Arrival of the Century
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Chapter 1: Arrival of the Century
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It was a beautiful day today in town with nothing but clear blue skies and warm sunny day as the townsfolk are busy bustling around town to begin their day anew. Everyone in town were very friendly as they greeted their neighbors with a hello and smile as they go about their day as the listen to the birds singing to them as they venture to the kiosk stands and shops and everyone knew it was going to be a good day. That is to say that this particular town was a very interesting one indeed and over the course of time they have matured and learned from their endeavors making them into better people.
In a certain library in town a very busy and certain young lady is currently organizing all of her books in the proper order but occasionally stop to read a few books that caught her interest seeing as she can’t help herself enjoy a very good read now and again. She had long sapphire blue hair with two strains colored moderate violet and brilliant rose respectively that reached passed her shoulders as her violet eyes scanned each page as she read with a gentle half-lidded look like she was looking at something precious.
Intently she wore an interesting set of clothes that most librarians usually don’t wear. She donned a black vest with a white button long-sleeved shirt underneath with buttoned cuffs. She also wearing a long red tie on the collar of her shirt and lapping over the black vest and she sported a dark phthalo blue skirt a little above her knees. Complete with white school socks that covered half of her shin and black school shoes giving her complete outfit like a Japanese Schoolgirl look.
The current book is she reading is called ‘The Interknits of Interdimensional Travel Studies, Hypothesis, and Alternate Realities: A Reference’s Guide’, a very curious book indeed in the librarian’s gallery of books and felt strongly picking up this book, as some unknown force was compel to grab it, and start reading it. For some reason that day, she felt a sudden strong urge to read this type of book though she passed it off as she hasn’t read it in a long time since her childhood unaware of fate pulling her strings.
The sounds of footsteps scuffling against the wooden floors, but not enough to distracted the avid book reading lover from her engrossed activity, and the door suddenly swings open to reveal a small purple reptile looking around the room frantic with his head bobbing to and fro as the reptile, which is male, looks for someone and once he spots the young lady reading her book and rushes to her side in panic.
“TWLIGHT! TWILIGHT!!! WE HAVE A…”
“…”
“… Uh, Twilight?”
“…”
The young lady continues to read her book completely absorbing in it and blocking out all forms of distraction as she was lost in her own little world. The purple lizard rolled his eyes at this and scowls as he walks over to a desk and tilts over an ink bottle, with its cap on as to not make a mess, and just that little antic was enough to cause the sapphire blue-haired beauty to snap out of her reading and look around frantically for the source.
If there’s no one she hates is a big mess in her home as she is… a tab bit of a clean freak and wants everything in organized order.
Something that her little friend is all too aware of.
“Got your attention now?” the young reptile said in a deadpanned toned with half-closed eyes.
Though annoyed at first the young lady realizes now she was distracted again from another good book and sheepishly smiles back at her young friend, “Oh, Spike. Sorry about that, you know how much I get lost in a subject I’m really interested in… hehehehe…”
Rolling his eyes he returns to what previous brought him back to his friend’s room and quickly grabs her arm and tries to, but no avail, yank her out of the house, “Nevermind that now Twilight, we have to go now!”
Corking a raised eyebrow and tilting her head to her right, her curiosity piqued, wondering what’s gotten her number one assistant and best friend into such a frantic mood, “What’s the matter Spike? Why are you acting like the world’s about to end?”
“Well that’s just it… there’s something happening over at Town Square!” the purple reptile known as Spike pop up with a jump with his irises shrink in horror as he explains, “Some sort of crack appeared in the sky and it’s slowly getting bigger!”
This got the young lady’s attention. “A crack in the sky? Spike that’s impossible! First of all the sky has no ‘solid’ mass for such a phenomenon to occur…”
“There’s no time for this! Hurry!” Spike bellowed as he grabs her arm and yanks her out of the room, followed by what looked like a library with books all lined up on shelves that were carved into a tree trunk, and then out the first door as the hurry to the scene of the astonishing event.
The young lady could only don a puzzling expression on her face not yet realizing or knowing what extraordinary documentary encounter will change not only her life but the lives of all who live in Equestria and possibly beyond.
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As Twilight arrived at Town Square where the event occurred the other citizens of the town have came out of their home to see what the buzz was about and all mumble about what they were seeing directly above their heads. Looks of concern, worry, and curiosity were plastered all over their faces wondering what will happen should the crack in the sky fully break.
Twilight’s face dropped at what she was seeing and couldn’t believe it. Up above her head there was a crack in the sky, a large black shattering-look lines all jagged out in different directions though it remains in a relatively small area in the sky and what could be explain by the sounds they all heard was like ice slowly cracking under pressure. She rubs her eyes and doubled rubbed her eyes again to make sure she was looking at this first.
How is this possible?! It was scientific impossible and defies all forms of logic, though there’s her friend who constantly proves it but still within most logical sense if that was making sense at all, and looked on as the cracks were getting bigger and at the center it seems a hole is starting to form as Twilight looks on with a look of incredulity.
“Twilight!”
The young lady looks around to see who was calling her and no surprise to her, but to her relief, to her group of friends coming her way and noticing the one closest to her was her moderate sap green-eyed freckled-face friend, the one wearing the Stetson hat, was the one to call out to her with trepidation in her tone as they make their way through the crowd to her and gather around in the most open part of the area in the center and closest to the crack.
Donning her trademark Stetson hat that is rarely seen off of, long blonde or pale light greyish olive hair tied into a small ponytail knot at the end tied with a red scrunchie, her head, Twilight’s friend wore an attire that of southern farmers. She wore a white t-shirt underneath a red, with blue and white checker pattern, short-sleeved unbutton down shirt with the bottom part tied into a knot over her chest. To complete her outfit she is also wearing long blue jeans fashioned with a belt buckle on and wore light brown cowgirl boots on to give that cowgirl look which fits perfectly for her.
“Twilight,” she cowgirl called out to her friend as she glances upward to the vortex in the sky, “What’d you reckon it is? Ah ain’t seen nothin’ like this before!”
“I don’t know Applejack,” Twilight replied in worry as this is the first time she has ever seen anything like this in her life, “I can’t even begin to explain what could be causing this.”
Following behind her was another one of her closest and best friend and the most fashionable one of them all especially with her moderate indigo coiffure styled in a elegant way with the front part of her hair long and curled up into a neat little roll and the bottom of her hair also curled up too that gives her a look of one from a high society classed, though the look of her moderate azure eyes, with a light cornflower blueish gray eyeliner applied, in distraught takes that effect away for a bit.
She adorns a sleeveless Falu red turtleneck shirt, though the turtleneck is short allowing more of her neck exposed, the dark colors of the red contrast well with her light body color and defines her figure even more profoundly with a tear-shaped Columbia blue sapphire seated on a golden necklace pendant around her neck. Her lower body enchantingly has a mid-length black skit that goes down to her knees along with Sagebrush grey leg stockings underneath and she wears black dress shoes with a barely noticeable heel on the bottom of it. Even in dire crisis she always looks elegant, fashionable, and presentable for any situation.
