• Member Since 11th Jul, 2013
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ThatOneWriter


I dunno if I can be your favorite, but if you like my writing, that's pretty good in my book.

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One little slip turns a normal day into a disaster for Lyra and Bon Bon. Now it’s a race against time as Lyra tries to save her friend.


Pre-read by Don't Look At My Name Bro and Manes

Credit to PondisDant for the cover art. Link to DeviantArt gallery.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 8 )

fucking hell this was a well written piece of fuck you happiness.
very very good read.

THE FEEEEAAALLLSS:pinkiesad2::fluttercry::raritycry::raritydespair: IT'S SO SAD:raritydespair::raritydespair::fluttercry::pinkiesad2:

4328963
Thanks! And such a unique way to phrase it, too. Definitely never heard a comment worded that way on my other sad stories. :rainbowlaugh:

4329905
Aw, cheer up! Read this! Just realized I forgot to promote that at the end. Oh well. Doesn't look like it'd have gotten much traffic anyway.

4330240 hey, you give good tragedy.

> not a seapony
:ajbemused:

YB

I was about to comment on how it ends all of sudden, too fast
But I thought again
The suddenness is actually perfectly fitting...

I know I'm late to the party, but have a background music anyway

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Mentioning that the ending seems sudden is kind of a common thing on my sad stories. I guess it's a byproduct of writing the final sentence or two before anything else. Maybe I'll try to write the entire final paragraph or something next time. I do think it works here, however, and that it accomplished what I intended. It's possible that I just tried to be too clever, though. I may have overestimated the impact of the last sentence.

Thanks for the comment!

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