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Worlds on top of worlds. Realities and dimensions. Some so similar to the others, the difference is barely noticeable. Others that have gone so differently that the world is barely recognizable.

On the eve of a major celebration throughout Equestria, one pony believes that an ancient evil is about to return. Instead of seeming to be worried about the whole matter, the princess sends her student to a small town named Ponyville to supervise preparation and "make some friends." Will things go as planned? Will friends be made? Or is this a world forever doomed to sink into cold darkness and slavery?

(Some tags not in use in order to keep some portions of the story a surprise)

(The start of a new series that I call the Shard-verse. This is an idea that has been in my head since before I even read Infinite Twilights and started on the Shiny-verse. This idea was inspired by such stories as Rainbooms and Royalty and A Minor Variation)

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Was the thing about the five fragmented universes becoming one a reference to Crisis on Infinite Earths?

At least partially though not directly? I wasn't trying to reference it, but admittedly I have read it, and the DC animated movie "Crisis on Two Earths" might have influenced my thinking about it some since I remembered it while working on the first chapter.

Well then, color me interested...:raritywink:

If Princess Temporal was voiced, what would she sound like?

I'm really not sure how to answer this. I mean I do hear a certain voice when I write her, but I'm not sure how to describe it. It also varies depending on the imagination of the reader.

If you want me to try though:
It's on the deeper side, but not by much. Still very much a feminine voice coming from more in the chest. Also smooth. It almost seems to be bordering on seductive if she were to try and flirt. Very expressive, easily making it clear how she is feeling. Normally it has a hint of humor or mirth, as though she knows a secret or is in on the joke. Conversely, when she is serious or sad, there is almost a chill to it.

"So does that mean that earth foals can metal legs?" Luna asked.

I think a word may be missing from Luna's sentence.

I am loving this story, it's really interesting to see what you've done with all the characters.

Rarity was not so fortunate and begin to fall.

I think that should be "began".

Well i sure hope this is going to WOW ME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Nice, though I found some things you may want to edit.

The six mare continued to work their way deeper into The Everfree Forest.

"The one on the farm are only ripe once a year, and that's just for five days."

I found something you may want to edit.

"I suppose that I should think you," he purred as he stepped forward. "After all, you did find The Elements."

I found a very minor thing you may want to edit.

The five of them started searching through the rubble, calling out Twilight Sparkle's names.

Nice chapter, but there's a minor thing you may want to edit.

"I'm not having you stay her out of spite. I'm having you stay because Fluttershy needs you as much as you need her. Besides, it would be a good idea for you to spend some time out of the castle and to make friends with some ponies your own age."

Also, and feel free to correct me if I'm wrong, but I think a story where the heroes went out and saved the day because they were told to was the original Final Fantasy, at least at the start.

I never played it so I can't actually say. I'm sure they do exist (or have existed) though.

This was an interesting story, and I look forward to seeing what you continue to do with it.
The only real problem I saw was that there were typos and grammatical errors spread throughout it. And while it's not a problem, I was a bit disappointed that, while everypony else went through major changes, Sombra was pretty much the same. I was kind of hoping that the King of Shadows would actually turn out to be Ahuizotl or Iron Will or Pipsqueak or someone like that.

Well now, this is an interesting world. I look forward to future EoH quests.

Well, now that I've finished this, I've got to say...I absolutely love it.

4383949 probably even UNICORN filly Luna at that

you know. The thing with the elements scattering if hasbro had done a three parter for the first episodes. Episode one as it is, episode two all about the journey to the castle, episode three they actualy have to look for the elements in the booby traped castle before ending as it is.

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