I think that this guy is coming off as alittle too accepting, and not being rightfully angry with these ponies. Ever since he's gotten to Equestria, the ponies treated him like a monster, with nothing but scorn and hate. He was pushed to the brink because no one would care, nor help. Now because he tried to off himself, now one of them is actually giving a shit?? He honestly should get angry back at AJ's anger, and demand "What the hell do you care what I do with myself? You ponie's have made it perfectly clear that you don't give two shits about me? If anything, I'm doing all of you a favor since in your eyes, I'll never be anything else but a freak. Back home, I had a loving family, friends that I'll never see again. Here, I thought I'd be able to make some friends, but you ponies are far too xenophobic to look pass what I am. So I ask you again: What the hell do you care?!

Something like that would really add to the angst :D

4299549 nah, it's cool because of the desperation. he's too down in the dumps to refuse a meal out of spite.

Anyway, loving this story, and I can't wait for the next chapter!

Can't.Fucking.Wait.

4299549 If you had been completely alone for years, starved, denied shelter and companionship, wouldn't you be eager to do anything to get it back?

And angst isn't the first thing on his mind. He's in his thirties (as of MisterBlonde's oneshot) so he's outgrown that. Applejack has what he needs, so he's putting his anger on the backburner for now.

But just wait for their heart-to-heart. It's gonna get ugly.

4299628 I'm. Writing. Now.

Just a matter of whether I'm gonna make you wait or not.

4299637 I suppose yeah, I'd be eager for food. Still though, I wouldnt just go "Oh, and I know how you guys ignored me for years, denied me food, shelter and everything; but now that your helping; we're good." I'd be mighty pissed.

Really looking forward to the heart to heart chat :D. I enjoy reading drama!

4299637 You would think that, but paradoxically, there are several cases of things like that happening, and believe it or not, after a while, people start being AFRAID of other people, because they can't predict what they're going to do. The mind does funny things to cope, and too much interaction after no interaction becomes a kind of... overstimulation. Of course, nobody is exactly the same, different people react differently, and we might just being seeing something akin to a delayed response here. This is particularly true when you add systematic abuse to the equation, and if he's conditioned enough to cringe whenever a pony lifts a hoof to him, then he was clearly abused.

I haven't actually read the first story this is based off of, probably because it isn't my thing, it sounds depressing as hell, not just because the main character felt suicide was the only way out, but because ponies drove an innocent man to suicide through scorn and neglect. I'm basically reading this to see if they had a damn good REASON for being assholes. Protip: probably not.

4299710 Well, considering the herd-mentality most bronies give the ponies, there is an explanation.

SPOILERS: If you want to keep it a surprise, stop reading here.

Jason went to the mane six first, more importantly, Twilight. Twilight is clearly a well-known and influential member of Ponyville, and when she rejected Jason, the other ponies took that as a sign that they should shun him as well. In the previous story, it was said that Jason had managed to get a hotel room before he'd met the mane six. I took that to mean that the ponies would accept him if they had no previous biases, but a bad encounter with Twilight had cast him in a bad light for the entire town.

4299710 I'll take that into account, thanks for the info.

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But he doesn't go to Twilight first in the original story. The first thing he tries to do is get a job, and he then goes to the mane six for help when no one will hire him.

4299781 Hmm...Looking back, you're right.

Well, I will do what all great writers do when they encounter a problem like this.

I will make something up.

4299781
You should word that differently, mate.

when i saw this fic i went and read ending and i think it has more of an impact if he had actually died then write the reaction of all the ponies who realize that they drove someone to kill them self through their actions but this isnt bad

4299803
eh?

4299818
"But he doesn't go to Twilight in the original story." That shouldn't be there, I think.

4300061
It says "but he doesn't go to twilight first in the original story."

4300061 I think you need to read that again...It says "But he doesn't go to Twilight first in the original story."

Why did he give up on killing himself? He could have easily killed himself in the bathrom.

4305810
Because he really wanted a bath.

"Jes' WHAT in Tararus were ya thinkin'?!"

Tararus?

4299549 sorry but what did you expect? lol

thats how most brony in equestria stories go. was expecting him to off himself still, but i doubt that will happen any time soon if at all. doesnt feel dark enough imo, but then again i read pretty dark stuff...

