always did have a thing for Shining Armor.
For some reason, Twilight's ears drooped, and I swore I saw tears in her eyes. My heart fell, and I tried to hug her to make her feel better. That's when these colorful mares beside her shoved me away. They were angry, outraged, even. They told me to get lost and bother some other innocent pony. I watched in shock as they ushered Twilight away, hugging her and telling her not to pay me any mind.
Was it something I said? I was just teasing her slightly. It's no worse than what Moondancer would do. Why would Twilight treat me like I was a total stranger?
From then on, as I trotted home, I looked at everypony funny. None of them were looking at me; it was as if I had become completely invisible. I hoped that it might have been a bad dream, but then I came home and started hoofing through my journal. I could read my older entries, and you're not supposed to be able to read legible hoofwriting in a dream. At least, I think that's the case. Twilight taught that to me once.
Twilight, what have I done to anger you? It's so cold here, so very cold. The last thing I want is to alienate you. Just what did I do?
Please, somepony, anypony, tell me what I've done to deserve this.
Dear journal,
What are changelings? I was gardening in front of the cabin, minding my own business, when a pair of pegasus guards wearing royal armor walked up and started asking me several questions. Many of them were personal too: inquiring about my age, my name, my place of birth. I was somewhat ashamed that I couldn’t answer them half of the time, and I winced when I saw them squint at me suspiciously.
Well, they trotted off. But then, within an hour, they stopped by my cabin again. They questioned me once more, as if we had never had the first interrogation to begin with. Was this some practical joke?
I humored them to the best of my ability. When they left, I ran inside the house and slammed the door shut. I watched, hiding from behind the windows. They strolled by a third time, looked at the cabin, and approached the door to knock on it. I hid for as long as I could. Eventually, they went away, muttering and griping about some sort of search that they and several other members of the royal guard were performing across Equestria.
Later on, I stopped by the town and I heard villagers talking about the guards. Apparently, there’s a scare throughout the kingdom about a potential invasion of “changelings.” Everypony has been on edge ever since the royal wedding took place.
Royal wedding? I don’t understand. Did Celestia get married? Or Luna?
Just writing about it hurts my head. I think I should stay inside for a while.
Dear Journal,
I occasionally read newspapers. I don't know why I do. Even if it's good news, it's not something that can help me. Word of Mom or Dad would only be on the first few pages if something horrible had happened to them, or at least to their neighborhood. I'm not sure I could handle that. I'm not really good at handling much of anything lately.
For instance, there's talk of a newly discovered place just north of us: a Crystal Kingdom. Who ever heard of an entire country made of crystal? Or is it that the ponies who live there are made of crystal? I don't know, and I don't care.
I wish I could care. I wish I could be on the forefront of discovering new things. I wish I could talk to somepony and have it be a conversation I've never had before. I wish I could say something that another soul might remember, another soul might smile about, another soul might quote.
No, I suppose “quote” isn't the right word, but I'm running out of them: words, that is. It's getting harder and harder to write, or at least I think so. My head hurts trying to get all of these sentences together. Maybe if it was warmer. The farm mare trotting by my cabin this morning told me that it was July. It's too cold for July. My teeth chatter at night. I'd light the fireplace, but I don't want to draw attention from the smoke coming out of my chimney, not that it would embarrass me this time of year—I just don't want to have another starting conversation with anyone again.
I just want to stop beginning. If only once.
Dear Journal,
Something's wrong. I saw Twilight Sparkle's name in the newspaper. According to the headlines, she's been granted executive power as the newly appointed Steward of Canterlot. The paper says nothing about Princess Celestia, but it claims that “Luna is helping the new royal administrator with her place of office.” Do they mean “Luna” as in “Princess Luna,” as in the Mare in the Moon, Nightmare Moon?
This isn't right. I came here to Ponyville looking for Twilight. She was supposed to be setting up the Summer Sun Celebration for Princess Celestia's annual arrival. Now she's suddenly sitting upon the throne as Steward of Canterlot? When did that happen? Moondancer is going to eat her own mane.
I swear, it's gotta be some kind of practical joke. Why do I feel so scared, though? I'm petrified of asking anypony for explanations. Every time I step outside, it feels so terribly cold, even in the full light of day.
I should just stay here. This cabin is nice and cozy. I should just stay here until things become clear. This has to be a mistake. This whole thing has to be some crazy, giant mistake.
Dear Journal,
There are empty pages in this journal. I think I know why. I have this book open. I'm staring at this page. I know I should be writing about something—but what?
I woke up today. There was a nice breeze in the air. I walked places. I heard laughter. I listened to conversations. I imagined being a part of them.
Afternoon came. I sat under a tree until the stars came out. I had a silly thought that made me smile—that I was the only pony on earth that could see the constellations twinkling. I wonder how many ponies bother to look at the sky, and how few of them actually see anything.
It's a large sky, but I should savor it over the nights to come. I suspect that there will be many of them.
Dear Journal,
It was cold tonight, but it was a different kind of cold. I saw ponies bundled up. I heard the crunch of snow below me. I looked into a storefront window. There were all kinds of pretty lights. I blinked, and I imagined seeing ponies carrying those decorations away into storage. I blinked again, and I was unwrapping a gift. Something bright and glistening hung in my hooves. Roller skates. What kind of a foal wants roller skates in December?
I just paused writing to look at the fireplace. It relaxed me. Just now, I glanced up at the window. Somehow, it is morning already. I can't stop giggling. I think the stars are playing hide and seek with me. I'll catch them tomorrow, I'm sure of it.
Dear Journal,
Somepony gave me a flower today, a tulip. He called me “angel.” I just stared at him. His eyes were the same color as the Canterlot rooftops beyond the balcony where Dad stood to paint his landscapes. I told him that, and he looked at me with confusion, but there was something else in his soft face. I wanted to kiss it. I wanted to kiss him. But it was too cold.
