A long dormant construct, buried over a thousand years ago in a secret lab beneath the catacombs under the Palace of the Royal Pony Sisters, awakens and begins to fulfill its long dormant directives, the first being to stave off the darkness, the second to find water to power its steam motivators.
It sets off to find equine based lifeforms, and discovers Zecora, who it identifies as the Sun Goddess.
Now, it demands that Zecora names it and gives it purpose.
Zecora does what any benevolent Goddess would do. She responds with good intentions...
Chapters (2)
uh....WTH is this gonna end up as?
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What do you mean?
Your question is too open ended to answer.
4313435 I cant be more specific until the story has more progress.thats as good as my question will be, for now.
I like what I see so far, though you use commas rather awkwardly.
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They say the road to hell is paved with good intentions.
And Zecora has the best of intentions...
4313477 ive never heard that before.might be cuz im aetheist.
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Try reading the Communist Manifesto, any of the first editions. I am corrupted by moldering ancient coma usage.
You have my attention.
Hmm. Now I find myself wondering what I would say in that situation. Probably something along the lines of "Your purpose is to explore, to learn, and to discover a higher purpose than this one." That seems like it has fairly low odds of a robot apocalypse.
In any case, I look forward to seeing where you go with this. Also, the steam toots are funnier than they have any right to be.
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Practical exhaust port location.
Far as I'm concerned it sticks.
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I confess myself... intrigued. Pray, rise and continue?
Why don't you just post a chapter!
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I am actually having a bit of trouble writing in the first person perspective for Zecora. It is much harder than I thought it would be.
4444716 Ok. True but, make haikus and other forms of poems. Just saying
This is interesting, please, go on!
Here's to hoping the story isn't abandoned.
Your purpose is to learn and explore, until you find a purpose with more.
Oh look, the first downvote, seconds after the update was posted.
Somebody didn't even bother to read it. How unfortunate that some inconsiderate dickless wonder had to be an asshole.
No kidding. At least it's the only one so far, heh.
You seem to be doing alright with the first-person POV to me. I can hardly imagine rewriting something that many times, but what you have here works pretty well (at least in my opinion). I think Zecora's a hard one to write for, even more so as the narrator, and you've done a better job of it than a lot of third-person writing I've seen.
Only one thing tripped me up and that was "automatonous" instead of "autonomous companion" or "automaton companion". Not sure if you were trying to mash those together on purpose, or what.
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Not a common US word, more common in Europe and the U.K.
Sorry about that, I really liked the word and just had to include it because of, well, its wordiness.
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I see. I tried looking it up with google and just got a "Did you mean...?" so I figured it was either a mistake or deliberately incorrect. It wasn't really a problem, it was still obvious what you meant - I just tend to stumble on things that don't "seem right".
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Wow, you are right.
I think I pulled it out of a words you are sure to win with while playing Scrabble type book.
4533734 wait seconds? literally seconds?
Geebus whats wrong with people these days? at least READ it and leave constructive criticism
I wonder what must have happened to the flower trio for them to be so... startle able.
4533734 Don't sweat it, there are always assholes everywhere. I can't figure out what they hate about this fic, I'm finding it an interesting read.
I really loved this take on Zecora. Most of the time, she's just pony-Yoda, the mysterious mentor in the wild who dispenses wise couplets like a poetic fortune cookie factory. Here you've peeled back that facade and revealed the insecure, avoidant mare who logically lies beneath it. It makes sense, and that's what I love to see in headcanon.
Also, given some interpretations of Apple Bloom's talent, I'd love to see Applejack's face should her little sister start building robots.
In any case, looking forward to more. I just hope Zecora doesn't end up applying all of Asimov's laws. Those things never lead anywhere good.
hmm this is different but i think i like it.
people are arses sometimes cant let that bug ya kudz hope you continue this.
... what is that word? Reminds me of Mechanicus.