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No just... no.
i don't like scat much but this was a good story.
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It's fine by me if you don't like it, it is a fetish fic after all.
PINKIE WHAT ARE YOU A DUNG BEETLE?!
I just read this for the lulz
Super awesome :D
It smells like furries in here!
Not bad at all but seems like something that should have been several chapters not just one, it feels a little rushed and some of it comes out of nowhere.
Even so I like it and would love top read more like it.
Decent a few errors here and there but it was nice. Fix it up and it willbe better.
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I knew what to expect but I was still shocked.
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I hate furries too, but do you actually know what a furry is?
It felt very rushed...
It's not the worst fic ever, but some parts of it are badly written.
Much of the story is just too matter of fact - made up of long strings of short sentences that each state one thing.
e.g.
"Twilight gave another moan as her cunt started to get wet. Pinkie used her tail to rub Twilight’s cunt, which got a louder moan out of Twilight. Pinkie continued her efforts driving Twilight closer and close to her climax. She could tell that Twilight was close and rolled Twilight onto her back. Pinkie dove in and started licking Twilight’s cunt.
This was enough to take Twilight over the edge. Twilight gripped Pinkie’s head with her hind legs as she came. Her juices spraying into Pinkie’s mouth and all over Pinkie’s face."
Pretty much the same thing has been written so many times - add a bit of variation, rather than going with overused descriptions which have effectively become cliches. Using the word "cunt" three times in a paragraph makes it even less engaging.
It's just boring when fiction is written like this.
The description of the fetish stuff is better, but still not good.
Well, this isn't my fetish at all, but... it wasn't badly written. In fact, it was pretty decent.
My own rules state that I can't thumbs-down a story based on personal preference, only the quality of the writing. So there's that. Don't get me wrong, though... I don't want to thumbs-down this story. It's rare that somebody who writes this fetish is actually any good. Most of the stories in this fetish are, well, trollfics, and it's good to see some serious writing going on here.
Let's go over a few problems. One, it was too fast. The scene's could've been longer, and a bit more descriptive. Especially leading up to Pinkie's orgasm. But that's just me. I like a sense of buildup.
Two, there were a few grammar mistakes. Nothing major, and nothing that took away from the story as a whole.
So, here's my final rating. 7.5/10 and no thumb. It's a just-below-good scat/watersports fic. Which is actually incredible, because I've seen so many scat stories which are just pure shit. Did you see what I did there? I made a funny.
Anyhoo, if you work on your pacing and your grammar, I think I wouldn't mind reading another one of your stories.
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That was nice of you to say, and thank you for pointing out what I can do better next time.
great story. also
with spike?
I made the mistake of eating during this...