Scribe has always been a bit of a recluse, despite the much more public nature of his job serving the Hive, and after a hard days work he loves nothing more than to curl up in his little nook of the hive and read one of the few books his hive has, he himself being one of the rare changelings that are considered worthy of learning to read. When he is told about the upcoming invasion of Canterlot, he is overjoyed at finally being able to get all the books he wants from the ponies. Of course, the invasion fails, and he is left, trapped, while all the other changelings are expelled from Canterlot. Follow him throughout his misadventures with everyone's favorite ponies as he discovers friendship, love and a library full of books.
Chapters (4)
I did notice some grammar issues, but luckily some quick patches will fix any problems there may or may not be.
needs an apostrophe and a question mark
I believe you meant realm
I believe a semicolon is appropriate here. Here a handy semicolon guide!
capital is the correct version. Proof!
Captializing proper nouns, like street names, is proper!
this is quite the bit to say in one sentence. Perhaps a period or a comma to split up the two thoughts?
I'm pressed to believe that this is actually Changeling Concrete. Of course, this can be ore looked at artistically, but I'm a nitpicky loser, and I believe this would indicate that they are enveloped in concrete, not cement.
should be Dinky's . The "ies" ending does not apply to proper nouns.
should be Dinky's
Actually, he wants everyling to see the ponies and believe it to be some random furniture.
should be a colon, I believe
I have been taught that if the number is below ten, use the word, not the number
same as before
Separate different speakers with line breaks (hit enter)
I won't
Use a period here instead of a semicolon.
use it's. it's=it is
unless you mean "only felt good", there should be a comma after the no
Should Royal be capitalized? You sometimes capitalize, othertimes not
love-drunk mind
That's all I saw on a light skimming. Overall, I enjoyed the story and can't wait for more! But I am left with a question; do you have an editor to help you?
Ehhh... that random transformation at the end felt really unrealistic and shoehorned in.
Other than that, nice story so far.
4433359 I do not have an editor. I just go through what I type afterwards, though I do miss some of the less obvious things like the ones you found.
4434656 There are many groups such as this one that are more than willing to help you out, if you are ever interested. I always recommend groups like these because a second set of eyes to proofread or someone to bounce ideas off of are always great tools (they do both). Cheers!
interesting a Changeling who is a bookworm..... that was a bad pun...
anyway i hope Scribe gets a mild punishment if he gets punished once the guards comes and catch him and bring him to Princess Celestia.
also if it goes well i think he and Twilight may become (most unlikely) friends due to same interest of books
Interesting story, seems pretty good, and it has changelings!
Yessss,Cocoon all the ponies and eat their love!
oh my this gonna get interesting whenv Twilight stumbles on Scribe while checking up on Derpy/Ditzy.
one i sorta hopes catches him reading books and gets a bit curious to find a changeling who likes to read and maybe if Scribe manage to beg her to keep him a secret because he only wanted books to read they may become friends because of same interests. (not right away tho)
well it will be interesting to see how this will work out when Twilight gonna investigate on Scribe to see if he is a changeling (which he is) and i hope it will go well since he likes books.
Great I've found another story that's gonna kill me will waiting for updates.
Looking forward to seeing what happens
Author's Note:
Longest chapter yet!
(yay! Long chapter! WOOO!!!)
Tell me about any spelling or grammar I may have missed.
Maybe she an help you out.” (an = can)
even with he hayfries (he = the)
Give any suggestions to where you think the story should go.
(EVERYWHERE!!! MAUAHAHAHAHA!)
Thank you to all who have liked and favorited.
(You are welcome! This story is fun to read!)
Due to my moving houses, the next chapter will be completed within another week or so.
(Looks at last update, curles up into ball in a dark corner and cries. "so, long....")
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Due to some stroke of random luck, I've gotten online long enough to reply, but this comment only bears sad news; I will not have another chapter ready for a while, maybe a few weeks, or maybe at the end of the summer. This is due to my traveling near constantly with no time to write or even come up with ideas for now. Though this story may not be updated for a while, I do have the first chapter of another story about 2/3 complete and that may or may not be ready in the coming days/weeks. It should at least be something to keep those of you stalking me sated for a little while. Rest assured, this story is still being written, no matter how long it takes me to find time to work on it. Thanks for reading,
--Zach
4658445 Well, I guess thats understandable!
I first read that as 'erotic'
Scribe should totally flatter Twilight for her awesome book collection! And talk all about liking books, and stories, and Applejack sees that it's the truth, so Twilight says that nopony who likes books that much could possibly be evil, regardless of lying about relations...
Just my idea of where the story could go!
This is far, far after the summer, so just wondering... When do you think you will update?
Love the story so far.
Sad to see it hasn't been updated in a long while.
Hope you resume this wonderful piece of literature!
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No update till next summer... the summer of which year?
6512790 ikr ?
Fun setup, mostly in-character characters, it's a good start.
Keep going! ;)
I wanted to see a book fortress
Après sept ans...