“The horror! Oh the absolute horror! This is terrible darlings. What are we to do?” the fashionista young lady clamored in an overdramatic manner as she arc her back backwards with her arm over her head, “This could be the end of Ponyville! No! Of all of Equestria! Of all the worst things that could happen, this is THE. WORST. POSSIBLE. THING!”
“Easy there, Rarity, whatever is it there’s no way it stands a chance against the totally awesome, stupendous, the one and only Rainbow Dash!” Someone boasted with confident as the fashionsita looks to her side with widen eyes of surprised by her boast and calm collected attitude about the whole situation.
Right next to her was someone that’s an opposite of fashion for girls and instead invokes their inner adventurous spirit with tomboyish clothing. Interestingly her setup is a denim blue hoodie sweat-jacket with two white racing stripes from her shoulders down to her forearm and under her jacket she kept a simple white tank top in case she needs to get into a workout fast and not have a heavy sweat-jacket on a hot day. For the rest of her outfit had a slightly girlish touch to it to show her feminine side by donning a Persian rose pink gathered skirt that covered her thighs and underneath it to establish her tomboyish nature still were black workout shorts covering up near her knees and finally her had a single blue stripe socks and black sneakers to give her athletic appearance apparent and awesome as her.
Though she looked confident, calm, and ready for whatever it is that’s about to rain down on them, those closest to her would notice a slight look of worry and concern behind those Moderate Cerise eyes of her, as she tries to look and play cool by scratching the side of her unusual rainbow-colored hair that is natural, consisting of the major color components of light brilliant red, light brilliant vermillion, light gold, moderate sap green, brilliant cornflower blue, and moderate violet that make up the colors of the rainbow. No matter what happens, whether she’s scared or not (which she won’t ever admit to), she’ll always stand by her friends ‘til the end and looks behind to her left to the one she’s concern with the most due to her delicate nature.
“Oh dear… I hope it isn’t anything too scary or terrifying like a fire-breathing flesh eating monster. What will happen to all of the animals or everyone who lives here? Oh… I really hope nothing bad happens… but something bad is going to happen isn’t it?” someone shaking with fear and terror with her voice squeaking under pressure as she wasn’t exactly sure how to deal with this.
Standing behind the athletic young lady was another young lady, quivering a bit, while gazing at the crack in the sky with her big dish saucer moderate cyan eyes of hers with part of her long pale, light grayish rose-colored hair covering the right side of her face, though only slightly. She wore a long-sleeved Islamic green turtleneck wooly sweater for her upper body and snugged so nicely and cutely on her to matches her delicate looks and for her lower body she had on a denim blue pencil skirt that covers her thighs along with black pantyhose underneath with a simple pair of brown shoes. An interesting choice to say the least yet one cannot deny she still had an air of gracefulness to her and her choice of clothing is better suited to her occupation she loves so much.
And finally the one bouncing up and down on the right side of everyone…
“Oh?! It’s it my turn, is it my turn yet? Hehehe… of course it is, silly, who else is left!” the bouncing poufy brilliant raspberry pink-colored hair energetic, sugar-rush, silly one who seems to be the embodiment of pink giggles as she waves straight ahead, “Well, let’s see here… I’m wearing Cerulean blue collar short-sleeved jacket with an aureolin yellow t-shirt underneath, hehehe I look good in yellow don’t you agree? Oh almost forgot the rest, what a silliwillifilly I was going to be, which includes my Cerulean blue skirt that kinda looks like a tutu followed by my aureolin yellow and denim blue stripe patten knee socks! I love them so much, they’re like peppermint candy canes if peppermint candy canes were yellow and blue instead of red and white, which is kinda silly now that I think about it? Yellow and blue candy canes? What would you call that, pastrami?”
…What? That made no sense!
“Well of course it didn’t make sense! If it did, we wouldn’t have fun names for everything, like spaghetti, zucchetti, marco polo! Like my Cerulean blue and white sneakers with some blue cake frosting on it! Ooh… missed a spot!”
“… Pinkie Pie? What are you doing?” Twilight eyes her pink-colored friend with exceedingly incremental dumbfounded expressions which was followed suit by the rest of their friends at her strange antic as she doing right now. They’re aware of her… ever-present, ever-going, random nature but at times they just can’t seem to figure her at whether for good or bad.
“What am I doing? Isn’t it obvious,” the one called Pinkie Pie suddenly appears in front of Twilight’s face who in turn backed away a little from the sudden invasion of her personal space, “Everyone got their own introduction of their clothing they were wearing and I wanted to do my mine version!”
“Wha…?” Twilight could only mouth that single word, incompletely and dumbfounded, as the rest looked on equally as confused while the rainbow-hair colored one scratches the side of her head with slight embarrassment. What in the name of Celestia was that girl talking about?
“Pinkie Pie, we have a situation and possible a crisis on our hands here if we don’t come up with something to stop it and we don’t have time wondering about your… rambunctious nature at this moment,” Twilight slightly scolded her friend for her usual cheerful self despite what look like impending doom hovering over their town as they spoke but it seem like Pinkie Pie wasn’t fazed one bit by Twilight’s scold.
“You shouldn’t worry about little ol’ me right now when that crack in the sky is about to burst now.”
“Say WHAT?!”
Like on cue or following a set of scripted events and timing the sounds of the crack in the sky grew louder with the sound of glass breaking becoming more imminent as the sound of someone or something was pounding against like, like the beats of the drum and with each passing beat a barely visible wave of light echoes from it like a ripple in a pond.
The townsfolk murmured with worry and concern as they look on with horror at the scene unfolding before them, some have taken their children into their houses and lock the doors while others were too scared to even more. It would seem time has run out for them… as the crack busted open like a floodgate erupting as the translucent shards of the ‘crack’ flung out and disperse like water evaporating into air and in the crack’s place… a ghastly yellow vortex swirling around is seen.
Mixed in with this vortex with pink and green light as well swirling into the mix, like brewing a potion with different ingredients added into except the colors did not merge and simply kept in their own row. Twilight has never seen such a phenomenon before in her life, though she was curiosity and intrigued by the nature of this abnormal due to her scientific mind seeking knowledge, she could not fathom or progress the situation but the first thing that comes to mind is to protect her friends and home.
Though before anyone could act… something shoot out of the vortex in a blinding glowing light and smashed a few feet away from where Twilight and her friends were, surprisingly and oddly leaving no crater in its wake, as the girls, though hesitant at first, approach the smoking burn out area and as they got near and the smog drifted apart the girls gasped at what they saw. It was a BOY!
Though a kind of boy they’ve never seen before.
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“Ugh…” a low groan bellowed from the boy laying on the ground with dirt all over his clothes as he tries to move himself by planting his elbows on the ground to life him up, but a considerable amount of pain jolted throughout his pain briefly causing him to lay on his back again.
“Oh… gosh… he… right…?” a quiet gentle and concern voice spoke out but the boy could barely hear it as his dizzy spell he experience from his great fall with his hearing ringing before it slowly recovered back to normal.
Opening his eyes a bit, groggily too, his vision started off with a blurry effect as everything looked all fuzzy like looking through frosted glass film as he couldn’t quite make out what was in front of him but six strangely different colored lumps. As his focus began to get better the mass lumps were taking humanoid forms before he as he notices how they came a little closer to him, but still gave him space, as two of them bent down to check up on him with one of them, mostly a pink one, was leaning over him which he could make out was a big smile on the person’s face.
