Best Friends Forever
The former crusaders laughed at the old memories they shared. The time when they tried to creature catchers, and how foolish they were going in the Everfree Forest at night trying to get Fluttershy's lost chicken, and how sorry they felt when Fluttershy had to go threw all those things just to find them.
"Ah'm mighty sorry to make Fluttershy go all through that." Said Apple Bloom.
"Me too." Said Sweetie Belle.
"Yeah," Said Scootaloo, "I do too."
Sweetie Belle and Apple Bloom had gotten talking about the Sisterhooves Social and how the two of them learned to love their sisters more. Scootaloo gave a weak smile has they talked. Sometimes, she was jealous at the two for having sisters. They would talk and talk forever and forever about their older sisters, sometimes it made Scootaloo sad that she didn't have a sibling. Sweetie must of saw that Scootaloo didn't look to happy, so her and Apple Bloom stopped talking for a bit.
"Why did you two stop talking?" Asked Scootaloo.
"Ya looked sad," Said Apple Bloom, "so we stopped."
"Are you okay Scootaloo?" Asked Sweetie Belle.
Scootaloo had the same look when Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon had told her that the only reason Rainbow Dash hung out with her because she couldn't fly and she felt sorry for her.
***
"Just face it," Diamond Tiara voice still rang clear in Scootaloo's mind, "you'll never able to fly ever."
"You'll be just a chicken for the rest of your life." Said Sliver Spoon, "like your mom."
"Oh wait," Said Diamond Tiara, "Didn't your mom die or something?"
"Shut up," Said Scootaloo trying to hold back her tears, "I will be able to fly. You'll see someday." Sniffled Scootaloo, "I-'ll fly with the Wonderbolts."
"Whatever," Said Diamond Tiara, "Come Silver Spoon, she isn't worth it."
"Blank Flank." They called out walking away from her."
"I will to fly someday," Said Scootaloo, "I'll show you."
***
"Scootaloo." Shouted Sweetie Belle shaking her hoof in front of her face, "are you sure your okay?"
"I'm fine," Said Scootaloo, "never better."
"Are you sure?" Asked Sweetie Belle.
"Positive," Said Scootaloo, "everything is just peachy."
"Ya sure don't look it." Said Apple Bloom.
"Are you sure your okay?" Asked Sweetie Belle.
"What are you talking about," Said Scootaloo, "I'm not sad."
"Scoots," Said Apple Bloom, "Ah know what sadness looks like."
"Same with me." Said Sweetie Belle, "we all had sadness in our lives Scootaloo."
"What do you mean?" Asked Scootaloo.
"Ma and Pa passed on when Ah I was just a few months old," Said Apple Bloom fixing the pink bow in her mane, "But Ah do remember this, ma gave her bow to me. Pa gave AJ his hat, and his yoke to Big Macintosh. They said, wear it proud, and Ah haven't took this bow off since then."
"Ah remember AJ and Granny Smith used to tell me this story whenever Ah asked about ma and pa."
***
There stood a three month year old Apple Bloom, in the hands of Granny Smith. Why was everypony so sad. Why was Applejack, Big Macintosh, and Granny Smith crying. She saw, Uncle and Aunt Orange, and Cousin Braeburn was here, but why were they were all crying. Why was eveypony so sad?
"Some day," Apple Bloom heard Granny Smith say, "When ya older, Ah tell ya."
Tell her what when she was older? Apple Bloom was confused. All that confusion went away when Apple Bloom saw her older sister. She, like the rest looked all sad.
Apple Bloom saw Applejack trotting up to her, and she was holding something in her month. Why did she have pa's hat on? And why did Big Mac had Pa's yoke on? Apple Bloom wanted answers.
Applejack looked sad, and gave the occasional sniffle.Why was she sad. When she reached Granny Smith. Granny Smith had put her down, and gave Applejack a huge hug.
"It's okay," Said Granny Smith, "Ah'm still around, Ah will take care of ya."
