Hi, Fluttershy

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You open your eyes and discover a world you've always wanted to see. And you're not alone. There's someone there to meet you, to say "hello."

A short and sweet one-shot.

You (the reader) are the main character.

Cover art by Scholar57

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RainbowCoolDash Pariah

RainbowCoolDash Pariah #1 · May 14th, 2014 · · ·

That was very cute.

Scribblestick

Scribblestick #2 · May 14th, 2014 · · ·

Did you consider writing it in second person?

Cyanjames2819

Cyanjames2819 #3 · May 14th, 2014 · · ·

It made me smile... Not a lot of things make me smile.

Ignis Cursor

Ignis Cursor #4 · May 14th, 2014 · · ·

That was *sniff*... BEAUTIFUL :,D

Xgex

Xgex #5 · May 14th, 2014 · · ·

Well done.. I hope to see more stories of this kind

mycarhasaMoustache

mycarhasaMoustache #6 · May 14th, 2014 · · ·

This was very cute. You managed to cram a lot of story into 1400 words. Well done. I hope to see more like this.

Scarheart

Scarheart #7 · May 14th, 2014 · · ·

I wonder how'd she'd react to a Klingon.

(Nice little story, btw. Have a like!)

Dan50

Dan50 #8 · May 14th, 2014 · · ·

I would love to see more! :D

Mr Page

Mr Page #9 · May 15th, 2014 · · 1 ·

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I thought about it after the thing was written, but I think I like the first-person POV a little more because it gives the story an "experiencing for one's self" sort of feel.

You (the reader) are the main character, after all.

Thanks for commenting!

ZekeOfTheFreaks

ZekeOfTheFreaks #10 · May 27th, 2014 · · ·

I like it. If only this one could come true for me.

Mr Stargazer

Mr Stargazer #11 · May 31st, 2014 · · ·

I can understand the sentiment. I regret that I would not like to live in that world. Visit maybe but not live. Are we not human? Is it not a denial of the idea of harmony? Heh, I have seen the evil men do so I understand but what shall happen to this world if we do not save it ourselves?

Mr Page

Mr Page #12 · Jun 1st, 2014 · · 1 ·

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I never said you would live there. You are merely brought there; for what ultimate purpose, that is up for you (the reader) to decide. A visit to Equestria would, I think, be very enlightening as well as immensely enjoyable.

I do, however, understand and appreciate your comment. You are correct; this world (our world) needs people to create Harmony. It needs people who understand the morals and lessons of MLP:FiM. Yes, our world is dark and unbalanced, but there is hope in those who understand, who can step forward and attempt to make a change.

Thank you for commenting.

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