He also took note that all of their figures were curvy and feminine in nature which he knew right away they were all girls, if the voice from earlier that was definitely female didn’t tip him off.
Rubbing his temples with his right hand he takes a deep breath as he steadies himself, trying to calmly take in what’s going on around him. Letting out a sigh out he spoke the first thing that’s common and usual in this situation, “Ugh… where am I?”
“Oh wowzie-wows-bonkers what do you think he is?” the mostly pink-colored one said without looking away from the boy in front of her with that still present sugar-rushed huge grin on her face. The gears in her head were turning for something extravagant and festive for something so extraordinary and amazing.
“I’m not sure…,” the purple figure stated with a worried and concern tone in her voice as she looked over the boy, “However I believe we need to help our… unexpected guest here.”
“Hey partner, you okay? Let me help ya there sugercube,” the one with a Southern accent spoke as she lend her hand out. Though he was a strange and unusually person to her and her friends she wasn’t going to abandon someone who’s hurt and most likely lost, a previous past experience her friends and herself had taught them to never judge a book by its cover and he seem relatively harmless enough.
“Um… thank you,” the boy replied groaningly considering his condition, but was thankful nonetheless and looked up to his ‘rescuers’ as his vision return to him and his sight clear as crystal once more… to get the shock of his life upon ‘whom’ and ‘what’ had come to his aid and did a double-take with his head at the startling revelation, “WOW! You’re… nothing like me at all… wow.” Which he responded dumbfoundingly as he wasn’t exactly sure what to say though he subconsciously didn’t want to be rude to someone trying to help him.
To his shock and wonder the people trying to help them were not like him in the sightless… in other words they were not Humans like himself but were instead Equines in nature with their appearance, actually more like anthropomorphic horses or ponies or whichever one that is the correct term though it doesn’t really matter at this point. Taking in the situation he darted between the six female Equine before him to get a better look at them and process the information around him.
Still sitting on his butt, he takes note of the six girls before him to get a better look at their Equine features. Firstly they all shared the same type of Equine ears pointed up, kinda cat-like in a way, and had short but definite muzzles for their faces and slightly bigger eyes than human eyes though in the end their face was more or less roughly like a human’s face complete with eyebrows just like humans.
Secondly they all had different skin or fur color? Most likely fur color if they share similar biology traits like the Equines back home, though more radically colors seeing as the ones before him the ones standing in the background have more candy-colored furs which is by far the most interesting factor about them aside from being anthropomorphic Equines.
In terms of the six before him he notice the colors of their fur coats, the one trying to help him out with the Southern accent had a light brilliant gamboge fur coat, or the more simpler term orange, and he notices she had freckles on her face three small dots on both cheeks which is kinda cute in his humble opinion. The next one appeared more of a student or book-lover though given the almost Japanese-like style of clothing somehow perplexed him, but doesn’t worry about that as he takes note of her pale light grayish mulberry fur coat. Though the twinkle in her eyes were somehow worrying as the girls seems intrigued by the sudden appearance of an ‘alien’ and foreign lifeform and looked ready to burst with millions of questions.
The next girl had an athletic look and seem to have a prideful aura the boy thought as he looks over her very light cerulean fur coat that gave the impression that she was a hardcore daredevil with no fears and a tough attitude to go with it makes her a sort of rare beauty one who isn’t afraid to get dirty from their stunts but still showing our their feminine side enough to show they like to be seen a lady nonetheless, though the slight glare in her eyes makes it seem like she doesn’t trust him like he was some sort of spy or monster out to get them.
When he saw the saw the next girl his heart skipped a beat at the exotic and elegant beauty beforehand and couldn’t help but slightly blush upon looking on her when he shifted his focus on her. Those light grey or white fur coat of hers complemented her dark-colored attire quite lovely as well seeing her sense of fashion as well as presented in curvy and hourglass figure in a way that would most certain turn a lot of male heads around as seem like a very classic dame. However despite all this he couldn’t help but feel she wasn’t like other sophisticated and high society folks who scoff at those of the less class with their snobbish and arrogant attitude, and that she seem like a very generous and understanding sort… deep down he feels she also a very girly-girl with it comes to make-up and gossip and the like.
The one standing next her was just as equally beautiful and gave his heart another attack by the overload of cuteness this one seems to generate on a daily basis. Her fur coat’s colors were pale light grayish gold or more commonly a light yellow that went well with her pink hair… or was it mane in this case? Though she seem both alerted to his presence and hiding behind her friend, given a shy and timid nature about this one to the boy, though the look of concern and worry in his well-being seem to tickle him funny as he never had such a cute girl look at him so tenderly and sweetly before even one who is obviously shy and timid about someone new.
Lastly the final girl was practically on top of him almost, well on his left side than over his chest which the cowgirl Equine was kneeling with her hand out while the schoolgirl Equine was on his right on her hands on her knees, and this girl with the giant open smile on her face that seem to ooze out boundless bundles of energy that never seem to go out like she was on a constant sugar rush. She had a fur coat full of pink or lighter pink or a pale light grayish rashberry, whichever one it was, that went with her dark pinkish hair as well as looked like the embodiment of pink itself and those big blue eyes of her peering all over him somewhat gave him warning bells in his head like she was going to jump on him and gave him the biggest bear hug of his life, though she seemed extremely friendly and unafraid of the unknown. He couldn’t help but like her for some reason.
Now that he’s gotten a proper look at the girls… he couldn’t help but find them extremely cute and pretty to him, more so than human girls back home. Is that a problem he should be worrying about or just roll with it?
They do have very ‘humanoid’ bodies so it might not be a problem, especially their chest areas where he couldn’t help by notice that all of them were quite well-endowed even the one with the cool rainbow-colored hair were despite being the smallest in this group of six and it looked to be at least between C-size to D-size cup.
Thirdly, and before he forgets, is that they all have tails as well considering they are Equine, even anthropomorphic, it would’ve been weird otherwise if they lacked tails. They all have their own styles to it as well matching their hairstyle as well; starting with the cowgirl Equine her tail was straight and long being combed well and tied into a ponytail, ironically, with a red scrunchie like her main mane had which made her down-to-earth casual look even more welcoming and inviting.
The elegant Equine’s tail was just like her enchanting hairstyle as well with her tail interestingly spiraling in an exotic, sophisticated, and elegant look that was perfectly naturally to her that heightens her appearance even more to be alluring and memorizing. The shy and quiet one’s tail was long and graceful in appearance too and seems to curve a bit to get it a soft and gentle look which equally made her graceful and kind look go perfectly together and seem to be almost like a natural fashion model, maybe even a supermodel one.
The schoolgirl-looking mare’s tail was neatly trimmed and straight and though he has no other words to best described it, it seem organized and neat to show someone that she’s a rather organized individual like those perfect honors students from school who want nothing but absolute perfection in attendance and want everything in a neat and orderly fashion.
The athletic one seems to be a complete opposite to that with her tail being more wild and free-spirited and not worrying about every little detail yet she seem to style it nonetheless to have a good appearance, like shouting to the world that she’s loud and pride and one who enjoys being in the center of the spotlight.