Applejack sniffled and came closer to Apple Bloom. Applejack had put something in her mane. It was her mother's pink that her mother had gotten when she got married.
"Ma wanted ya to have it," Said Applejack trying her best not to cry, "Ya have ma's bow on. Wear it with pride. Ya a real Apple now."
***
"And that how Ah got mah bow." Said Apple Bloom with a big toothy grin.
"Before I lived in Ponyville, we used to live in this small little village, and my parents traveled a lot because their job. So I was left with Rarity a lot. One night, I heard Rarity crying in her room," Said Sweetie Belle, "so, I went in her room, and sang the lullaby she sung to me every night."
"I remember as if it were yesterday."
***
A young Rarity was crying. She was fed up with it all. She was fed up with her parents leaving them for a couple days, leaving her to care for her younger sister, all alone. Rarity thought she had closed her door, but was startled to hear Sweetie Belle's voice.
"Hush now, quiet now," Sang Sweetie Belle has she quietly went in to her sister, "It's time to lay your sleepy head."
"Sweetie Belle?" Sniffled Rarity.
"Rarity?" Said Sweetie Belle as she went to her comfort her sister, "Why are you crying?"
"Sweetie?" Said Rarity, "Why are you still up? Its bedtime."
"I couldn't go back to sleep," Lied Sweetie Belle, "Can you sing that lullaby again?"
"Not now Sweetie." Said Rarity.
"Why?"
"Its just--"
"Are you mad at mom and dad?" Asked Sweetie Belle, "Mad for them leaving a lot?"
"Sweetie," Said Rarity, "Why would you think that?"
"I dunno." Said Sweetie Belle, "But I miss them a lot."
"As do I." Said Rarity, "Now go to bed."
"Can I sleep here?" Asked Sweetie Belle, "Please?"
"Of course you can." Said Rarity.
As Sweetie Belle had gotten herself in her sister's bed, she asked, "Can you sing lullaby now?"
"Of course." Said Rarity, "Hush now, quiet now. It's time to go to bed."
"Hush now, quiet now." Sung a drowsy Sweetie Belle, "It's time to lay your sleepy head."
"Good night little sister," Said Rarity," I love you."
"I love you too." Said a half asleep Sweetie Belle.
***
Sweetie Belle had cleared her throat, and started to sing.
Hush now, quiet now
It's time to lay your sleepy head
Hush now, quiet now
It's time to go to bed
Hush now, quiet now
It's time to lay your sleepity head
Said hush now, quiet now
It's time to go to bed
Drifting of to sleep
The exciting day behind you
Drifting of to sleep
Let the joy of dream land find you
Hush now, quiet now
It's time to lay your sleepity head
Said hush now, quiet now
It's time to go to bed
"That's why I always loved singing," Said Sweetie Belle, "It stopped my sister from crying, and that was all I cared about."
"Wow, there Sweetie," Said Apple Bloom giving her friend a pat on the back, "Ya voice gotten' mighty good."
Sweetie had blushed a little, "Thank you."
"Ya see Scoots," Said Apple Bloom, "We know how ya feel."
"If you want," Said Sweetie Belle, "Like old times, we could be your sisters again."
"Yeah Scoots," Said Apple Bloom, "How does that sound?"
"Great," Said Scootaloo, "You guys are the best."
They laid back on the ground talking about more old adventures they had. They talked about when Apple Bloom had gotten the Cutie Pox, how they thought the Love Poison was a Love Potion, and many, many other things.
"I still remember that song." Said Sweetie Belle, as she cleared her throat and sang again.
Cheerilee is sweet and kind
She's the best teacher we could hope for
The perfect stallion you and I must find
One to really make her heart soar
"I still couldn't believe how shy you were about singing," Said Scootaloo,"You have an amazing voice, why did you hide it?"
"I dunno." Said Sweetie Belle.
"Ah still couldn't believe how stupid we were." Said Apple Bloom.
"Agreed," Said Scootaloo, "how in all of Equestria, did I find zip lining to be okay idea."
"I couldn't believe how naive I was." Said Sweetie Belle.