In the next blink, I was home. The blankets caught my tears. I wish it was his beautiful yellow coat instead. I didn't know him, but now I wonder: if I had stayed there long enough, could he have told me who I was?
Dear Journal,
I had never seen so many bonfires. They called it the Summer Sun Celebration. A young couple giggled at my awestruck expression. I told them that I wanted to learn all about it, so they let me sit by their side. They had two little foals with them, and their bright, glistening eyes couldn't stop staring at me.
The fire was warm. I reached my hooves forward like I was bathing them in starlight. I laughed like a little filly.
I listened to them talk about their beautiful little lives and their beautiful little children. They said that they fell in love at a Summer Sun Celebration much like this one, long ago, about a year before they got married.
I asked them to tell me all about it, but they looked at me funny. I had goosebumps; how could it feel so cold right in front of a bonfire? I asked them if they felt a cool breeze; they giggled nervously like I was a drunk stranger.
Their children still stared at me, their eyes forever glistening and innocent. I smiled and leaned down to see my reflection in their gaze. That's when their father got angry. He asked me to find another bonfire. I walked away, confused. Fireworks went off, startling me. The flashes were bright, but for some reason I couldn't see my own shadow.
I walked home alone.
Dear Journal,
I just realized that the moon is different. It's so smooth, spotless, pristine. I can't look at the stars so long as it's there.
I feel my blood freezing. Something is outside my cabin, lingering in the woods. It makes a noise, like the rattling of chains. Every time I breathe, it stops. Every time I pause, it starts again.
Something's watching me. I know it. I can feel it all over my coat, like the weight of a grand ocean, vibrating with ethereal thunder as it presses in on me from all sides. The only thing I'm scared of is that once I'm done writing this, I will forget that it's outside. But if it comes in and strangles me in my sleep—I wonder—will I regret it?
Dear Journal,
Nopony sees me, and yet they do. In tiny gasps—like the meeting of sunlit bridges—their eyes meet mine, and I am real again. So many of these villagers smile. They're so happy. I want to scream at them, and yet I don't want them to go away. I spend hours sitting in the park, watching them trot by, watching them talk to one another, watching them wave to me. They're so bright, and yet so distant. I could just as well be looking at stars.
Dear Journal,
I understand why there are blank pages in this book. They're waiting for me; they are mine. Maybe if I go back and write in them, I will change the past, or I will change tomorrow. I'm not that sure, but it's worth a try. I have to think about what I can fit on so few pages. How many friends can I invent? How many laughing conversations or stories or adventures? I wish I was creative. It would make all of this easier. It might even make the shadows go away.
Dear Journal,
Am I ugly? Do I smell? I was in downtown earlier this afternoon. I was trying to scrounge up a bite to eat. A unicorn trotted by. She had two guard pegasi with her. I imagined she was very important, or at least wealthy. I didn't expect her to stop and look at me.
It wasn't just any look that she gave, but a smiling expression. She asked if I lived around here. I told her that I thought so. She chuckled and said that if I needed any help getting a job, any help earning food, that I was report to the Social Services in Town Hall. I thanked her, though I didn't understand why she was being so generous. And then I saw the reflection of a haggard mint-green creature in her eyes, and I jumped with a start.
The guards flinched, but the unicorn calmed them down. She walked forward and soothed my jittery nerves with a gentle hoof to my shoulder. She smelled like lavender and books. I wanted to cry, and I think she saw it. She said that she cared for all of her royal subjects, and that everypony deserved to be happy in this life.
I calmed down. I maybe even smiled. I asked her who she was, and she introduced herself as “Steward Twilight Sparkle” before trotting off toward some important royal duty or another.
Twilight Sparkle... such a beautiful name.
I wonder what mine is.
Dear journal,
I was gardening today. I stumbled upon a wooden stake shoved into the ground. It lay beneath a tree outside my cabin. I didn't exactly know what it was, not until I saw a wreath of decaying flowers lying at its base.
Stepping back, I squinted at the name on the grave. It read “Alabaster.”
Who was Alabaster? Was it a pony I knew? Was it someone who had helped me before? Could there be other ponies who have helped me, who I've made friends with, who could still help me now?
Good heavens, how long have I been here?
Dear Journal,
It's winter already. I could have sworn it was August. I stare at the snow as I walk over it. I blink, and the hoofprints disappear. I try to imagine roller skating over the powdery white frost. My head hurts.
I found a shawl in the closet. It's bright red and threadbare. The pony who sewed it together was a poor seamstress, but it warms me nonetheless.
Ponies were talking about the Hearth's Warming pageant in Canterlot. My ears began ringing. I expected steam to begin whistling from the trees, bushes, storefronts. Nothing happened. Nothing ever happens.
I wonder who I would be in the Hearth's Warming pageant. Does Starswirl the Bearded star in the reenactment? If not, he should.
I hate snow. It's white and blank, like an empty page. There aren't enough poets in this world. The path to and from home is too short. Maybe I should stop trotting it, but I don't know where else to go.
Dear Journal,
This cot smells like me, but it's not my bed. How could it be? There should be a nightlight beside the dresser, but the dresser is gone too.
I hear rain, but I don't look outside. The last time I glanced, the rooftops of Canterlot weren't there. I don't know why I'm sitting here writing in this diary, but if this is part of the dream, then maybe I should keep doing what I'm doing until it ends.
Unless it begins again, in which case I'll just shut my eyes. It's worked before, or at least I think so.
Dear Journal,
There was a funeral in the center of town. Everypony was gathered in droves. I watched from afar, and I listened too. Several ponies delivered eulogies, most of them in hysterical bits. Then, as the service came to conclusion, a pony was introduced as the daughter of the deceased. I witnessed an adult unicorn marching up to the stage. She magically lifted a flute to her mouth and began to play a sweet, lonesome tune. It was a remarkable performance, considering the degree to which the tears flowed from her eyes.
