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Just read the second chapter?

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Yeah, but you gotta be clopping to something, with Buckys neurotic behavior, i'd feel sorry for the clop target, those poor, poor models from Playmare wouldn't stand a chance.

Man, phrases like "spunk dispenser" and "cock snot" in the middle of this make me laugh way too much.

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Comedy tag applies!

Huzzah!

Wow, yeah... I need a smoke after that one!! that's excellent

what they didnt know is that all the alicorns were watching out side the window, grinning madly

Again, you can write clop, and write it well.

Okay... So, we know that Ditzy isn't adversed to a little anal play in this universe. Good to know.

That said, I liked these two chapters. They were well written, and really dove into the relationship between the three of them. There was the first real starts of seeing Bucky's spine starting to take shape. In order words, perhaps course words, but words regardless, he finally found his balls.

Well done, The Clop Gods are pleased.

- LF

Jolly good stuff.

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Heads up. Ditzy is going to be one of Derpy's foals later. Might be confusing.

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In retrospect, the letter suffix should've been a tipoff.

Also, I'd been wondering why you'd described the scene as "very biological." Now I know. Oh, how I know. I'm not sure if it was knowledge man was meant to have.

*reads Author's note after reading chapter containing anal sex."
"I'm pooped."
*bursts into a fit of immature giggles*

You should have an interlude sometime in the middle of the night- they've been going for a couple of hours when Derpy suddenly yells- "Water Break!" so they don't get dehydrated....

This is damn good writing, sir. You sure know how to pull off good pony erotica.

Falling asleep in a mess of sexual fluids doesn't sound alluring, though. After all is said and done (emphasis on 'done'), I'd want to change sheets, or at the very least, beds.

4426601 clopping madly*

fixed.

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Well, darn... that means I'm going to have to start calling her Derpy. not that I really mind calling her Derpy, but eh... Regardless, great job on the added scenes.

The power of alliteration is strong with this one.

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I doubt that any of them could change sheets. Or beds. Or do much of anything.

4427534 Point taken. I'm sure they'd like to clean up, but they sexed out all their energy. Sex for hours on end sounds killer...literally.

4427317 It may not be butter, but it still will work well on popcorn.

...what the hell is wrong with me?

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Plus, it comes from a convenient pump. Just like at the movies.

4428069 Might just take a few minutes of vigorous pumping.

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A pump nozzle. That'd make a hell of a cutie mark.

4428182 Applebloom: "Say mister, how'd ya get your cutie mark?"
Pump Nozzle: "Uh...ask me again when you're older." *sweatdrop*

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No, the proper reply...

"Want some freshly pumped butter flavoured topping on your popcorn miss?"

- Urk!

4428328 That would be laying it on a little thick.

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**Snerk**

There is a party in the popcorn bucket and everypony came.

- Oh that was horrid.

- I can see how you came to that conclusion.

- If this keeps up I am going to have a stroke.

- (Silence intensifies)

4428417 One stroke? I'd think there would be many.

And back in The Chase, Sparkler manages to stumble upon the newlyweds on their way to the bathroom in the morning, ensuring even more therapist bills.

It was downright painful, and load after load of cock-snot went rocketing up the screaming pegasus’ poop-chute.

I choked on my drink when I read this part. My keyboard is sticky now.
Double-checked, and yep, there's that comedy tag there. This fic's both sexy and funny.

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The way you ended that chapter gives you the opportunity to write another cloopy chapter. this time, in the shower...

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YES!

Buzzah... Holy literal buck... .-.

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Suuuure.... it was your drink that made your keyboard all sticky.

I'm hoping to see some fun with Magic...ooo. or some RP, yeah. Like..... Evil unicorn Lord has come to plunder the poor Shetland pony with his henchpegusus. Only to discover it was a que where the pegasus, and the Shetland pony use there whiles to subdue the lord.

“Hunf, hunf, hunf, it is like pinching off the most satisfying loaf ever,” Derpy grunted,

Derpy, what are you sayin? Derpy, stahp.

Most interesting sex scenes.

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I would actually like to read that.
these 2 chaps were good.

Hey, anypony here named alonso?

How in the fresh flipping hell can you write somethign so sexy and yet, so hilarious?
Hahahaha! XD I LOVE IT!

Nicely done.

Queef canyon? That's a phrase I never expected out of... well, anyone, really.