And finally the pink fur of pure energy that looks to party all day and night long’s tail is more or less the same as her mane which definitely screams she’s a party animal and enjoys going out and having fun with smiles all around. Every detail about her, even her tail, gave off a radiance of life and oddly he got the weirdest feeling like her tail could do many amazing and unexplainable strange things including her mane and most likely the rest of her body.
Though he just met just by looking at their clothing, their hair styles, and the gestures they’re showing him he got a pretty good feel on what their personalities could be and some other unexplainable bits like that tail thing with the pink one. It was something he picked up on as a kid as he had very good awareness and perception skills and most of the times managed to guess a person’s personality and actions right just by noticing these little details about them, though he has gotten a few wrong before. He can’t really explain it himself it’s just how he is as strange as he is.
“Uh… you alright there sugercube?” the Southern accent mare spoke again with a perplexing and concern look as her eyebrow raised up questionable at the boy’s silence and looking back and forth between him. She figured they were so different and strange compare to him, which the feeling is mutual here though they mean no offense, he was simply taken aback and in awe at their appearance.
“Huh?” his mind snap back to reality as he was called out and he shakes his head as he takes the girl’s hand as she lifts him up on his feet, with a lot of strength mind you, “Uh… thank you.”
“Oh, don’t mind him!” the completely pink one giggle with a hand over her mouth, “He was just finishing his monologues about us, that’s all! He was very sweet about it too even though he just met us and did a very accurate description about us too, that makes he is very funny to do so too and I like him already!”
“What?” was all the young man could get out as he was confused by her statement… and how did she know about his inner thoughts? Le Gasp! Was she psychic perhaps?!
“Eh… don’t mind her none, sugercube,” the girl in the Stetson hat said as she shook her head in a deflated manner as she returns her gaze onto the young man before her and bobbing her head up and down to better examine him and his curious appearance. Until he got a sudden dizzy spell and was stumbling back and forth in place with a hand on his forehead to try to alleviate the pain, “Hey! Are you alright there, sugercube?” Applejack asked in concern as her friends also looked on with concern with the newcomer.
“Whoa… that’s weird,” the boy tries to straighten himself from his wobbling earlier, “What exactly just happened?”
At that moment the vortex in the sky, causing everyone to look up at it, began acting irregular by it twisting and stretching itself in a wild manner like it was a living creature writhing in pain and flailing about before imploding on itself sucking inward and shrinking until it sizzled and frizzled out of exist. The sky returned to normal and no longer had a crack or tear in the middle of it and the vortex vanished without a trace like it never happened in the first place.
Though before it went out the boy standing on the ground gobsmacked and in awe twisted his eyebrow downward and one upward in confusion as he couldn’t swore he saw something detached itself from the void in the midst, but shrugged it off as nothing.
“Well…,” Twilight started off after witnessing the event that has transpired before them, “That was unexpected.”
“I’ll say,” the boy replied back while still staring up in the sky until he moved his head back down to see all the townspeople, and the six closest ones, staring back at him with wonder and curiosity though it was a little unsettling a bit. However the one with the rainbow-colored hair was still eyeing him with suspicious like he was a spy or a threat.
“Hello there?” the boy awkwardly wave to them. The girls didn’t notice before as their minds were preoccupied with other thoughts, but the young man was wearing a large blue backpack on his back and two very large black gym bags latched onto his side with the straps crossing over his chest and shoulders and it seem like there were a few more bags behind him as well that came with him on the ride. It looked like he was moving his entire room from his old home to a new home or he could've mean he was going camping or returning from vacation or something along those lines.
“Oh! H-Hello there,” Twilight shook out of her aspiration as she smiled at the stranger, he really didn’t look dangerous and she had a feeling he was really friendly being, “Sorry to bring this up all of a sudden, but could you tell us what’s going on here and how did that vortex appeared? Judging how you ‘came out’ of the vortex earlier you must know something about.”
“Oh, sure,” the boy replied automatically, his eyes widen a bit beforehand as he rubs the back of his head, “I need to recollect my thoughts for myself also.”
The girls took another look at the boy as he pondered about the recent events that transpired before he appeared before him he wore a long-sleeved crimson red sweat-jacket hoodie with a v-neck black t-shirt underneath, leather fingerless black gloves, baggy blue cargo pants that seemed a bit longer than his legs seeing the bottom of it scrunched up and over his black basketball sneakers. A very interesting choice of clothing, who that’s seems to be an adventurous side to it as well as a casual yet fashionable hero look which Rarity was eyeing with interest. It seemed like he has a good taste of fashion himself like her, but she wouldn’t mind expanding his horizon on it a bit.
“Um…,” his face twisted into a nervous expression with a wry smile, “This is a problem… I can’t seem to remember.”
“W-What?! You lost your memories?!” Twilight exclaimed in shock and worry!
“Well… it’s not that I lost my memories, it’s more like I’m missing a piece of it,” his brow furrowed seriously, “I remember my name and the rest of my life up to today, but what happens later today and now is what I’m missing. I don’t recall how I got here or the vortex… but there was something.”
“I-Is that so?” Twilight sighed a little with relief, though it seems like she won’t be getting an answer anytime soon. What kind of event was it to have a piece of his memory erased like that? Going by what he was saying it sounded that he stumbled upon something he wasn’t suppose to see and or hear and got caught up with it in the mix.
Rainbow Dash didn’t seem to believe him as she blew a raspberry, “Pfft, yeah right. How do we know he’s pretending to have amnesia instead?” while crossing her arms over her chest and narrowing her eyes on the boy.
“Ahem,” Applejack clears her throat as she glares at her friend while placing her hands on her hips to emphasis the point, “Ah can vouch for the poor fella, Ah can tell he’s tellin’ the truth.”
Rainbow Dash crosses her arms and rolls her eyes at first, but then she smirks and gives the boy a warm look instead as she wraps her arm over his head and pulls him closer to her, “Well if my friends trust you then I will to, you do seem like an alright guy after all AJ can tell when someone’s lying or telling the truth,” she seems to have open up to him rather quickly to his surprise until she pulled him into her face with her eyes glaring at him, “But, make no mistake pal, you make one false move and hurt my friends I’m taking you down in 5 seconds flat!”
He gulped in panic a bit at the threat she made at him, though a little relief at that strangely. It would seem like it will take some time to warm up to her completely.
“Good,” she patted him on the back and jump back into the air hovering above the ground a bit with her wings flapping, which to the boy’s wonder and surprise it could lift her into the air, “He seems pretty cool, I like him. I could show him how awesome it is to know me personally.”
“Woohoo! Take a look at all those bags he’s carrying!” Pinkie Pie smiling jumps up into the air shouting with joy throwing her arms up high as she does it, “What are all those bags for? Are they party bags? Were you going to a party or throwing a party? I love parties and you must love parties too, but who wouldn’t love parties, right? Like that one time I throw an ‘Everypony Loves Bag Party’ and it was a stuffing and carrying good time after my After After Party of the Turkey and Chicken Dance Party…”
“Huuuuh?” the boy dropped his jaw in confusion at what the pink girl was talking about. A Bag Party after a Turkey and Chicken Dance party? What in the world were those and you can throw a party for bags?
