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When Twilight is summoned to Canterlot at short notice she fears something is wrong. Something much better comes out of Twilight's visit than anypony could have imagined. Celestia doesn't approve but Luna can lead her own life how she wants. When Celestia sees what Luna has with Twilight, she goes looking for love herself. Sex rating just to be on the safe side.
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Good so far for your first fiction
4446122 thanks Maddie, I hope you liked it, I have another chapter I can put up whenever if you want it now or what...?
4446135 uh yeah I'd love for you to post a new chapter
OK well it'll be up in a sec. I hope you all like it
4446247 its good!
4446807 I'm glad you think so, I just can't wait until later on in the story when I get to ship Celestia too
it could take a while to get there though!
4446902 ooo
ill be watching!
It is good
This is in the top of the popular box!
4447888 wow, never realised it was that popular!
4447526 I'm glad you all like it :)
Woo! I was freaking out cause I thought I forgot to favorite this story and then BAM! Top of the Popular stories list. Congratumalations! Anyway! I'm really enjoying this book. I can't wait for the next update!
4450280 its awesome to see people like this story! I have a long boring day of nothing with a lot of car journey time to write in. I'll definitely have an update by Wednesday if not tomorrow night.
"You're" not your."
You need to re-read this and fix all the grammar mistakes. Other than that this is good.
Unfortunately no one wants to edit for me
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If anypony is interested shoot me a message?
Anyway I've had fun writing this and I hope you enjoy it too
Any of you guys who have any suggestions please let me know! I don't want to exhaust all my ideas to soon. And to you guys giving me the old thumbs down could you let me know why? When this story had just started out I had more negative than positive and I almost quit on it. Thanks everypony
I'm just wondering when Trixie is going to show up? Her character tag is present.
4462198 TGAP Trixie will join the story in a few more chapters after twilight and Luna are an established couple. I might be able to sneak her in early as an extra basically. I can't wait until I can write Trixie's part with Celestia! I have lits of ideas for them both, hell I even have some dialogue written down between the two of them. I hope you didn't mind the slightly longer reply and fact that Trixie isn't in it yet.
4462324 As long as Trixie shows up. I hope this is the Trixie looking for redemption and not power, though.
4462792 yeah for sure! It'll be a little while after the Alicorn amulet incident so there is a lot of flashback material there
4462324 Will this be a Trixlestia romance?
4465460 yep! I've not written about Trixie before so it will be interesting. If there is anything in particular you want to see from them...?
4465500 Ooh! I do love rare pairings. Contrasting Trixie's haughtiness with Celestia patience and kindness could be very nice indeed. Though this is one pairing that needs development and slow softening up to work. Celestia would have to earn Trixie's trust, break through her defenses, so Trixie will accept accept affection and care.
4465460 yes she's going to be in it with Celestia in a few chapters time I promise!
4465531 the only problem with trixlestia is the trust issues and that could take a lot of writing to get around. I've not seen other people do this pairing before so I'm happy you guys like the idea of it
Your editing and pacing could use a little work but over all this is a good start and could develop quite nicely.
4520997 uhhhh yeah. I don't have an editor
I hope you guys didn't have too much trouble with the mistakes, I tried sorting them out once I'd posted the story but alas! when I submitted the chapter again whilst edited there were still the mistakes.
If anypony wants to edit I'd be greatful.
Wow I have to much free time If I'm reading stories past midnight :/. Very nice chapter a bit to short though. Keep up the good work :D.
4535543 yeah I'm sorry about the length, I just haven't had much time recently with my Spanish exam dltaking up so many hours. I don't like posting such short story chaps but no more! Only 1000+ words and mist likely more. Also I'm up till three most days lol but I'm in the UK so I'm walking to school! Well I hope you like it after I post more of it soon.
Okay. I re-read chapter 5 and I am wondering what am I missing? What was Luna's problem? Why was she angry at Twilight?
4536024 she was panicking about what Celestia would think of her and just got really upset and basically lost it. I tried to imply that Luna was slightly inexperienced when it came to emotions and relationships hence the mention of her and discord later on. With her being stuck on the moon she is slightly naive and confused also having never dated a mare. Sorry about any confusion that I caused.
Also 1000 years ago was like this world 70 years ago in the sense of homophobia and being frowned upon for your partner. She was on the moon and so is reverting to the old way of thinking slightly.
Ugh... I so want to go over this with military-grade disinfectant, but the last time I took on more than one fic nothing got done at all. If I give it a shot i'll pm a link to an edited file. No promises.
4535543
How about past 4:30 AM? That was NOT a fun day.
Have you ever considered not rushing things to get them "on time" and instead write to make it good?
Seriously, this is hobby. Not an obligation. If you have to give it some time, then by all means, do so. Rushing things leads to flat characters, flat action, flat dialogue, and overall - flat, uninteresting story.
Da fuck!?
It's good! But it's.... I really haven't seen the couple Trixie/Celestia coming.
4589509 well I get fed up of mostly momlestia stories so I decided to include her being shipped. Trixie never get love except as twixie which I'm not too keen on and its always fun to have more than one ship going on at a time in a story from my point of view just to break it up if there isn't a huge amount of words already. I've wanted to see a Trixie/Celestia for a while so I made it!
She left the what?
This is a nitpick. How was Celestia's mood when Trixie burst in and did she at any point look at Trixie a certain way once the doors closed. BTW, Apologise is apologize.
I can hardly wait for the next chapter.
4590074 thanks for pointing out the mistakes, I'm glad you liked Trixie's part in this chapter.
4590074 oh and apologise it stays! I'm British so there might be a few spelling differences like colour for example.
"nude glory"
NEKKED PONIES
wait, aint that usual xD
Really good story so far, cant wait for more. I would volunteer for editing, sadly i have dyslexia, but for some reason instead of messing words up, it fixes them, thus making me a useless editor as i cannot see the errors. makes it easier to read though no matter the error/story.
4675550 good to see you like it! I've got my sister editing for now so at least the story won't have too many errors. She's only doing it for a little while cos her stories on ao3 have slowed down a bit but let's keep on with chapters anyway! To everyone interested in the story I'll be updating more than last month so keep subscribed or whatever.
One last thing, now that the story is established, where do you want me to go with it? Do we want the ships to go nice and romantically or maybe just some domestic dramas once the couples have hooked up? A quest or just leave it short and simple? Im open to wherever you guys want to see!
im guessing it was suppose to be
you FAIL flash is a pegasus
4829338 see how unimportant he is?
but seriously I don't know how I messed that up, I even reread it and missed that. Oh well I'll go change it now. I need to update this story but I'm laying out another story with notes about Octavia and Vinyl so that's taken over any time that I use to wright
Why is Twilight referred to as a unicorn if this is written after the events of Equestria Girls
Luna, you naughty girl. Those type of things are usually hidden under one's bed, not one's make-up box.
5030097 either I'm a lazy writer and that just slipped my mind, or I'll make something up like that flash was knocking about before the events of EQG. (Option one is most likely)
Oh hey this story,... I require more so where is it? WHERE? Meh I can wait
That... kind of sucks.
Trixie`s point is not refuted by "I never forgot you." from Celestia, and such rapid change is... unpleasant to see.
Regardless of how Celestia felt about it, the fact remains she neglected Trixie in favor of Twilight. Sure, she might have had her reasons and reservations about it, but that does not change the cold hard fact of it.
5041013 so is this story dead...or what?