Other than the spaces between the paragraphs still needing to be dealt with, it's a great restart Drak.

I like it more

I see you are going to revise the whole thing. Good luck it's a lot of work to do.

so this is a more revised version of the story I don't pay attention enough to look at the mistakes but ill keep this just because im to lazy to look for the full version

4659807 Actually it's a complete rewrite, and a vast improvement so far.

Im glad I found this story, it was really worth the read. Keep up the good work!

I read this before on fanfiction.net, I can tell its going to be good and possibly get better.

4660424 I would definitely agree with you on that. I couldn't get past chapter four on the original story, but so far this rewrite is showing some promise.

4709886 Right! I'm hoping to achieve the same result when I rewrite Adaptation, it's not so great.

Ok now how can he move when he is pretty Messed up?

4820848 Human beings can brush off serious wounds and continue to fight or move if it depends on survival. Its a survival instinct however and it cant happen if you are in no immediate danger and you injure yourself.

Feel proud about being human yet?

I know that you said that it was a lot better in your PM, but holy shit. This is incredible, compared to the first draft. Hats off to you, sir, for coming this far with your writing.

Encountering a giant snake in winter? Not exactly a likely scenario since most reptiles hibernate.

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This is a pretty good start. Points for using a basilisk instead of a manticore or timberwolf

I thought that it had some intelligence, but I didn’t expect it to be actually sentient.

Ok, I may be a nit rusty here, but I believe the correct term would be sapient, not sentient.

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Well then, after going through that and double checking, you are indeed right. Time to make an adjustment! Also, thanks for the help. I remember seeing this on another story I was reading, didn't think I would find it on mine.

Oooo. I like this beginning.

Ooohoho I am liking the start of this so far, better than the original. I hope the romantic pacing is a bit slower than before though, that was one of my biggest qualms about it.