If I was a better pony, I would have... I don't know. I would have done something. I should have jumped up on the table and gone off on some big, showy, motivating speech about pulling together. Instead, I just... abandoned them. I should have done better that day. Add that to the long list of regrets, I guess.

Eh, not really. I doubt he would have been in any state of mind to face off the entire room of Wonderbolts. After his breakdown, I count all this as baby steps for Soarin. Good chapter as always.

4961997 good chapter indeed, calls for a cookie when luna is done stealing them from the cookie jar xD

To be honest with you this chapter was a little boring I understand you wanna build up tension when Soarin finally talks to Braeburn but well that be the next chapter or two more chapter. Then again building up tension so readers can read more of your story

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In some ways, I agree with you. This is more of a housekeeping chapter, one that takes care of few loose details and seeds some things for later on. Plus, I think it's better for the chapters to vary in emotional intensity, but I could be wrong. Great feedback.

The next few chapters should be more to your liking (and mine, too). I've been wanting to write them for months.

He rears up on the couch, throws his head back, and flails his forelegs in the air, a huge smile on his face. "SOARIN' BUCKIIIIIIING WINDSONG!!!"

Beautiful.

Fire Streak still looked like someone had stomped on his birthday cake.

I might have to steal this simile sometime, lol.

Nice chapter. It's good to see Soarin has grown somewhat already!