I listened until the song came to its conclusion, and the many guests quietly mingled to share stories of the pony who had passed. All the while, I stared at the mare, at her bravely smiling face as she shared several hugs and nuzzles with her kin.
The sound of the flute still echoes in my ears. I'm not sure why, but it makes me feel sad, and there aren't many things that still do.
Dear Journal,
When did I go out for groceries? Was it yesterday? It's so hard to carry food with me these days. I don't know if it's the cold, but my horn feels numb. It's a weight on my head, and I have to hunch over to carry it, even though it's been a part of my body all my life.
Mom says that if I study for exams at the last second, all of my knowledge will go straight to my horn instead of staying in my head where it belongs. I think she's silly. I don't even know what I'm studying for. Besides, this isn't Canterlot.
This isn't Canterlot... so why does my head hurt? I have to catch a train ride. There's an important event somewhere. A friend? Why doesn't Dad speak to me? I can't see him in the hallways. There are no hallways. What is this place?
So cold. Should add some more wood to the fireplace. But I need to get my studies done. Maybe after I get some groceries first. My horn feels so numb.
Dear Journal,
It was very bright outside, and yet I couldn't stop shivering. I leaned against a street sign just to catch my breath. What I really wanted to do was lie down.
That's when he came to me. The first thing I saw was his young smile, then his handsome lips moving as he spoke gently to me like a colt might address a puppy. He introduced himself as “Pound Cake.” I thought it was a stupid name, but I wasn't about to say anything mean, especially when he kindly took me by the hoof and helped me gently cross the street. I didn't realize how terribly wide the road was until we were halfway across it.
I thanked him as swiftly as I could, for fear that I wouldn't get a chance to if I delayed the gesture. Still, I couldn't get over how gently he was treating me, like I was a fragile infant. He smiled, bowed, and told me that he could be reached at Sugarcube Corner anytime whenever I needed some “assistance.” I watched him leave, and immediately turned towards the first storefront window I could find.
I looked for my reflection, but was too distracted by a wrinkled, pale green mare on the other side. Then my eyes twitched in time with hers, and I saw something familiar in the style of her gray mane, something recognizable in the texture of the mottled skin lining her brow.
Was I always this old? I faintly remember—no, I taste—morning breakfast on the veranda. Mom's perfume as she prepares to go to the office. Dad's color palette resting on the window as it catches a spring breeze. If I stretch my hoof high enough, I just might reach his brush. I want to draw roller skates all across the tile floor of my bathroom. Yes, that's it, roller skates, bright violet and everywhere. I'm on my knees, drenched in the pastel fluids, making my masterpiece, humming while I do so. Why am I humming? I never hum.
And then they rush in. Mom's the first to scold me, as always. I'm sobbing from the fresh swat to my blank flank. I don't know what I did wrong, but I'm starting to realize what isn't right. I'm not creative. I never have been, and I never shall be. All I will make is a mess, like this mess staring before me, with wiery hair coming out her ears and drool lining her wrinkled lips.
I turn away from it, and the world spins with me. My horn becomes even heavier. I have to lean against a post box to keep from fainting. My heart throbs. I have a heart, and it is fleeting. How did I get here? My hooves can barely move on their own. How can anypony move anywhere so slowly? Is this living? Is this what my life has always been?
I'm home somehow. I don't know how I got here, I don't know how I'm sitting here and writing this, but I very seriously doubt I can cross those lengths again. I'm not even sure I would want to. The next time I see a reflection, there might be nothing looking back.
Dear Journal,
I must eat. I know I must eat. But every time I put food inside me, it hurts. Something's wrong with me. I tried talking to nurses in town, but after a few minutes, they just look at me like I've never entered the clinic to begin with. Everypony is so young. So young and foolish. It's not like I want to be this needy. It's not like I enjoy being so weak. I'd help myself if I could.
I want to tell them that they'll be like me someday. But I get this gnawing feeling. Something burns at me: burns and bites and breaks me apart inside. I think that I may be the only pony who is like this. I see their smiles and their grins and their dancing canter.
I think I may be the only pony who hurts.
Dear Journal,
So cold. The sky outside my window is a bright haze. I think there were once stars there. I turn over in bed. The nightlight's gone. An elder pony is coughing, wheezing. She stops making noises everytime I hold my breath. I need to get up. I need to move. This sheet weighs a ton, and my horn even heavier. Who shoved burning coals into my stomach? I'm not laughing, not crying. I'm just here. I am always here. Why is nopony else here? Why am I the only one? When did this start? When did I agree to this? Why can't I go home? I just want to go home. I just want to go home so bad...
Vapors. I see them. Like shadows outside my room. Mom? Dad? Is that you? It's so dark. It's so cold. Did I make you angry? Did I chase you away? I promise that I will study more. I don't know what I'm learning, because I'll lose it as soon as I write it down. Am I writing? So many blank sheets. I have to fill them. Maybe I'll find the two of you somewhere in there, just like I'll find the stars. When I blink, I see lights, and it's like you're there hovering behind me. What is this that you got me? It makes such a rattling noise. Roller skates. You can't use roller skates on the snow. Where are you? Please don't be mad. I like them. I really, really like them.
Mom? Dad? Please. Please, if you can read this, I am not lost. I am still your daughter. I'm waiting for you here. I don't know where here is. It's dark outside, and it's so very cold. I tried lighting a fire, but I can't move very well, and whenever I do, it feels like a knife is being dragged through my stomach. I don't remember the last time I've eaten. Maybe that's it. Now I'm not saying this to worry you. I'm sure if you see this, and you read this, you can find me. I'll be in a hospital somewhere, most likely, because this town has good ponies. They're sometimes forgetful and they often get hung up on silly little things, but they're good. They're good and they're kind and in spite of all the awkward moments, they've treated me well. I can't think of a particular scenario, but I just know that things have been good here. But I can't wait here for much longer. The darkness is spreading. I can't see the stars anymore. Dad should know about the stars; he paints them all the time. Sometimes from the rooftops. Sometimes from hilltops. Sometimes from...
