Gabriel is torn between right and wrong as he attempts to find a way a home for three mares mysteriously casted into his life. The journey will be long and unforgiving, it will test their strengths and wits. Luna, AppleJack and Rainbow will have no choice but to trust this Brotherhood Knight. But at what cost?
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After thinking for about a month on writing this, I've decided I will, seeing as there are very few Castlevania fictions out there. (I have school, exams and all that crap, so don't expect chapters until breaks or holidays.)
There will be some grammer errors, so keep that in mind.
Leave a comment as to why you like the story, or dislike it. Getting feedback is good to have.
Chapters (5)
looks promising keep it up
Come to think of it, I might get a lot of dislikes for it being Lords of Shadow.... Oh well!
You can edit your stories using Google Docs.
I want to see the rest!
Yeah... I know how it feels to have school intrude on writing. I myself have found 8 hours of 'learning' a bit draining of my writing creativity although you can get some inspiration from your friends (which I do)
P.S.--- The story cover looks well drawn. (No sarcasm intended)
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and have it released today or during the week.
Thanks! That story cover took me a couple of hours, and I had lots of fun writing that chapter, so I might start the next one today
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Well, you're doing 10/3, so I don't think you'll be getting a whole lot.
As for me, however, I'm not a huge fan of Castlevania, so I won't be reading this. I will, however, give it an upvote since it looks promising enough. Good luck with school and such.
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Thanks man
New Chapter!
Love it! You put a lot of detail and effort into it!
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Thanks dude!
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I might even add the tragedy tag, see how it plays out, you'll know the tragedy when you read upcoming events later on
I have a crap tonne of things planned
Look out! Writer's block ahead!
*Makes swift right turn*
Phew...
very good!
I'll admit I'm interested but I'm not sold entirely. I'll need to read more chapters before I fav this one.
Hm, not bad story thus far. It certainly could be a lot worse. Pretty good amount of errors here and there, but I've certainly seen worse. Only real advice I feel I can give is to maybe try and find a proof reader.
I went ahead and compiled a list of spelling and grammatical errors for this chapter. Took me maybe 45 minute to an hour. I won't post them here since it would take up quite a lot of space, but I will send you a message listing them.
I will be watching this fic; it has a chance of ending up favorited, depending where it goes from here.
Very good fight scene. But there is one thing that needs to be changed. Gabriel hasn't gotten the Vampire Killer upgrade to his combat cross yet.
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Changed it!
i.imgur.com/lSgU6fy.gif
Nothing related, completely normal.
Poor Gabriel; Busted ribs are arguably the worst thing ever, next to child-birth and passing kidney stones. This was a fun chapter. Not quite sure what is staring back at him; I'm going to have to play the game I think.
4369349 Uhhhhmmmmm, that's because it's an official art of the game
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Oh no, I did cover art for it, it just didn't stand out enough so I changed it.
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not trying to be mean
I think the webs are a bit of give away Ariin
4500276 Well, I figured it was a spider of some sort, but I mean more specifically. I assume the spider is something directly from the game, same as the titan. As such, it's possible to find out exactly what it looks like and what they're about to face.
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The area isnt an area from the game, Luna lost concentration, they ended somewhere completely unknown or very near their objective. Its a giant spider, and im making it a helluva lot bigger than the ones from the game. Dammit, there goes the spoils for public
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Ill try and make it look different from the ones in the game. I might draw it
4500093 my bad
, it's pretty good though
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Nah its ok
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And thank you
excellent!
4500566 could you add a link to the original art?
How da hell does this Zobek guy know so much about the ponies? He's got knowledge on their species, which only exists in another dimension, their means of arrival and chances of return, as well as their abilities in general. I can grasp that he would know certain magic if he sees it, but all the other Intel on the equines? I call BS. I never played 'Lord of Shadows', but if I meet a guy like him, who certainly knows to much and is swooning about some ancient prophecy, I'd be afraid that he stabs me in the back when the time comes, claiming the 'power of shadows' for himself, so he can become the new emperor Dracula.
I really hate it when in stories a character appears, who has way to much Intel on something that is generally out of their league, domain and area of discretion.
So either this was made intentionally in your story to cut things short and make him more suspicious, or it is just bad writing.
Either way I'm not really satisfied, this chapter needs some proper revision.
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If you finished the game it would be a lot easier to understand why he knows them and why he wants them there.
4534298 yep
4535728 thanks
OMFG CASTLEVANIA!
MUST READ!!
Really liking this story so far. Hope to see updates in the future
I think being a huge Castlevania nerd also adds to me liking this story,and while I cant say I'm a huge fan of Lords of Shadow,It's still Castlevania.
Anyway,Great story,hope to see more .
Dude keep it up!
Please update new chapters.
"I am no longer Gabriel, woman. I am the Dragon, Dracul. I am the Prince of Darkness, I am, and will be, forever a thorn in His side. That is my vengeance!"1.images.gametrailers.com/image_root/vid_thumbs/2013/06_jun_2013/jun_12/gt_castlevanialordofshadow2_firsttake_ljr.jpg
This ever gonna continue?
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Ancient comment and...spoilers. but zobek is one of the lords of shadow. The Lord of the Necromancers specifically and the mastermind behind the calamity of the first game. Even tho Satan manipulated him