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CharmingScar sits down in his chair, just another school day, just like any other, a new pony in class was pretty much everything that stood out, first. Instead of joining one of the `groups´ she starts talking to him, and becomes his friend.
This is my second story so far, if there is any HUGE mistakes please point them out, have a good day!
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While it does seem to be a bit awkward at times as well as fast paced its actually quite good for someone whose main language isn't English and so I would give it about a 7 out of 10
4288431 Thanks, means a lot
4288676 no problem man and don't worry about English not being your first language cause there are people who speak English and suck plenty when it comes to writing
I LOVE IT
ITS SO SO SO ROMANTIC
4295002 I'm glad you liked it
Have a nice day!
4295097 to you as well!
doesn't lasagna have meat in it?
4295540 Since I'm a vegetarian irl and eat lasagna, I think it can be meat free. (There is replacement for meat, like beans and mushrooms, most of those stuff taste great to me :twilight smile: )
Good story. 8.5/10.
Could use better grammar, although despite English not being your main language, it's good. It's also hard to tell at all Charming Scar liked Fire Charmer aside from now.
Btw, I never kissed a girl through-out my whole life, so it's not depressing.
4295618 I didn't want it to be to obvious, idk why that is just how I am. But I'll try to work on my grammar
Have a good say! (and the depressing part of me kissing a girl at that age is the fact that I was better with girls when I was so small, and class picking on me for it until 6th grade ._.)
They don't have Christmas.... but they do have Hearth's warming eve
5397068 I know that now... but this was written when I was new to this site...
Chapters for Another story I am working on are over 7K Words long... these are like... 1.3K xD
Ohhhh well its still a good story.... anyway why not just edit this chapter to change christmas into harth's warming eve
5397105 I'd rather have it as it is, and later on see how much my writing has improved since I started... if I would correct that, I would probably see a bunch of other things I would've done different now.
Might do a rewrite and fix it then, and give the story more color... (And end up with a 25K Word story xD)
5654940 glad you liked it