I had him. I had him, and I sent him away. Oh sweet heavens, why did I send him away? What was I thinking? Was I even capable of thinking? His mane was as gray as mine. It danced in the wind like a comet. I understand now. I understand, and I'm so sorry. I didn't mean to send you away. Please, come back. Everything else has left me. Shadows and glints of moonlight are all that remain, fragments of an eggshell life that I have never opened. Every time I touch the pale sheen of it all, I only shiver all the more, like the rattling of chains in the distance. There's a pain I should be feeling, but it's drawing away, just like the lights, just like the warmth of your grinning faces. It's okay; I love the roller skates. I love them like tulips, like red sweaters, like violet streaks in a deep purple mane. If only I could have loved you as much, if only I could have shared it with you like a poet would, like a novelist, like something that touches this world with more than words, that knows how to paint with them, that knows how to introduce color to one's ears, that can turn tears to butterflies, maybe then I would not have sent you away, and maybe then you would not have left me when I did. I'm so sorry. I'm so, so very sorry. Please come back. I ask you, I beg you, I plead with you. Come back to me. Come back to me. Come back to me, so that I can be young in your arms again.
I can't be the only one. I can't be. These words came from somewhere. They are greater than me. They are greater than all of us. I know that there is something collective, something plural, something that I should be sharing with, since I am sharing it in the first place. I know that there is movement. I can feel it pressing against me, squishing me against the impenetrable darkness. There is light somewhere; I remember it in my dreams. I have those: dreams. I don't have a name in them, but I do have a face, and it reflects in the eyes of souls, the eyes of ponies, the eyes of friends. I can't possibly be this alone. It just isn't right. It just shouldn't be. And yet it is. Why is it? Why am I so alone? Where am I going? Where are my words taking me? Is it where the stars went? Is it where my parents are? Are they waiting for me, or will they forever recede away? When I breathe, it comes in spurts, and if there is a beginning to everything, then there must be an end to everything. I don't know whether I'm heading towards it or away from it. Maybe both. Maybe it's always been both. Maybe it will tear me apart. Then again, maybe I will like what I find lying inside. Maybe it will talk to me, and the two of us can be one together.
There is nothing, and yet there is everything. I am beginning to understand, in that I don't understand. I exist to comprehend, yes, for how else would I be able to know that I don't comprehend? I place forth a thought, and the thought stares back at me. We are even with each other, me and the thought, and that's how I know that I am standing over the abyss and not inside it. I have yet to take the plunge. I have yet to take the final gasp, nor the first one. Everything is on the brink of happening, everything is on the brink of becoming everything. I see it like a river in my mind, coalescing from the many back into the one, and I am at the mouth of it, drinking and vomiting all at once. I exist, of that much I am certain. But have I always existed, and will I exist in the future? All I know is now. All I know is
I think that I have finally found you. In the dark, hiding behind the shadows, cowering from me your entire life. You were just a brave step away, beyond my cot, beyond the noise of my breaths.
I can't imagine why I was so reticent to embrace you until now, to caress your cheek, to make the contact that needed to be made. After all, you have been following me all this time, it's only fitting that I turned around and let you join me in the trot.
Of course it's you. It's always been you. In my tears, it's been you. In my laughter, it's been you. In my parents’ breaths, in my dreams, in the stars of my friends' eyes; they were yours all along. These words are for you: they are drab and they are dismal and they are dull, but they are yours to make poetry with.
For what else would I be writing this if not for you? Because though I don't know you, I know that you are there. I feel your presence, in that I feel the lack of your presence, the indefinable other that makes us more than darkness and dust. I don't know who you are, but I write this to you, and I love you, because what else is there for us to do in this life but reach out and connect, to remind ourselves of things that can't be said, but only felt? For life begins and ends in a blink, and all that is certain is the choice to be certain.
I love you. Whoever you are, wherever you're from, wherever you're going, I love you.
I love you and adore you and cherish you, with my dying heart, with my fleeting mind, and I wish you the absolute best in joy and harmony. The darkness is so grand, so hungry and so enormous, that it is a sin to fill it with anything but friendship. For we are many, and yet we are one, and no division, no barrier, no wall of any sort can separate us, can tear asunder the commonality that allows us to shower beautiful sparks into the black pits of desolation.
We exist, and we are gorgeous, and I love you because I do, not because I did, and not because I'm going to, but in this moment, in this tear, in this howl of joy from the bottom of my heart, I reach forth into the frozen ether and I worship you.
We are the solidarity and the divide all at once. Together, we find truth, and I think it is a beautiful sound. How about you?
There is sunlight. A faint thing.
I can.
I can see it.
Through a window. Through a fog.
How long have I been here? I'm tired of being here. Tired of being tired.
I think I want to go somewhere.
Yes, a walk would be nice.
See the town.
See the ponies.
See their smiles.
It's a shame to go alone. I think I will take this journal with me.
It certainly has many pages left.
So bright in town.
Neither hot nor cold.
Is this snow? I'm not quite sure.
I smell candied sweets. It's a delicious scent.
I remember when I used to grin. It doesn't compare to how I'm grinning now. Nothing will ever compare to how I'm grinning now.
There's a hill, out beyond the park. I bet the view is fantastic.
I wonder if I still have the strength to climb it.
I can hardly move.
Legs are numb.
My horn. Is it there? Vapors and vapors.
But I think this is it. Yes. The top of the hill and...
Oh...
Oh my...
It really is a glorious town. So many colors. So many ponies.
I know they can't see me, but I can see them, and I can see how pretty it all is.
Such a wonderful memory, even if it's a new one.
It is now.
I think I'll just sit for a while.
I think I will just...
Just breathe...
So beautiful
It really is so beautiful.
I wish...
Yes...
I almost wish I could write a song.
