Maybe this isn't the path that I should have gone down.
But it was, and do I regret it? No. No I do not.
Well, now I'm the attendant of a Princess of the Night...
Oh, and I'm a werewolf now. Werewolves are kinda cool.
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Ssendam the Masked
My mask protects me from gas and Internet gnomes. What's your mask?
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..... Meh. Let's see where this goes.
I like it
Intriguing. More.
Premise: interesting.
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Protagonist: possibly hot-headed, not unusual. Female, slightly rare. Anthropomorphic werewolf, I think maybe one other time. In all, I've not seen her before and you've dropped her into a fantastic point in time that hasn't been used as far as I can tell.
Introduction to protagonist: very well done actually. Often writers will either make this period incredibly long (and consequently dull) to establish their character or incredibly short so they can hurry up and get to the fun stuff. This however has an almost-perfect balance with some minor comedy points that were actually funny. Good show.
In totality: This story is good, which is quite an assumption based on chapter one, and I can't wait for the next chapter to come out
Oh, and if you need an editor then I wouldn't mind lending a limb.
also, that 'thou' afterwards is entirely unnecessary.
Thy, and I'd say go with guts... gizzard was more colonial than Elizabethan. Also, did he just threaten her with a dissection? Because I'm pretty sure that was considered near blasphemous by non-scientists back then.
Lastly, slow down and take the time to describe more. Your pacing is pretty fast here.
~Ware out
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Woo! Another Ssendam story! Definitely going to see where this goes.
I would totally be down for lending a hand with editing this
Love it. love the idea. More please
I would refuse, nobody makes me do anything! *Is being irrationally rebellious like dumbshit teenager who doesn't know better*
Nice chapter pretty funny keep up the good work.
Oh gods, the double caps at the beginning if the word. And thy English is lacking. I prithee, find one who knoweth that which thou wouldst write. Thy writing it will better and many grimaces shall it prevent from crossing mine amazing face.
Aside from that request, I do now hold
a high opinion of this tale of yours.
I hope to see it update very soon
and cannot long for the next update wait.
Is it weird that I was expecting her to shift completely to wolf form, then go back to human form sexy as hell? That is kinda how it happens in this kind of story.
Excuse me if I'm wrong, but wouldn't that belief be called into question when you TURN INTO ONE?!
Does she have any powers beyond the standard werewolf strength, speed(possibly), healing(if you add it), and shape shifting?
I like the story so far, but I honestly think Luna could have come up with a better plan than hiding Ash in her bed. After all, doesn't she have several years of practice at keeping calm? And even if she did actually have the capacity to panic, doesn't she have a closet or something? It'd be more of an effective if cliche hiding place.
These are just my opinions, even if I'm aware of the fact that this is back from before the Nightmare Moon incident. No need to acknowledge them, or correct your story based on my nit-picks.
Quite an interesting and amusing indeed, so far I quite like this! So keep up the good effort and work, because I'd like to see where this story will be going in the future.
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...too cliché
Will this ever be gotten back to? Because this has plenty of potential, and I want to see more of it.