"Uh, Sweetie." Said Apple Bloom.
"Shut up." Shouted Sweetie Belle as she stood up.
"Come on Sweetie," Said Scootaloo as she stood up too, "For the longest time, you thought babies still came from the baby store because Rarity said so."
"It not that bad," Said Apple Bloom as she was the last to stand up, "When I asked AJ, she told me babies came from the stork, Ah believed her."
"That was when you were a filly," Said Scootaloo, "Sweetie Belle still believed that even after she got her Cutie Mark."
"And when Rarity finally told me the truth on how babies were made." Said Sweetie Belle closing her eyes, "I don't want to talk about it."
"You didn't talk to anypony for at least a month," Said Apple Bloom, "Ya told us that story a billion times."
"I was scared." Said Sweetie Belle.
"All she said as when a daddy pony and a mommy pony love each other very much--"
"Stop," Said Sweetie Belle, "please, I'm begging you."
"But all I said was-"
"Please?"
"Fine."
"Who's arguing now?" Said Apple Bloom, "come on girls, we just say each other after several years. Can we please not argue?"
"Apple Bloom is right," Said Sweetie Belle, "we have so much to catch up on."
"She's right," Said Apple Bloom, "Scoots, we haven't seen each other in years."
"We missed you." Said Sweetie Belle.
"I missed you girls too," Said Scootaloo, "but, I have to go."
"What?" Sweetie Belle's voice squeaked. Even after all these years, her voice still did that, "b-but why?"
"I sort of ditched the Wonderbolts at a party," Said Scootaloo, "I'm sorry."
"No," Said Apple Bloom, "Scoots, we won't split up again."
"Yeah." Said Sweetie Belle, "me and Apple Bloom are sort of of famous around Canterlot."
"We can go with ya." Said Apple Bloom.
Scootaloo gave a weak smile, "Thanks."
"That's what friends are for," Said Sweetie Belle, "right Apple Bloom?"
"Eeyup." Said Apple Bloom.
"We can be party crashers." Said Sweetie Belle, "I just don't want to loose you two again."
"Same here."
"Yeah," Said Scootaloo, "come on girls, we got a party to crash."
"Can we?" Asked Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle, "pretty please?"
"Sure," Said Scootaloo, "we can."
"CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS PARTY CRASHERS YAY!!" The girls said as they gave on final laugh.
"After this," Said Sweetie Belle, "Will we still be friends?"
"Eeyup."
"Of course we will."
"After the party, will we meet again?" Asked Sweetie Belle, "I don't want to loose you girls again."
"Of course." Said Scootaloo.
"How about, three times a week we meet up?" Said Apple Bloom, "Sounds good?"
"Yeah."
"Sure."
"We'll still got on adventures," Said Sweetie Belle, "right?"
"Crusaders till the end." Said Apple Bloom.
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........ Second unexpected chapter? You sly devil.
very cute and i like it.
415270
Problem?
Great stuff, but why does it say "complete"?
415353
I'm done with this story...
"'I still couldn't believe how shy you were about sinning,' Said Scootaloo" I'll assume that was a typo.
Yay, this was a nice surprise 2nd chapter!
Other than some spelling errors, the only problem I see is the overuse of "same"
You could atleast make it "same here", "me too", or something.
But other than that, good chapter
415440
Sorry if that bugged you.
I fixed it.
415393 Y U FINISH THIS. Y?!
This is cool!
415418
Nope. She was shy about sinning. Thought the devil was gonna get her.
415547
Singing...I made a typo...
415556
I reject that idea, and replaced it with sinning
Yeah i kinda argee.though i
it!
approved!
Good nostalgia story, but many typo's pretty ruined it...
still good anyway
this brought me to tears from teh 1st story about AB
Hehe, Awww<3
Very nice. I like how you adhere to the characters.
A couple of things, though.
1. Typos typos typos. Just go back and reread the story and you can probably catch most of them.
2. It could stand to be a little more descriptive. What are they doing? Describe their body language. What kinds of thoughts are going through their head? When AB was done with her story and Sweetie started telling hers, I thought AB was still speaking.
