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The Loss of Magic

Rare Find, the unfortunate stallion who ran into Lord Tirek, recounts about how he felt from the violent extraction of his magic.

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Servant Phoenix

Servant Phoenix #1 · May 11th, 2014 · · ·

Nice.

What did he mean by "episode"? Did he 4th wall break?

Europa

Europa #2 · May 11th, 2014 · · ·

4372728 Episode can also be used as a synonym for 'occurrence' or 'event'.

Servant Phoenix

Servant Phoenix #3 · May 11th, 2014 · · ·

4372743 Yeah that was my thought to, but you can never know for sure.

Breaking News

Breaking News #4 · May 11th, 2014 · 2 · ·

This was your first fic? I would say it was a very solid debut. The grammar is good, the story has a unique angle, and it's a great, timely tie in to new episode.

Its great to see Rare Find get a fic and I love that he gets a happy ending after his troubles.

scoots2

scoots2 #5 · May 11th, 2014 · · ·

This is pretty good for a first fic, and congrats to you!

Tiny thing, and it's up to you either way: I noticed that you have two sentences beginning with "but" in a row. Usually grade school teachers say not to start sentences with conjuctions, but that doesn't matter in fiction. I would think over whether I wanted to use the same word to start sentences right next to each other. I might decide that yes, that was the effect I was going for, or I might decide to change it. But that is a nitpick. Good work!

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