Lukilla's Diary

by PressStart

Entry Twenty Five

Apple Cider, I've heard of it, but never actually had it til recently. It was delicious the most best think I've ever tasted. Sombra had to take the cider away before I drank it all. Oh, also I forgot to ask Sombra about the red faced guard, oops...

Comments

[KaBar42]

The first alicorn Lukilla was told

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Just... no

[PressStart]

4715060 Yeah, Sombra is the only one teaching and showing her thinks, well he is the only one that she is willing to listen to that is... other then Mint...

[FamousLastWords]

4715060 You're kind of a douche from what I've seen. Just saying.

I actually like the general idea you have here. Keep rockin'.

[Typewrittensoul]

I'd put the "Alternate Universe" tag just to be safe from roving bands of "reviewers" from getting super angry and feeling justified to spit raging hot fire (and swear words, can't forget the swear words!) along with insults at you and your fic.

[FamousLastWords]

4799807

any decent writer here realizes that Alicorn OCs are trash.

That's your opinion, and I don't agree with it. And seeing as how I write more often and much better received stories than you, I'm taking my opinion over yours.

Besides, saying "nope" isn't critiquing at all. It's merely demonstrating that one can't express any reason of conflict other than through one word.

[KaBar42]

4799004

Go ahead and think I'm a douche, it doesn't affect me either way.

[hailspider]

4810150 Actual diaries are often more descriptive.

[hailspider]

4810146 Not a valid excuse.

[hailspider]

4810156 The point of a diary is not to merely recollect events, but recollect and talk about them. This can only do one at a time.

[PressStart]

4810161 is there somthing wrong with the name?

[PressStart]

4810157 sorry...

[hailspider]

4810173 It sounds nothing like any known pony name.

[PressStart]

4799195 huh... didnt notice that, i'll fix it later. unable to do it now

[PressStart]

4799201 something wrong with that?

[PressStart]

4799807 sorry, its difficult to write a diary for a mare if im male

[PressStart]

4800216 im mot a fan of op characters, so i dont make op characters
Lukilla isnt op

[PressStart]

4810178 one:oc
two:i didnt make the last name
there:sorry if it isnt to your liking

[hailspider]

4810173 I could accept either name, but not the two together.

[hailspider]

4810183 Other than that it came out of nowhere and removes literally all of what makes him unique, nothing.
The chronic lack of description also doesn't help. If it wasn't for Shadow's Diary, I wouldn't even know what you meant by shadow pony.

[The Orthodox Priesthood]

4799177

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Fresh from the IZHMASH factory

[PressStart]

4810386 well, she is oblivious and can can only do healing magic. She can't do levitation even.

[PressStart]

4810408 well, that's okay

[PressStart]

4810457 sorry

[PressStart]

4814848 this makes absolutely no sense