Background Pony
XX - “Dénouement”
by shortskirtsandexplosions
Special thanks to: Props, theBrianJ, theworstwriter, Warden, RazgrizS57, and Ponky
Cover pic by Spotlight
This Fanfic Would Not Be Possible Without the Help, Editing, and Support of the Following Individuals
Spotlight
You are the essential reason why I began writing this story. It all started with that fateful, late-night conversation where you challenged me to think of a way to make Lyra interesting beyond her usual fandom tropes. I meditated on it, recollected an obscure X-Men mutant ability I read up on ages ago, and decided to make a story around it with my mint-green obsession as the subject. Since then, your cover art has made the Lyra of “Background Pony” stand out from all the rest, and I attribute much of the story’s success to the individuality you gave it. Thank you for your creativity, for your intelligence, for your brutal honesty, and for your loyal friendship.
Spanish Announce Table Goes First
I am not a good writer; I am just a person who writes a lot. The quality and legibility of “Background Pony” owes itself to you fine lemurs of SATGF, who have loyally tackled the rough drafts of these chapters without being paid in anything but gratitude, week after week. This story would be in the pits if it weren’t for all of you. I thank you from the bottom of my nihilistic heart.
Props
I can’t count how many times I’ve gotten sucked into intense, creative, and felicitous conversations with you. Everyone in SATGF gave their all, but you were able to provide a little bit more. By letting me share with you the future of “Background Pony” before proper exposure, I was able to gauge where exactly I was going in the story. This fic wouldn’t have ended so poetically if it weren’t for your input. Thank you for your support, your ideas, and your girlfriend’s fanart... f’naaaa.
TheBrianJ
When “Background Pony” became popular, there were several marsupials on Fimfiction who were quick to praise it. Of them all, you were the most vocal, and you took the conversation out of the site and into places like Ponychan. I was instantly flattered by your appreciation of the fic, and greatly inspired by your intelligent critique and analysis. I was happy to have you on board the editing team, and your input has been insanely helpful. Thanks for your attention to detail, your tendency to make me feel good when I’ve been down, and your appreciation of the Straight Edge Lifestyle.
RazgrizS57
For a while there, I would have sat on my high horse and not let a bunch of editors filter the chapters of “Background Pony” for all its detritus. But then you messaged me with your story ideas, your input, and--most importantly--your list of chronology flubs in the fic. I had to change a few things in the story because of you, and it helped save my fic from being an utter mess. I’ve been proud to have you on the editing crew, and I thank you for your attention to the fic’s thematic elements.
theworstwriter
Of all the editors I’ve had the grace to work with, you have been and continue to be the most meticulous. Your experience and gift in writing goes far beyond that which you give yourself credit for, but we both know that. I felt safe with the knowledge that if any of the other editors missed stuff in my crapola, you would always find it with the fine eye of a burning laser. More often than not, I can tell that we share the same innate understanding of how language can be bent to deliver a good story. Thank you for supporting me through End of Ponies, and thank you for saving “Background Pony” from embarrassment on several occasions.
Warden
Whenever the editing process takes place, I know that the true baptism by fire doesn’t happen until it is you who gets your hands on the manuscript. Even in the End of Ponies days, you always looked at things from a conceptual angle, making me think twice about presentation and theme. Thank you for constantly being by my side, for making me think, for poking me in all the right places so that I could get stuff done, and for not sending me a check in the mail... yet.
Seattle_Lite
Back in the primordial days of “Background Pony,” you helped me sew together a chapter that was falling apart. You helped pierce my ego and remind me that I need editors like I need a second pair of eyes cuz holy crap am I messy. To me, you embody the friendly and volunteering spirit of Ponychan’s /fic/ group, and I thank you for helping get “Background Pony” to get its act together.
Vimbert
What do you say about the Candle-stick Head who needs no introduction? I know that you weren’t part of the editing team of this fic, but you are instrumental to its success in every way. I was surprised that this story made it as big as it did, especially since the first chapter was something I submitted without any editorial support. But then when you read and reviewed chapter one, I recall you stating that I desperately needed to complete this story. As elated as I was with the fic’s immediate success, I wasn’t truly happy until I got that “blessing” from you, and I may not have continued the fic at all if you hadn’t given the suggestion your green light. In general, I owe everything about my fanficcing success to you, as well as to your burning crucible of a vindictive induction into the brony literature community, and I thank you ever so much for it.
Demetrius
You have always been a great source of criticism and ego-stroking all rolled into one. I admire your intelligence, your sincerity, and your creative spark. You contribute so much of your precious time to the community, and it truly helps us. With "Background Pony," your advice has helped me immensely in the editing and color coding process. You have my thanks and my respect.
Jake Heritagu
Though I never did do that side-story to Silent Ponyville, the ideas that you inadvertently made me come up with led to the skeletal structure of what would eventually become “Background Pony.” In short, it wasn’t for your contributions to this universe, I would never have become Lyra!obsessed. You have my thanks, good sir.
Belgerum
I should never have written “Background Pony,” because I have no knowledge in music. Tons of marsupials messaged me saying that they would like to tackle the composition of the elegies. I nodded my head stupidly, not truly knowing what to expect. In the end, you were the one and only mofo to do it all. Not only that, you did it beautifully, and the muzak now sits in my head as the canon nature of the story’s central device. I listened to your symphony over and over again while writing BP19, and it helped. Thanks for adding culture and beauty to a story that was pretty clueless before someone gave it music.
needthistool
When you told me that you were doing a read-through of “Background Pony,” I was beyond flattered. Imagine my surprise when I heard how good and incredibly well-ranged your vocal talent was. I’m proud to have your voice acting as the funnel through which the story’s beauty and melancholy is expressed. The fic has always felt like a quiet and heartfelt adventure, and your contribution has more than conveyed that.
