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Yamazaki


An attic dwelling animator who decided to start writing pony fanfics. Let's see how this plays out.

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A mysterious object is discovered in the night sky above Ponyville, and a radio picks up a strange transmission. A discovery will redefine the history of Equestria and the origins of ponykind.

Something is out there.

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That awkward moment when you also have a character with the same name.

4427524 The mystery deepens. :rainbowwild:

I liked this story. Quite the mystery when you don't know what could be out there...watching us. :fluttershyouch: (Great story by the way, I love ideas like aliens). :pinkiehappy:

4427610 I love those ideas aswell, glad ya' liked it and thanks for the fave!

How the hell does its power source still work?And how does it get maintained?Are you going for the AI route?

4434038 The satellite's power source would likely be solar power. If it's built well enough, it won't need to be maintained.

4434729 yes but celestia implied that its a thousand if not thousands of years old.I can deal with some suspension of disbelief with hundreds of years but thousands is just ridiculous.Maybe it's power source is a nuclear reactor maybe Nanomachines are fixing it I'll even accept humans secretly fixing it But please don't leave this unanswered.

4435201 It's an object shrouded in mystery. Who knows what's maintaining it...

It was a decent story, but it seemed that you could have done more with the story

4531178 Thanks. Maybe I should consider doing more with it.

The Black Knight
by Rei
3,007 words

A mysterious object is discovered in the night sky above Ponyville, and a radio picks up a strange transmission. A discovery will redefine the history of Equestria and the origins of ponykind.

Thoughts Before: Looks like a short first contact-esque story, with the ponies finding some mysterious space probe. I find the use of "Knight" instead of "Night" interesting. Also, a 3,000 word adventure? Meh, I'm guilty of that too.

Thoughts After: This was... nice I guess. While the author got Twilight's obsessive nature down, her diction was perhaps overly calm considering how big of a discovery this would be. She also sort of exists in a convienient narrative vacuum most of the story.

I think the main problem with this story is that it sets up for an interesting revelation, but ultimately the revelation isn't that interesting. Something put that satelite in orbit. Well yes, we knew that already. This certainly didn't deserve the dark or adventure tags; this was straight slice of life.
Also, Celestia reprises her role of sketchy ruler who keeps secrets from her little ponies so they don't freak.

I'm not saying the story is bad. It's nice. But it's not great. I would encourage the author to be bolder in their story ideas, and to work on crafting more identifiable character voices.

Verdict: If you want to read about Twilight doing research on a satellite, you'll enjoy this.

4627470 Thanks for the review. It helps me improve. :twilightsmile:

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