“Um… please don’t mind her,” Twilight sighed as she placed a hand gently on her forehead as she said that then returns to a normal smiling expression curiosity gnawing at her, “But why are you carrying those bags? Where you planning on going somewhere for a long stay vacation or returning from one?”
The boy perks up and then smiles proudly as he huffs out his chest with his fists on his hips like he was a noble figure basking in the glory of his accomplishments, “Ah! About that… today's the today that I finally move out of my family’s house and start living on my own! I took every last one of my stuff from my room and stuff them into my bags, though it was a challenge carrying them all, though the walking distance wasn’t that far from my old home” he sighed awkwardly at that thought scratching his cheek with his finger, “And I was on my way to my new home… umm…”
He stops and ponders to himself, “Then I recalled a noise in an old alleyway to an abandon building site… and that’s where my memories get murky and suddenly I find myself here with my memories starting from where I woke up and was greeted by you guys… sort of speak.”
Twilight rubs her chin in a thinking manner analyzing the facts from the mysterious stranger. So today back on his world he was planning on moving out of his old home to a new one and on his way and he noticed a strange noise nearby an old abandon part of his hometown it seems and from there he must’ve encountered something there that became the tear in the sky over her home moments ago and what caused him to come here. The questions were… who, what, and why? Honestly it would seem the strange young man stumbled upon whatever it by accident and sent him here.
Applejack, thought not an expert on many scientific aspects, put on a worried brow on and places a hand on Twilight’s shoulder, “Well before we start askin’ questions about the hows and whys, how’s about sum introductions first? Ah think the poor boy needs sum good friends right about now. Ah’m Applejack, and it’s a pleasure t’ meet ya partner!”
Shaking vigorous and rapidly by the sudden handshake by the cowgirl before him, making him bob up and down like a jackhammer for a few seconds, and after she calm down on the handshake the boy rattled his head to make sure everything in his head was in place and looked down at her hand noting that she also had five fingers just like him.
He stares back at her who had a warm smile on her and couldn’t help but smile back at her and felt excitement tingle in his chest, he was meeting a being vastly different from him like in fantasy stories and he could handle contain his bewilderment, and returns the handshake with his own level of vigor which was more mild than hers, “It’s a pleasure to meet you too! My name’s Christopher Cornelius Corona, but all my friends and family call me Chris and you’re free to do the same too!”
Twilight gave herself a little giggle, though she is a bit surprise that he’s been taking all of this in relatively normal and patient with them when he has the right to ask what’s going on and entitled to a little panic attack but impressed he did not, as she approaches him and gives out a handshake as well, “Applejack’s right, we’ll worry about what happen to you later. For now we’ll welcome you to our home, Ponyville, and I’m Twilight Sparkles and you may call me Twilight as well.”
“Ponyville?” the boy tilted his head, narrowing his eyes in deep thought with his index finger hovering over his lips, “So I take it you’re…?”
“Yes, we’re Ponies!” Twilight quipped cheerfully happy to enlighten him with new information about themselves, she does enjoy helping expanding other’s knowledge as much as possible, “Though you look kinda like us, but not at the same time. You seem to have more… hominoidea characteristics instead though lacking a bit in the fur department.”
Ah! Chris thought they were pony or horses in nature and it seems he was right, though he wonders if they’re aware they’re ponies that evolved to their current state or simply believe all ponies look like this, but he’ll wonder about it later as he perks up to Twilight’s question, “Oh, that’s because the name of my species are called Humans, or homosapien for the scientific term. I’ll explain more about us later.”
“Fascinating,” Twilight breathed sagely as she took out a notepad and pen from her back somehow and somewhere and started jotting down what he told her, “I’ll save these questions about them for later now.”
Warming up to the stranger, that was called a human, the purple-haired fashionista elegantly walked over to him with a dazzling friendly smile that would leave any man, human, pony, or otherwise, melting at the sight especially with the gentle yet half-lidded and somehow flirty look in her eyes as she gazes at him, “Greetings, darling. I do apologize for the sudden questionnaires about how you arrived here, and being in a strange place with unfamiliar faces no doubt, but I assure you we mean you no harm and welcome you to our humble abode. You may call me Rarity, darling,” the fair fur lady spoke with flair as she flicks her mane’s front bang that dabbled slightly over her right eye, “And do not hesitant to ask us anything you need, I would be most delighted to get you want you need to make yourself as comfortable as much as possible during your stay until we sort of your problems to return home. I'll do anything I can to help, free-of-charge of course.”
The boy was quite taken aback by this, he wasn’t expecting anyone… or would it be anypony here… that would go out of their way to a total and complete stranger like himself. She appears more generous than he thought of at first and he couldn’t help it rubbing the back of his head in embarrassing and blushing a bit, even if they’re different species he couldn’t help but think how beautiful she is too, “O-Oh… thanks. You don’t have to, but I’ll ask if there’s any help I need and I hope I could return the favor as well…”
“There will be no need for that,” Rarity waves her finger in front of her to dismiss his offer to return her kindness, “Though I do appreciate it nonetheless sweetie, but I must say you’re clothing is quite interesting. It may not have the air of nobility about it, but it does say it’s ‘you’ and it very fitting as well as bring out your charming and handsome self out more profoundly, if I do say so myself.”
Rarity says the last bit with her cozying up a bit, getting closer to his chest, and battering her eyelashes at him which in turned made him gulped. If she does this on a regular he might fall for her and never want to go home! Though he is quite curious why she is suddenly flirting with him at this moment or perhaps this is a normal thing she does?
“If you don’t mind me asking, where do you get your clothes? They look divine and quite stylish as well!”
Oh, that explains the flirting a bit.
“Oh, that! Actually I ask my older sister to make my outfit for me, she’s quite the fashionista and loves designing clothing,” Chris happily smiles at that thought as he loves his big sister despite the times she and the other members of his family give him a hard time… though mostly regarding him getting a girlfriend which he never had, “I would think you two would get along quite well. You two have very… similar personalities a bit and have both great tastes in style.”
“Oh my, why thank you!” Rarity beamed joyfully, “I would love to get the chance to meet your sister she sounds quite like a kindred spirit to me.”
“Hehehe… sort of?” Chris chuckled nervously while rubbing the back of his head. His older sister had a love of fashion which was seemed to be shared by this young lady, though his older sister wasn’t a flirt and had a more subtle—not direct—approach to people. Though he believed the two would get along famously as Rarity made way for her next friend to introduce themselves to him.
“Alright, alright, we’ve been waiting for a while now but it’s time for the most awesome and greatest introduction to the coolest, bravest, and undeniably awesomest pony around,” the tomboyish and athletic girl spun herself around in the air and then zoomed up and down overhead of everyone and zigzag all over the place with loopdaloops until she shot straight down and backflipped herself on her hooves and skid herself across the dirt and stopped an inch away from the human boy and pulled him into another arm hug and she shouted with proud, “The one and only Rainbow Dash and future Wonderbolt member! No need to rush it just let all my awesomeness soak in your little head and be ‘wowed’ by my cool greatness.”