Dawnmistpony
You’ve always struck me as one of my most pronounced fans, and that one exceptional fanart you made way back when “Background Pony” first started helped make bronies become aware of my story. Thanks for contributing your visual talents to the substance of the story on more than one occasion.
Ponky
The only thing sadder than “Background Pony” is the fact that you’ll be leaving for another part of the world over the next two years. Thanks for giving me the idea of a heart and mind to write the legacy of Lyra for. Your talents and creativity helped make the atmosphere surrounding “Background Pony” an enjoyable one, and I wish you the best in all of your endeavors abroad.
Equestria Daily
I shall always have uber respect for you guys (and gals?). The explosive popularity of “Background Pony” on Fimfiction has amazed me, but I knew that if my story made it on your guys’ site, then it was a true testament to its excellence. Thank you for the exposure that you have given me, the quality of presentation you aim for, and the patience all of you have had with me in my multiple chapter submissions. “Background Pony” would not have spread as far and wide as it has without you.
Noble Jury
You know what you’ve done.
Raefire
I first became a brony because of exposure to the fandom at the Fugworld.com message board. During the time that I lurked there, you were the biggest and most charismatic voice. When I began writing fanfic after fanfic, you would constantly provide links for the Fugsters to follow the stories of shortskirtsandexplosions. I was always flattered that someone was acting as a bridge between the two communities that were so important to me, and seemingly out of the kindness of his heart and his respect for the stuff I’ve written. I regret that you are no longer in this world, and I hope that wherever you’ve gone, it is peaceful.
To the rest of the marsupials who have read my stuff, much thanks and appreciation for your attention. Live long and dash apples.
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To My Friend, Short Skirts and Explosions,
There’s very little I can say here that I haven’t already blubbered to you elsewhere, but I’m gonna do it anyway. This is a phenomenal, perfect conclusion to a truly life-changing story. From the get-go, I’ve been very attached to “Background Pony” and its poor protagonist, and the tears that flowed when it was all over were colored with every emotion imaginable.
I will cherish this masterpiece for as long as I live, because for me it carries lessons and memories that have made and will continue to make me a better person. This will forever be my mantra: “I don't know who you are, but I write this to you, and I love you, because what else is there for us to do in this life but reach out and connect, to remind ourselves of things that can't be said, but only felt? For life begins and ends in a blink, and all that is certain is the choice to be certain.” Truly, these are words to live by.
The way I see it, this beautiful story is about three things: memories, friendship, and sacrifice. Of course it has loads of other great, applicable stuff scattered through its mammoth chapters, but it boils down to a story about three very potent, powerful themes that, when taken seriously, will rock a human soul to its core. I’m amazed at that, I admire it, and I hold “Background Pony” all the more close to my heart because of it.
Skirts, thank you for your talent, your dedication to your work, and especially your kindness and friendship toward me. I hope we stay in touch for a very long time.
You’re gonna be bad for business, I can tell. I love you, Skirts.
Ponky
FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK WHY SHE NO GET BETTER?
Man... I'm the one who should be thanking you.
Without BP, I wouldn't have pushed myself as a writer. I wouldn't have started talking with you and gotten advice for writing. I wouldn't have met Props, or Raz, or anyone else. The SATGF would never have formed. None of my stories would exist. It's all thanks to BP that I've gotten to a level as an author I never, ever dreamed of.
Background Pony has sort of transcended what a fic should be and effected lives outside of just "Oh wow, this is a really cool story." I truly hope that you're proud of your accomplishment, finishing an epic like this and bringing together a group of writers who have all helped each other become better.
It's been an honor and a privilege to read and edit a story as deep and thought-provoking as Background Pony. Thank you for all the work you put into this, and for all the ways that it helped me. In many ways, BP has done more for me than the actual show has.
So thanks. And know that I'll always be here to edit your fics and make Scott Hall references. Hey Yo.
-Brian J
upsetting how great stories must come to an end
. But I am glad to see it end
Holy fuck I am sad now.
From fanfic to literature to epic -- where, finally, does this story fit into the grand scheme of things?
I have no idea. What's the next level beyond "legend"?
"Testament," maybe.
This story sure as hell lived up to its sad tag. I read this entire thing hoping and praying that in the end, Lyra would get better. Instead, she died a homeless amnesiac.
I hate you.
Heh. I can honestly say I wasn't expecting that at the end. All I was planning on doing was popping down to the comments to see if any super-speedy readers had gotten into this yet, but instead I find a bunch of notes.
Thank you. I'm glad to help, especially when it means the return of a story I'm much my psychologically invested in. In any case, congratulations on the finisher here.
Background Pony is Not Perfect but it's (partly) mine. Keep up the writing that you seem to enjoy so much, and one of these days let's sit around a skype or steam chat drinking Dr. Pepper, eh?
For months I have waited, checking this story every time it has updated. Like that one perfect fruit slowly ripening on the end of a branch, I have anticipated the maturity of this story. And now? Now it is ripe.
It begins.
You need to mark this as a tragedy.
....Bluggawha?!
This was the first story I read when I was introduced to FIMfiction.....bravo good sir, I say, bravo
...I...cannot describe this...
So...uh....
...What just...happened?
...Did she...die and become a ghost in both a literal and a metaphorical sense or...
.....What just happened? Seriously. I'm lost.
It's 2:00 AM. I've just finished reading the greatest fanfiction ever written. And I am FUCKING SAD. I think it's mostly my own fault for getting my hopes up. Completely unrelatedly, that bit with the fourth wall breaking blew my mind. Also, saddest possible Derpy cameo.
I don't even regret staying up so late that I'll probably miss the Season 3 premiere.
Wow. This is probably one of the best fanfics I've ever read. This is just epicness. It's very touching, it's a great story, and It is just overall beautiful.
Well. Shit. I have the Feels, Bro. All of the Feels.
I am sad that Lyra Never got better, but I do think that it would have greatly cheapened the story had that happened.
Skirts,
I've always wondered how it would feel to be one of those people an author thanks in the Author's Note at the end of a book. Now I know.