416248 agreed
but good all around
just fix your problems and this will be a top notch fic
ITS SOOOOO TOUCHING!!!!!
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SO much DAWWWW
I love what you did with scootaloo
416798
What do you mean?
scootaloo looks high in the coverpic....
CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS PARY CRASHERS!!!! YAY!!!!
417014
Yes I know.
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Many tears were shed seriously good job half as many tears as my little dashie
d'awwwwwwwww
a truly cute story.
And not a single manly tear was shed...IM LYING!
Other than the typos, DAWW! So adorable!
Just have to say: threw is not the same as through. Still very good otherwise.
http://i0.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/newsfeed/000/160/328/Bon%20Bon%20and%20Lyra%206.png?1313031539 I messed up, aww.
Pinkie would be proud... You made me smile xD
417060
I second your comment
Im so so so so so scared to read this story
P.S- Ihavent read this story yet
Smiling and crying. You are the second person to make me cry and smile at the same time. the first is the guy who wrote my little dashie.
I can see this being very good. However, as others have said, a little more description can make all the difference. One thing that stood out to me was the overuse of "said" without any sort of descriptive words used with it. A little more description on the dialogue makes it that much more effective.
Other than that, nice story.
Awesome story, but i gotta say.......Sweets and Scoots look REALLY high in the picture.
I'm going to be completely honest: this fiction was certainly an excellent idea, and had amazing potential, but I feel it was lacking in several areas. First was, of course, a severe lack of proper grammar. Second being a forced dialogue. I couldn't see the characters actually saying half of what you made them say.
There were several other issues I had with this particular fic, but I feel I have criticized enough.
Parts of the fic that I enjoyed were that you brought comedy to a reminiscent piece, especially with the "CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS PARTY CRASHERS." I also enjoyed the fact that you created a back story for Sweetie Bell and Applebloom when they were comforting Scootaloo, which definitely shows your creativity.
All in all, it was a good read for me, and thus will give it a thumbs up.
415393 Nope. You're not. I know you're not.
You're just waiting for us to get lulled into a false sense of confidence before pouncing AGAIN, aren't you?
After all, you still haven't described how they crash the party and probably make a mess of things, or other times they decide to meet up again.
Just the hilarious idea of Rarity giving 'The birds and the bees' lesson to Sweetie Belle was worth the entire piece, don't get me wrong I liked it and it explores something I'm afraid we'll never get to see in the show (Older CMCs) yet still Sweetie Belle's supposed trauma was great.
419622
Maybe I should write a fic about Rarity giving that talk to Sweetie Belle in the future.
419636
I would read that, overall my favorite moments in this chapter were Sweetie Belle's backstory (even though Apple Bloom's was sadder) and CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS PARTY CRASHERS!
I feel tears comming on.
420086
Cookie? You deserve it...just take the whole jar.
It was a nice piece, with a very pretty idea and story, but it lacks a bit - I won't criticize the grammar part since I myself am not perfect in that area, and it also wasn't that bad, but sometimes it seemed a bit rushed, and the dialogue wasn't very natural at places, more noticeably near the end.
Still, it was a nice read.
FFS
I wrote a good critique comment for his fic and it got deleted! FFFUUU
Anyhoo, down to business.
Why is this featured? WhywhywhywhywhyWHY?
I will be honest here, I liked the premise and idea, but...
Actually, never mind. I cba writing another crit commet.
My honest honet opinion? This was really bad. Really, really bad. Formatting errors, Said ALWAYS HAD A CAPITAL S AND IT MADE ME SOOOO MAAAAAAD.
forced dialogue..
I just feel sad that this is featured, it is a waste of space where somethig actually GOOD could be! The idea isn't even original!
All in all, a big no from me. 1/5 stars.
421392
It got featured... because maybe people liked it. I'm sorry if you thought the idea I had was not original, I didn't know how popular this fic would be. All in all, I'm sorry if you didn't like it.