Well she wasn't lacking in confidence that’s for sure he thought, but those aerial stunts she pulled off moments ago with supersonic level of speeds and control was undeniably cool as she said and couldn't help but have his jaw hang open in astonishment, “Wow…”
Clearly happy by his expression of how awesome she was Rainbow Dash grinned and playfully punched his right arm, “Yeah, I know I’m cool. Though that is to say I’m kinda interest at what you humans, right, can do? I could teach you a few pointers to improve yourself in all athletic activities and we can do stunts together if you like.”
“Well,” he rubs his chin on that thought, “I could use different exercises as well, though my hobbies are more incline to drawing and writing you see. I like writing my own original stories and designing my own characters, which I used my own design of my clothing here for my sister to use to create my outfit.”
Rainbow Dash grunted at that statement a little disappointed he wasn’t all that interested in sports like her, though Twilight seemed to glow at the mention he likes to write stories and wouldn’t mind seeing what they’re like perhaps he’s into the more literal non-fictions or perhaps like her mother prefers fantasy-based fiction stories instead and Rarity is equally impressed as he seems to have a knack for drawing and designing and wouldn’t mind seeing his artwork perhaps they can inspire her to do create new and unique designs for her fashion line as well.
“However,” Rainbow Dash perks up when he hears him continue with his interest as notices a smile when he speaks up again, “I did take some Kung Fu classes and learned a few variety of martial arts moves and I wouldn’t mind having a sparring partner if you’re up for it. Or do you not have Kung Fu here?”
“Oh yeah! That’s great” Rainbow Dash throws a fist into the air to pump herself up after hearing that and grins in a somewhat smug manner, “That’s what I’m talking about, and yeah we do have Kung Fu! And if you don’t know maybe some soccer as well?”
“I love soccer, but if you can do basketball as well, since it’s my favorite sport, I’m in,” Chris grins back with a cocky look to it as well with his arms crossed to show he’s quite confident in his abilities.
“You’re on!” Rainbow Dash declares with vigor, she and him might become very close friends very fast after all. Provided he doesn’t do anything stupid to get on her bad side. Though she's still going to keep on eye on him to make sure he's not a spy or something sinister.
Chuckling to himself at her happy expression he forgotten all about the different species thing and to him, regardless of who or what a person is, he’ll treat everyone the same as everyone has a ‘heart’ as well, he's also been an open-minded person. Upon looking at the rest of the gang his eyes come in contact with another member who shy-fully looked away yet shifts her eyes back and forth on him.
“Oh hello there,” he approached the pink-haired pegasi girl and extends a friendly hand to her, “It’s a pleasure to meet you, I’m Chris and you are?”
The girl in question held her arms behind her back and playfully, and cutesy, taps the front of her shoes into the ground as her eyes look back and forth at him with her face leaning towards the ground, with her right eye now hiding behind her hair, her ears flop to the side as well with her face slightly blushing at him talking to her as she’s not one talk normally to anyone new to her.
*Hnrg!*
C-Cuteness overload! The very gesture, nature, and expression she carried was so elegant and gracefully to her seemingly fragile frame, despite her very well-endowed body, and the way her eyes look at him was causing his heart to nearly have a heart explosion of epic proportions as he has never witness anything so cute before or doing something so adorable unconsciously as his face heats up each passing moment. Why do anthropomorphic equine girls have to be so gosh darn prettier than human girls?
“I-I’m… utter…hy,” the girl muttered so sweetly, softly, and quietly that Chris could barely catch what she was saying. Good heavens! Could this girl possibly become even more adorable!? He just wants to scoop her up into his arms and protect her from the world’s danger or cuddle the heck out of her, but she’s a grown adult, or at least a late teenager, who can take care of themselves and it would be a little awkwardly and somewhat insulting to her but he wouldn’t mind helping her in the end.
“E-Excuse me? I didn’t quite catch that, did you say ‘Butterpie’?” He tries to speak up again after shaking his previous thoughts to regain his coherent speaking manners again and felt a little embarrassed that he nearly choked on his words.
She shook her head gracefully at that, how does she do that, as she finally looks him in the eyes and speaks up in volume and less shyly, “No, it’s Fluttershy. It’s nice to meet you… if you don’t mind me being your friend that is…”
“It’s OK, I really look forward to being you friend Fluttershy,” he beamed back at her who in turn showed him her sweet and gentle smile that nearly gave him another heart attack of the sheer adorableness of her nature, “And I must say, your name fits you it seems and not to mention it’s a really cute name for you as well.”
“Huh?” Fluttershy squeaked as her face heated up and her cheeks turned red and she stammered back and fidgeted her fingers together in front of her stomach, “O-Oh thank you, that was really sweet of you to say.”
Chris rubs the back of his head in response with a burning face, his knees are becoming weak now and if he doesn’t change the subject or move on to the final member of their little group to greet he’s going to faint from Fluttershy’s cute pressure, and before he could think of the next thing to say or do…
“HEY THERE! I’M PINKIE PIE AND IT’S SUPER-DUPER-LUBER-UBER COOLAWESOMAZING TO MEET YOU,” a ball of pink abruptly came into view, with her being upside-down and her nuzzle pressing against his nose Chris took a step back in shock and did a double-take and notice she was right side up now, as she came into his personal space again on her tippy toes, or tippy hooves, with a giant grin plastered on her face like she just opened up her Christmas Present and got the present she wanted forever. He didn’t know how to approach this situation with her practically pressing up against him with her arms in front and making her chest hug each other, which he didn’t mean to comment but were probably the biggest size of her group or any of her kind for miles, and her hands holding together as she somehow manage to keep her balance.
“YOU’RE OH-SO GOING TO LOVE IT HERE! WE’LL HAVE PARTIES EVERYDAY AND SLEEPOVERS AS WELL AS CAKES AND PUDDING, ALONG WITH PLAYING RAD FUN GAMES LIKE PIN THE TAIL ON THE PONY AND TWIST-A-TWIST! OH I CAN’T HELP TO GET STARTED BUT FIRST I HAVE TO THROW YOU A WELCOME PARTY TO PONYVILLE AND WE NEED TO INVITE EVERYPONY THERE, BUT EVERYPONY IS HERE ALREADY SO I DON’T NEED TO INVITE EVERYPONY AND WE CAN JUST THROW THE PARTY HERE AS I GOT MY PARTY CANNON WITH ME! WE’LL GOING TO BE THE GREATEST AND BESTEST OF BESTIE BESTEST BEST FRIENDS AND YOU’RE GOING TO LOVE IT HERE AND ALL OUR FRIENDS TOO AND, AND…”
She exploded with overbrimming happiness as she recounts what she plans to do with him and she incremental increases the volume of her voice after passing sentence, if one could figure out which one were the sentences, and Chris’s eyes widen in suspense as he’s not sure how to deal with this. She’s full of energy that’s for sure and couldn’t help but sigh understandingly and looks onto her with a wry smile and his eyebrows arc down as he couldn’t help but smile inwardly towards her for being who she is and he admires and likes her for that… though she could turn the volume down a peg.
As to answer this unspoken wish Twilight covers Pinkie Pie’s mouth from behind who had just about enough of it, “Pinkie! We get it! You need to relax yourself otherwise you might scare our new friend here.”