I'm very proud to have worked alongside you and helped you in this endeavor, this incredible story. It's been a lot of sleepless nights and hours of edits that could have probably been spent with my girlfriend. But, no regrets. Seeing this story through to it's bittersweet conclusion has been very rewarding, and I wouldn't trade the time I spent for anything.
Thank you. Thanks for writing, thanks for being a friend, and thank you for this Lyra, your Lyra. It's been a wonderful ride. Can't wait to get started on the next one.
Got to say, it is a fitting ending, even if I would have preferred a happier one. Good job.
Watching the entries become less and less coherent, and even start repeating themselves...
I just don't know anymore. God, it was brutal. Watching Lyra's mind slowly unravel, even knowing it was coming, was stomach sickening.
She didn't even remember Al in the end.
Gah. I want to punch you, then hug you, then punch you again.
1591542 No sir, he needs to mark this as THE tragedy.
SS&E you magnificent bastard, I'm going to go cry myself to sleep now. No really, some of those diary entries sound like my life... only I have a job. Thank you for the ride and never stop writing
I'm Not Even Sure This Could Be Counted As Bad End..
This Is Probably The Good End..
I'm Not Even Sure..
I feel like someone punched me in the stomach.
Not sure how I feel about this ending, don't think it really fits the FiM world, at least not thematically. Edit: Never mind on this bit, as of the season 3 premier, self-sacrifice is clearly an equestrian virtue.
This should probably should have a Tragedy tag instead of Sad.
WHY CAN I NOT FAVORITE THIS MORE? Good story bro. Hits me in the feels and whatnot.
1591687 Completely agreed. I didn't see it coming at all, and that's the beauty and testament of his talent.
Dude i could fucking kiss you if i didn't want to smash your damn face in with a frying pan repeatedly
It was fucking beautiful
...
...
sigh
The silence remains__The forgotten is the same__The end the intro
There are not words to properly describe how much your writing has effected me. This story has made me appreciate music more then i have ever done before. The sounds of the world turning around me are now a symphony to my ears. And even in the silence i still hear beautiful music.
Thank you.
I, I just... I...
Fuck you. No really, fuck you Skirts. Fuck you, and fuck the fact that you wrote this goddamned story in the first place. I mean... words cannot comprehend how needlessly pissed off yet sorrowful I am right now. Just, fuck!
Goddamn it I hate this ending. It's not badly written, it's not badly done, it's just so.... FUCK! I don't even have words to describe it. I hate you, I bloody hate you, AGH! I'm going to be suicidally depressed for the next week now, I'll get no work done, I'll probably end up punching something, hell, make that many somethings!
Huh... I'm going to go jump off a cliff now. Hell, I'm even considering disliking this story just from the anger I'm feeling. Not that anyone would care.Hell, I'm probably going to get insulted just because of this comment, and you know what? I can't blame anyone who does it.
I... fuck you Skirts. Fuck you.
Man these feels. I knew a sad end was coming but wow.
Oh my gosh.
I'm to emotionally fucked to even cry.
I've been sitting in front of my computer, staring at the screen in abject horror, joy, and every other emotion I can hope to name.
Fuck you.
I love you.
Breadsticks.
Good lord. Even though I was late to the party, this thing sure has come a long ways. Dammit, you know I'm terrible at these things but I'm going to do it anyway.
To be honest, I'm glad I stepped in when I did (around chapter seven?) and pointed out the inconsistent flaws in the earlier chapters than say, chapter fifteen. I feel honored to have worked alongside you, and to have met so many awesome people in the process. This story is simply incredible and tends to drive a stake right into your heart. As a fan of dark and tragedies, I say you hit this right on the nail for Lyra; you are the only author in any regard to make me tear up to read something. One of the things that had entranced me about this was simply how you made Lyra not human-obsessed and make her likable, and created an entire mythology/world to boot. You have always wowed me in that regard, and may you continue to do so.
This fic
has got to beis rewarding, and presumably not just to yourself but to lots of other people as well. That author's note at the end was truly unexpected, and I am touched. I thank you for that, for being a friend, for writing this fic, for unexpectedly making me become a pre-reader and indirectly better in my writing, and above all else I thank you for the hoodies. Every pony needs a hoodie.Shall we have some bittersweet music to go along with this chapter?
Gorram it skirts, you just twisted the knife like a drill right there, but still there was a spot of hope in the very last word. Talk about sacrifice...
It has been immensely enjoyable and also pretty heart-wrenching reading this fic over the last eight/nine months. Thanks for writing, and I am looking forward to whatever you decide to do next.
You know what? After all of this time, after everything that had happened, this is the only way this could have ended. Absolutely no other finale to this work of art could have so resolutely sunk in the messages behind it all. At the end, Lyra had forgotten so much, had become so detached from her mind, that not even her influence could continue changing who she truly was.
If Lyra had instead decided to play Dawn's Advent, I reckon everything would have come together in an ending completely removed from this excellent bittersweet one. We would get a glimpse into what we always wanted for Lyra all along, but then we would take notice of the part that most likely would be the most tragic--that everything she had done and become over this epic journey was for naught, and that the last words of the fiction would be something that would absolutely rip people apart when she thought about something missing or strange. Maybe this is just a load of speculation, though.
All of that being said, I am glad to have been here with this work from start to finish. Nothing compares to the experience of reading such a philosophically heavy story and being able to feel your way from its first chapter all the way through to the last. At this point, I bid you a hearty farewell, as this will most likely be the final word by me on such a fascinating work.
This is the way the world ends,
Not with a bang but a whimper.
I.... I can't even articulate how I'm feeling right now....
I'm a person who firmly believes that deus ex machinas cheapen stories, but despite that this entire chapter I was hoping, HOPING that somehow things would turn out alright.
I feel like I've been punched in the gut.
To elicit that reaction from me.... all I can say is that your writing is bloody phenomenal.
