YAY!!!! First comment.

Absolutely brilliant as always Vivid. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Like what you did with the Neighful Tower.

Keep up the amazing work handsome.

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Hmmm... that makes me think is it NAY-ful tower or N-eye-ful tower?

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It would be NAY-ful tower in my opinion. You are probably thinking of the word 'Nigh'

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Well i was just curious because the real Eiffel tower is pronounced EYE-FUL tower lol

Well then! There is Sexiness, there is happiness and in general things are going awesomely!

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I dont want to jinx it, but usually when go nice, its right before the cliff...

Damnit Scotty, Put this in reverse before we hit the singularity!

Yayayayayayayayay! Coltfriends!!!!!!!

Though I can't help but feel like things May be about to go downhill now... Until next chapter!

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Everyone is just so pessimistic. I can't imagine why.

(but seriously I'm glad y'all are paying attention )

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You guys can pronounce it however you'd like. Personally, I tend to go back and forth each time I edit it.

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Well Ya can't blame us considering something happened to soarin's. I just hope they're still together at the time of the interview...

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Not blaming at all. I'm just happy you're thinking about what you're reading. My high school English teacher would be proud. As for the ending, I hope you find it satisfying no matter which way it breaks.

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All teachers should be happy with people thinking about what they're doing no matter what the subject is. Critical thinking isn't my strong point, at least not into deep thoughts and questions regarding what I'm reading, but I try to at least think about the possibilities of a story.

I often read stories that start out very well, but fail to give a good ending, even if the idea is good, which completely kills the story for me. It's the reason I don't put things on my favorites list easily. Keep up the quality and I'll be happy.

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It's the reason I don't put things on my favorites list easily. Keep up the quality and I'll be happy.

I'll certainly do my best, and I hope Sensation makes your list one day.

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At this rate, it's guaranteed...

I saw a comedy once about a private eye telling other about bein unconspicuous while wearing a raincoat and a fedora... at a beach. Alas, Las Pegasus allows it.

The tale is going nicely - but it's a bit of cruelty to show the heroes so happy, when we know it will not end well. Youére pulling a Roadrunner and Coyote at us (i.e., the audience knows the Coyote will fall: the trick is surprise then on HOW he will fall)

Keep up the great work!

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Like Soarin' said, there's always somepony that looks crazier than you.

I like the roadrunner analogy, and yes, I can be a bit cruel at times. I promise, though, that I'm doing this for Soarin's own good. Thanks for the comment!

Soooo.... May or may not be time for me to head to Vegas for a strip joint...

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I've actually never been to Vegas, buuuuuuut...

If you're ever in San Francisco, I might know a place you could look up.

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I've been to Vegas, didn't gamble or anything and the most I did was play pool and drink a little.

Never been to a strip joint of any kind.

Maybe.

I've tried to pay attention to what Soarin's decision might have been that you hadn't planned for, but ended up just getting caught in the flow of the story again. After contemplating it for some time the most logical one would be the drinking early on in the story, but I also somehow think that's likely not it.

Regardless the chapter itself followed a nice pacing and reflected the implied setting rather well, with diverse little activities as fun distractions lasting through the night. I could appreciate how these funny and at times unexpected situations were interspersed with doubts about their relationship, about Appleoosa and about the choices of the night itself.

I'm afraid I have to agree with Flaxseed however, throughout Soarin's story to Vivid, in his behavior whilst retelling, remarks about his own behavior and thoughts back then and the general setting, I fear that the end result of his adventure isn't necessarily a happy one, regardless of what this chapter might show. That does however not stop me from having fallen in love with the story and events however, and enjoying these little fun filled moments leading up to the two of them growing closer and closer together, despite of, or perhaps because of, what struggles they face.

Yay coltfriends! The club scene was awesome too!

Ah, this is a good chapter to stop for the night and get some sleep. No cliffhangers or suspense lol

Although I have to wonder, are some details in the story so far inspired by real life events?

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You're making great progress, that's for sure!

And yes, many different aspects of the story are based on my own real-world experiences. San Francisco is a hell of a town.

Man i wish there was a strip club like thay where i live.

We got to the hotel, the Palomino, and I managed to get us through the giant glass doors and into the massive lobby. There were chandeliers everywhere but not many ponies around. The receptionist was a saint: all I had to do was show her my Wonderbolts ID (no small feat digging it out of my bag), and she called a bellhop to show us up to a celebrity suite. You know those luggage cart things? I might have ridden one to our room.

all I had to do was show her my Wonderbolts ID

my Wonderbolts ID

Wonderbolts ID

Soarin, you drunk, daft taffer. You think noone's gonna notice?

We did some shots at another club. There were even more colorful lights, and the music was loud enough that it felt like it was punching you in the chest. We didn't talk much, but we didn't hold back on having fun, either. I think I tried to teach Braeburn how to dance to more pop-style music. He might have been pretty good at it, but I don't really remember. There was a lot of grinding, though. A lot of grinding.

lol, how the heck would grinding up against each other work for horses

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I leave it to the reader to decide.