Stopping in place from her jumping up and down with glee, and literally stopped mid-air that got Chris and the others looking at her with bewildered expressions, though the poor human was the most shocked, until Pinkie Pie smiled back at Twilight, “Okie-Dokie-Lokie,” landing back down on the ground while still smiling and waving at Chris as she return to the sideline along with her friends.
Sighing to herself now that little issue has resolved itself she looked back at Chris and smiled wryly at him, “Sorry about that, Pinkie Pie tends to go overboard a lot with a lot of things.”
“Ha ha, no worries,” Chris shrugged it off with a wave, but he couldn’t help feel re-energized all of a sudden from Pinkie’s over enthusiastic nature and also couldn’t help but be drawn to her, “She’s actually quite funny, I think she’d be real fun to hang out with.”
“No doubt about that,” Twilight nodded in agreement as Pinkie jumps in the background with excited as she overheard his compliment to her.
“Totally we’re going to have the greatest of fun together and we’ll laugh about it,” Pinkie hugs Chris from behind his back, which he could’ve swore he saw her a second ago in front of him and behind Twilight, as he looks back to her and his face heats up again as he feels two soft heavenly cushions rubbing against his back… wait, when did she take off his backpack? And when did she start wearing his backpack?
“Oh this is great! It wouldn’t be a Harem story if you didn’t get along with everypony here especially with silly shenanigans in the mix where you get into compromising with all the girls here and have everypony you meet fall in love with you while battling off ancient evils to threaten our world like a hero of legend and having a huge family with everyone when you marry them as well with loads of kids too,” Pinkie giggled into his ears.
“Urm… what?” Was everyone’s reaction at Pinkie’s statement. What on earth was she talking about?
“Oops! Silly me, spoiler alert!” she giggled once more and skipped away.
“Rrrriiight,” Twilight shakes her head, honestly she doesn’t know what goes on in Pinkie Pie’s head and that’s one of the few things in the world that Twilight is happy off NOT knowing.
Chris darted back and forth between the two and simply chuckled warily and dismissed it as nothing but that Pinkie girl being random and it seems to be a common thing among her friend, though he is curious how she took off his backpack and slipped it back on him without him noticing. Is she part ninja he wondered? Suddenly a dizzy spell hits him causing him to swing back and forth and holding his head. He felt really tired and it seems like the fatigue had finally caught up with him.
“Hey are you OK?” Twilight alertly called out to him in concern when she noticed him staggering him place, it would seem the fall had finally caught up with the rest of his body and know he was feeling the delayed pain now.
Fluttershy instinctively rushed to his side to catch him before he fell backwards and holds him in her arms as she places a hand on his forehead to take his temperature, “Oh my goodness, are you alright?! Oh, we should’ve brought you to the hospital the first thing after that nasty fall you had instead of asking you questions and introducing ourselves! Please forgive us for that.”
“I-It’s fine… I’m not really tired, just exhausted but I could use some rest,” Chris groaned a bit as he tries to shake the lethargy off of him but to no avail.
“Good idea Fluttershy, perhaps we should do a physical check-up as well so that nothing else is wrong with his body plus documenting a medical record would be prudent as well as he doesn’t receive an illness during his stay here, come on everypony lets help him up,” Twilight noted on Fluttershy’s suggestion and joint down notes on their new friend’s condition to make sure he was in perfect health as well.
“Here, let me help,” Applejack spoke up as she lifted his arm over her shoulder to get him up on his feet as Rainbow Dash grabs some of his bags to carry and Twilight and Rarity used their magic to lift the rest of his bags as well, “Ponyville Hospital isn’t ‘hat far from here, we’ll have ya fixed up in a jiffy.”
He smiled at them and couldn’t help but think they’re really quite opened to strangers like this and he noticed earlier while talking to these six mares here that the citizens of the town were watching him as well and as more time passed with him and the girls were talking the rest of them step closer. Some had looks of awe on their faces, while others were curious written on their faces, and some were smiling too at him eager at a case to meet him, though there were a few giving a look of confusion and worry but no ill-will intent behind them and when he started to stammer and get ready to be brought to the hospital all of them were concern for their well-being and made room for the girls to take him there.
Pinkie Pie stood up straight with her hands on her hips, “And don’t you worry a thing Chrissy! Once you’re done at the hospital I’ll throw a ‘Welcome to Ponyville and Happy You Got Better Pinkie Pie’s Newest Bestie Bestest Best Human Friend Party’ at Sugercube Corner and it will be the greatest human party ever!”
Pinkie Pie trotted up ahead to let everyone know at the hospital at a new patient coming in and Chris couldn’t help but shake his head and smile at her, he had a feeling he was going to love it here, however something just occurred to him right now after Pinkie Pie left, “… Chrissy?”
He said with some displeasure. Don’t tell him… is THAT going to be his nickname from her to him. He groans mentally at that, he did not like such a girly sounding nickname for him he had some pride as a man!
As Chris was being lead the way to the Ponyville Hospital the rest of the townspeople nodded their heads and went about their business, but they were all getting ready for the party Pinkie Pie was planning to throw for him and we’re going to help like always with most of Pinkie Pie’s parties. Even if he was an alien creature to him they learned not to treat somepony differently because they look different and they were very interested in him and could tell he’s going to need help settling in after his unfortunate accident of being spirited away from his world.
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Just as everypony in town were welcoming the mysterious human in their town, they failed to noticed after the vortex sealed itself shut and disappearing from their sights a black blob shot out from the fizzling particles just as the vortex was fading out and landed into the nearby woods inside the bushes. After a few moments of rustling sounds coming from the bushes a pair of glowing yellow eyes peered out from its hidden place and a row of razor-shaped teeth were seen from its toothy smile as it looked on that was happening in town.
Giggling menacingly to itself the ‘mysterious shadow’ blob mused to itself about its recently scuffle with the human boy earlier.
“It would seem like I picked up some extra baggage on my way to Equestria,” the mysterious shadow said to itself, its voice slightly deep and a masculine monstrous tone in nature with a strange echoing effect booming over in a low tone that almost seems childish, but smiles to itself about the whole ordeal, “Though this isn’t according to plans, this will definably be fun! It’s always better to have these little ‘unpredictable’ events it’s no fun when everything goes according to plan!”
Retreating into the forest the shadow slowly fades away into the background chuckling to itself in a maniac mad way, “Though for now, thanks to the boy earlier I need to restore my former powers… I did not think HE would have come across a spirit such as that to stand on equal grounds with myself, however I did managed to seal his memories away for the time being. Would be a problem if he started using his newfound powers right from the start. Still, I’ll let him have his fun with his new friends first… he deserves a bit of happiness before our fated rivalry tears him away from all that and feel despair… echo.”
On that day… no one in Equestria could be prepared or predicted for the events that soon followed since the human boy’s arrival and when that day comes, everything will change.
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here we go. this is probably gonna be a funny chapter and a "what is this I don't even" chapter that I love.
good work is all that I am trying to say :).
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Sorry it took so long! Hope you enjoy and tell me what you think of it? I kinda rushed it at the end, it's late at night and I'm super tired but I did my best.
love it keep it up
Nice start to a great looking story!