4327737
Pretty much their version of hell. It has to be child friendly, after all.

So far, the only bad thing about this story, is the fuckin' comments, constantly god damn complaining about how Jason isn't reacting well enough to what he's gone through for the past three years.
Shit son, this story is bloody exciting, and I enjoy it quite well just the way it is. It also keeps me on edge, seeing as none of the Ponies except Applejack accept him in the least. Racist as fuq and about to bite his head off at any second.

4341924 He means it's misspelled.

this is fucking killing me, why the fuck do you fucking care applejack?!

4723704 I'm ready. This is the calm before the Darude- Shitstorm.
Okay.
Okay.

I agree with you, and I would even go so far as to say that Jason should have died and I consider it the actual canon ending.

4723704
She doesn't care you nimrod() she feels guilty and she's trying to make herself feel better by helping Jason when she (and everypony else) has been mistreating and abusing him for the last 3 years.

Evidently? It isn't working , I mean

4855816
That's a form of care.
She is emotionally affected by his state of well being. She has an opinion about what should or shouldn't happen to him. She is not apathetic to his existence.

Also, calling people nimrod is quite uncouth, ruffian.

Kitchen.

Applebloom.

Coat-closet.

Like Applebloom herself, or her bedroom door? If it was Apple Bloom herself, it would have been hilarious, even though it would be strange, because she didn't scream immediately. I laughed regardless at the mental image this line gave me.

6036773 Maybe she was in the closet, I don't know, Applebloom sure is a weird addition to the show. Well, so are the entire CMC.

4941493 this is all one big case of Munchausin by Proxy

4349547 You seem to be suffering from what we call, Australian Syndrome.

You talk like an Australian and then you move to Australia despite our reedy cries of "Don't go you retard! Death resides there!"

Then you say something like this. EXACTLY LIKE THIS

Oi cunt if we're goin on a maccas run, d'ya think we can stop to pick up some durries from the servo and then some grog from the bottle-o so we can get fucken maggot or nuh?

6686151 I am Australian and can only say

Get over here ya bloody cunt we need more bastards that say fuck you to the damn PC madcunts.

6686151
7726124

Yeah the boys! Straya!

This guy's pathetic man. I was expecting lashing and all that but seriously. After all the abuse he went through. I'm gonna keep on reading but if this continues I think I'll quit...

Coat-closet.

Waiiit....coats?

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so you would take starving to death and alienating yourself from the one person who has started to care about you and is literally caring for you just to spite them when you are a broken and depressed person, admittedly I feel like I would be upset and yell if multicoloured cartoon ponies made me feel this way but when it comes down to the event actually happening to you and you are in that desperate situation you may be more operating on the parts of your brain that is focused on survival rather than the parts concerned with emotion and that instinctive part of you will probably want to stay on the good side of the one person caring for you

Breaking and entering. Into the home of a mare strong enough to kick the apples off trees in one go, a huge stallion, freakishly strong even by earth-pony standards, and an old mare with a shotgun. I gulped, silently closing the door behind me.

She has a shotgun?

I used a trick I had learned from gathering...supplies in the last few years, keeping close to the walls to minimize the noise made by creaky floors.

What was with the hesitation?

Looking back in the mirror, however, I once again winced at my appearance. An angry red line crossed my throat, forming a perfect ring right where the noose had bitten into my skin. I knew something like that doesn't just go away—It may fade, but I'd have the scar for the rest of my life.

It won’t go away?

The mare raised a forehoof, to which I immediately recoiled. It wasn't intentional, but being the youngest brother back home, I'd grown up to be very jumpy. And in the last couple years, a pony raising a hoof to me had hardly turned out to be a good thing.

Sometimes those reflexes kick in.

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The fact is a broken person is not easily going to trust that which broke him in the first place. And healing enough to be put back together well that takes time. Applejack is acting like this is a simple thing to fix but emotions are very hard to fix when broken.

Breaking and entering. Into the home of a mare strong enough to kick the apples off trees in one go, a huge stallion, freakishly strong even by earth-pony standards, and an old mare with a shotgun. I gulped, silently closing the door behind me.

Is this MC’s imagination or does Granny really have a shotgun here?

Make them regret
Make them call You a monster
That would be useful as a reminder
A reminder of what they've done to you