I raise my glass to you sir.
Goodnight sweet Lyra, you will be remembered.
Harpo!!
Farewell, Lyra. I will never forget you or what you have done here. May your wisdom enlighten us all.
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Wait so you have yet to read this fic, Airstream? Whaaaattt???
I truly do like your other stories SSE, but as someone elsewhere essentially said, this story can basically be summed up in one easy way:
"Lyra suffers. Lyra suffers. Lyra suffers. Lyra suffers. Lyra suffers. Lyra suffers.
In 400k words of purple prose."
I think the problem is that while you have good concepts, you drag them out far too much.
I....I.....this....-sighs- speechless. This story....this amazing tale. Has left me utterly speechless. I can say nothing more than asleep tonight with bittersweet dreams awaiting me.
Also to 1591535.....you have not read any yet? -goes clockwork orange and straps you to the chair with your eyes clamped open.-
READ!READ LIKE YOUR LIFE DEPENDED ON IT!!
I hate tragic endings, but I keep reading stories with them. But fuck, that was beautiful. This is the first comment I've ever made on this site, and I know I picked a worthy story for it.
WHY?!
I mean I understand why you did what you did, how you ended it and the purpose blah blah blah....
BUT WHY?!
I guess the timing was right for it though. Drop everyones spirits to practically suicidal levels right before the season premier brings them back up. Greatly written, massive and just incredible. I just did another tally, if you were to put all your stories together in a large book or several volumes of the same book it would be the second longest book in the english language. Your talent is making us feel what the charcater feels, but why do you have to make everything so sad?
Truly amazing, im using this for my book study later this year, get it published and watch as it slaughters rows of people who purchase it. Now to wait for all the spin offs and happy endings people will make to counter this.
It was a good end to the story.
That is an interesting choice she made choosing to give up her love of music to live in blissful ignorance of her own curse. Causing her to have memory lapses and pretty much jump through life.
She seemed far more happy in the end that she did with her experiences leading up to the choice. This was a bitter sweet ending all things considered but i feel satisfied with out it ending.
Great job for writing such a wonderful story.
I-I-I-I-I-I... I have no words... This is a masterpiece, it really is.The end was unexpected, I like that, even if she died not knowing anything. I guess that's really what made this so sad, something so unexpected and so extraordinary that you simply can't help being touched.
This story was at the start not something I woud normally read... But I stayed through and I noticed with this as it usually is with most things, it got better over time. Finally it ended, my mind got hijacked and I'm writing this while still in awe of these events.
Great job SS&E, you've made something beautiful. I wish you luck for the future and everything you do after this.
Thanks.
In all those previous chapters, you always sold us hope in the end. Hope that Lyra's life was getting better, that she was coming closer to the end and the resolution of her curse. And in the 19th chapter, you crushed this hope. With her decision, she willingly chose to submit to her curse, with no way out.
The last chapter shows her accelerated descent into madness. More and more time goes between entries; more and more memories are missing. She lost purpose and drive, the very purpose of her existence, and yet she's still here, in the background of Ponyville, faded and invisible, almost erased.
And that last sentence...
With that single green word, I got hopeful again, beyond any rationality. Lyra remembers ! She's still alive, the song is still around her ! Maybe something good is going to happen !
...
Cue credits.
You crushed me, dude. Right here, you squished my heart. I finished reading 20 minutes ago, and I've been sitting before my screen for the first 15, barely thinking, lost in despair. At least, we won't forget Lyra, nor her journey. I hope we won't. No one in her world can, so we have to remember, for her and for all the lost ones in her realm.
As many other readers, all I can think to say to you is "thank you, asshole, for this amazing mood-killer".
It is a good thing I have an awesome night planned, culminating in the all-new episode, right at 2AM (yes, it's 7h20 PM, november 10th right here), so I'll have happy things in my mind before going to sleep. I'll give myself a week, and next weekend, I'll read the whole thing again.
I love you, and I hate you.
Would you please write an alternate ending where she actually plays the Dawn's Advent ? pweeease ?
Beautiful, you and all your editors and lemurs made a wonderful story.
*flails*
I cried. Can't even lie. All the same, while it was...what it was, I still considered it a happy ending. Playing the Advent would have undone all the wonderful things she did, and joining the unsung would have been just...terrible for her. Worse than the ending she got.
Well played, Skirts. This was amazing.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/yay_red.png
You have my respects. Good job man. It was a great journey.
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Sure, but it at least asks some interesting questions along the way. Background Pony is not without its pitfalls and recursive, redundant prose and painted color codes, but do not throw the baby out with the bathwater. Background Pony really does a nice job of exploring, thoroughly, humanity's social constructs through the eyes of a pastel pony. It is a character story of great depth (and length), a true exploration of the psyche ripped from normalcy. To that end, I do agree that length really causes the character story to fall flat at the end. The reader is hammered so much with the torment and suffering and introspective of a lost soul that by the time any resolution is to be reached, it is met with the same expectations of more depression and sadness to the point that the chords of the story are simply muted and the reader is left neither here nor there. What should be a series of melodic peaks and valleys turns into a low tone of a flatlining heart monitor through one too many uses of the defibrillator.
Nnngh, I'm honestly not sure how to feel about it on a personal level. Critique aside, I very much enjoyed the ride of Background Pony and it's hyper-philosophy spewed forth onto the page by a mint green, musical avatar. I suppose in that vein I echo what everyone else has already gone over: it's a great story, I'm sad it's over, but I'm happy it's over, too.
Keep on keepin' on, Skirts.
I have to agree. Your stories don't need to be as long as you make them, but at the same time they show a lot of creativity and ambition. You deserve a lot of credit for not rehashing the same stories that everyone else writes.
I also wanted to say that BP Lyra is the most interesting characterization of Lyra I've seen, and Background Pony is among the most tragic and depressing stories in the fandom, so props for that as well.