It's nice to see an update of this story. Really liked his introduction to the girls, particularly PP and Shy given his flustered reactions to both of them. Still, I'm surprised that PP is bigger than Celestia. Also, I liked the hybrid genetics. I hope to see more chapters soon.
Can you please provide a link to a picture that shows how the ponies look in this story?
Little tip: You don't need to describe the main six twice. It can either be your description or from Coronas point of view not both.
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I will draw their looks when I can, though it might be while until you see a cover art and their looks.
I am like ze fat man. I must ave MOAR!
Pls, zat was very gud, but take your time. I shall be in ze corner waiting.
MEH GUSTA.
i understand what you mean also if what you say is ture that will mean the dazzling never be in Parallel World, so i think you got it and make sure you don't sick again
lolz oh pinkie pie awesome work
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I might have the Dazzling appear in the story, but their story alternate a bit to fit this world's story.
And thanks! ^_^
This statement alone earned you my downvote. If you want my long-winded rant explaining why, just let me know.
when you think you can update the next?
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Not sure really. I'll be busy playing Dragon Ball Xenoverse once it comes out and I'm working off getting the latest gear for my main character in FFXIV as well, but I'm mostly close to it.
I already have the core concept of the chapter already, plus I forgot Spike's introduction in the last chapter so I'll correct in the beginning of the next one. Also I will be revealing how "Cutie Marks" are shown which I have yet to see an Anthro MLP fanfic do this before.
I will try to get the next update out as soon as possible. Please enjoy what I have for the story so far as you won't be seeing any update until possible April as I'm working two jobs at the moment which also takes up a lot of my time too.
What kind of harem are we going for in anime terms? Are we talking Rosario + Vampire Harem or we going Negima Massive Harem?
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Well considering the mass amount of characters in the series I would say "Negima Massive Harem", despite not really reading or looking into that series much, and after episode 100 of the MLP series I'm going to add in some bits from it but I will still largely keep what I had in mind when I first timed this.
Also sorry for not updating when I should, but I've been playing FFXIV and I'm busy preparing myself for when Heavensward comes out. I will update my story when I can.
Also I looked at who's getting in and I'll say at least 30 are in which is a hefty number and going to be tricky to get it. Still debating with myself to see if I should include that much or tone it down or go with more of them.
6091109 You should do a characters at a time first before deciding to short them. Like after the first group of harem after getting a handle on them then you make that decision. Thank you for answering the question. Also could you make sure where in story clear enough for an average reader such as myself can follow what going on.
You already said it already after Twilight became an alicorn princess, so can you make sure where get or understand why the mane six or the other in the harem wants him so much. Like why did each of them fall for your character that would both be in character and some OOC moment but ease up on it to see that progress to where we at or going in the story. All harem story in most part show why each characters fell the way they feel to the main lover character.
6091109 What I mean is what influence does he have to have the mares love him, what inspiring action cause the mare to see your character as a lover or a friendship that blossom into a relationship.
Other in human harem either have a scent or stamina, or simple act of kindness and similarity toward the characters that gets them to lover the character.
It also help you pace around both canon, background and possible villainesses characters into the harem also confrontation before they're a compromise between characters.
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You're welcome! XD
Though what do you mean to have the "story clear enough for an average reader to follow"? Was it too overly complicated? :/
Granted I wanted to write a well-written story with good details and better management of spelling and grammar, though I do admit I have some problems and mistakes with it. Not to mention some run-on sentences.
And just to clarify this story takes place in Season 4 with some changes.
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And regarding adding them into the harem... well I'm not going to make them sudden fall in love with the main character at first glance. I want to write them as friends first and they bond over time and acts like playing jokes on one another, helping another one, chatting and goofing off, and sometimes arguing where the girls slowly begin to fall for their strange new friend and it might be just the simple and kind acts he does or his hobbies that got their interest in him first but they learn he's dependable and someone that can rely on and well... you'll have to read to see it.
For some villain character it takes a while longer and some "reforming" and such to win them over to their side, begrudging first, and then see the main characters as something more than to kill boredom by passing the time with.
I hope this satisfy you until then. I will be sure to plan accordingly and see what happens when we get there.
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Some parts you might know. A 10 year old foreign teacher Negi Springfield in a classroom full of high school girls and he happened to be a wizard.
prepare for funanimation dub opening.
Contact scene sky driving eng sub.
Not that I wanna rush. Just want to know. Everything cool with this story or should we expect a new chapter every year? I don't honestly think I came off as a douche but if it did so very sorry. Just curios and want to read more dude.
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Cartoon Logic
This is a pretty good story to read with a lot of romantic and comedy drama. I wonder how many other anthro ponies will be having a liking to Chris anyway? Probably Derpy, Spitfire, Lightning Dush, Vinyl Scratch, Octavia, Lyra, Bonbon, Roseluck, Coco, or maybe Starlight Glimmer, but I don't know if she'll be in those chapters, just my thinking. So uh keep up the good work in putting in more chapters of more action, romance, comedy, adventure, and some other memorable moments!
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There's going to be a lot of them! You got most of them right off the bat and I'll be changing their stories a bit (as there's no Magic Mirror to a Parallel World) so writing in Sunset and the Dazzlings' stories in are going to be tricky.
Currently I was going to update before New Year's, but I got sick and was away on vacation so I couldn't work on Chapter 3 even though I got the general idea on how that chapter will play and now I'm stuck working for the next 4 months. Hopefully I can gain a little bit of free time to write Chapter 3... it's long overdue.
Well I'm glad you're enjoying it so far, thank you for the comment and I hope you'll stick around for the future chapters.
When is the next chapter coming out?
6909925 I'm really hoping that more chapters are arriving.
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You won't have to wait long. Tax Season is almost over and then my free time will be cleared up and I can go back to writing as much as I can. ^_^
Sorry for the delay! Just a little longer please.
7116797 Okay...
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Just to let you know I have some of Chapter 3 written already! If you want and others are fine with it too, I can post a preview of Chapter 3 on my profile page as a Blog to let everyone know it's on the way!
Would you like to have a preview of CH3 up to maul over before the full chapter is released? The preview is only going to be a small part of it.
When's the next update?
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My computer crashed unfortunately with some good idea notes for future chapters, but I'm slowly getting those back. Had to get new HDDs for my PC and seeing if my old files can be saved.
Anyway might take some time. Sorry for the wait. :<
7561318 No worries. I just figured I'd ask because there seemed to be no new updates.
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No problem.
yes, boob sizes are very important for... plot reasons!
More. I must have more!
Well I like what I see so far and i can't wait to read the next chappter and see what happens next keep up the good work
Nice harem!
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Might be more considering how many amazing characters were added to the series. I don't know to reboot this story at a different point of time. Or maybe rewrite parts of the story here. As I intend for this to be before Tirek showed up, but I like Starlight Glimmer a lot (who is going to be in the Harem) so I'd like to see her asap.
I did have Chapter 3 written before the HD crash. But I didn't like what I written so far and was going to erase it and start over again so no real loss there.
Anyway anything think you like to see in this story? I'll listen to any suggestions.
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Well i think you should rewrite the story.
I do not try to tell you that your story is bad.
I like your version write.
Aaaand your story is death. That's just great -_-
Chris Corona
Virus Chris
CoronaVirus
Coincedence?? I THINK NOT!