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I feel as though the title of this chapter was made to mock me...
I have finally finished reading this story a few days ago, and I have to say that this is a good story. This is a very complex story with rich and complex characters what are trying to find a relationship that they can put down all their guards, without fear of being unduly judged and give love as well as receive love with no expectations from one an other. What I find interesting about this story is that the romance is not just about the seduction or just about the lust, but more about the attempt of finding trying to do some sole searching and easing and supporting one an other into facing each of their personal deamons of the lives and put some closser about things about their pass and move on with their live. It is both a sweet and sower and I can't wait to see how it will all go wrong in the end.
For this chapter I think that Soran's status I think it was the best outcome that could be expected from; staying part of the Wonderbolts and a chance to prove himself to be a captain again.
For the question of loyalty between team I was wandering what would be the explanation about Sorin being felt behind by Spitfire and Fleetfoot During the Equestrian games tryout? Was it because that Clowdsdale representative and sponsors where putting them under such pressure that they had to look elsewhere for a better teammate or was it just a slip up of them for letting their individual competitiveness let them see Soran as dead weight.
This has been an awesome story so far, and I was wandering how do you go about doing your research to develop your characters and the story?
It was a joy to help with this chapter, and to read it twice. I'm pretty sure I even went through the same feelings now as I did when I helped edit. I'm curious how Braeburn knew about Bottom Line's family. I'm thinking he glimpsed a picture of his family, overheard somepony talk about his family, or, like Bottom Line's plan, got lucky. Regardless, he's sure to get lucky tonight, amiright?
The synopsis makes it sound like it needs a sad tag. Why doesn't this story have one?
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Mock? Naaaaaah.
...though I was certainly thinking of you when I picked the title.
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Hey there, Starlight! I've thought about it in the past, but overall, the story is about the complexities of adult relationships. There are highs and lows, and I didn't want to mis-characterize it by putting it in a "sad" box.
Does that help? If you've been reading it so far, I hope you've been enjoying it, and if not, you should give it a try! I'd love to hear your opinion about the story tags and the themes.
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Thanks again for your help, friend.
Braeburn's a crafty one. What do you think is most likely? Also...
Mmmmmmmyes. :3c
Hi there, Mix-Up! Thanks for the thorough review! Thanks for letting me know you're thoughts. I'm always trying to improve, and it really helps to know what the readers are finding compelling.
I could go on for a LONG time about research with the characters. I gave a panel on "Writing Consistent Characters" if you'd like to watch it sometime (click here!). What would you like to know? I could also do a blog about it if that would be easier.
As for Spitfire and Fleetfoot in the "Rainbow Falls" episode, well… you've discovered something very important! One of the things that struck me about Soarin' was how, in that episode, he just kind of gives up when he finds out his team has abandoned him and replaced him. That reaction was the basis for some of the issues he's facing in this story. I think Spitfire and Fleetfoot were under a LOT of pressure during the tryouts, like you said, but we've seen Spitfire be more honorable than that, so I think it was a bad day for her. Then again, she's also very strict and cares a lot about her team being the best it could possibly be. What do you think?
I finally had the time to read it and as always I love it. Keep up the great work.
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Thanks, BL! Glad you like it!
OML breaburn! He was amazing in this chapter.
Woah! This was some intense stuff! And swear words! A lot... But this was certainly an interesting chapter, and I'm still wondering what happened to Soarin's legs, but I bet it's going to be a loooong time before it gets to that point...
And I'm still wondering what happened to that black scarf
Also, I forgot to mention sooner, but congratulations on hitting 200,000 words, my friend! That's a pretty big achievement!
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Hey there, Drakath! Sorry I didn't see this comment earlier. Must have mis-clicked at some point!
Glad you're liking the story so far, and I hope you continue to enjoy it!
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Huh, for some reason this didn't show up in my notifications. I found the second story and added it to my read later list too.
This chapter though. Wow. Braeburn has to be one of the best BS'ers around. I guess running a small, growing town like Appleloosa requires someone who's good at that. It'll be interesting to see what's been going on at the 'Bolts while Soarin's been away.
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I chalk it up to server-side sorcery. Thanks for adding it.
Nothin' like a little southern charm.
Braeburn was a bucking God of persuasion in this chapter, speech level 100. I’m super hyped now, holy shit.
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That scene was tons of fun to write.