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4287246 thanks bud
I like this
Not bad, think about an edit, the protagonist seems like a child, calling Breasts "boobies" and calling his mom "mommy", make his seem more grown up.
Could be better. But I'll fav to see if it gets better. If not within a few chapters then I unfav
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4287567 thanks for the constructive criticism sorry about wording and stuff. I was about to head to sleep from a long workday. Hopefully I'll be more awake for the next chapter
4287567 also I'm 22 and still say boobies. It's a fun word
I wanna see where this goes
> Exit train in new town
> Look around me
> Boobies everywhere
> Suddenly get rock hard
> Motor boat the closest pair of boobies I can find
> They're old and saggy
> Don't care, MUST HAVE BOOBIES
> Women slaps me in face
> Look up
> It's my grandmother
> Strangely, I still feel rock hard....
Ha. She gave him the bird.
Best. Title. Ever.
4292215 i thought so too
4292231 The only better one would have been "There will be Tits".
4292260 i figured tits would be censored by the no swearing in the title rule though this is mature.
Well, this certainly seems like it could be enjoyable.
Given the Mature tag, dare I hope our nameless protagonist might be getting some at some point? Given his obsession with boobies, some friendly groping/heavy petting would be a great way to start at some point.
4292273 Perhaps.....
You might be able to get away with it being a chapter title.
Stay out of the long grass! Wild pokemon live there!
Sorry, it seemed funny at the time.
I suppose it is comforting to know the greatest alternative word for breasts has already been invented.
4292298 thats always been the plan
4292344 MY WORD. I invented it. sorry im drunk
4292392 Best. Word. Ever.
Also, now I need an update.
I have $11,000 in
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4292467 I will gladly take tacos. update hopefully tomorrow. i dont feel comfortable writing this while drunk
I like breasts. I like Vinyl as well.
I will be keeping an eye on this.
Need to make the T lower case.
CONTINUE THIS!!!
..........please 
this was interesting.
Hmmm, boobies...
Uh I mean great beginning, though it could use some editing, I have seen past and present tense switching in it.
About the story: it is quite interesting and has the potential, so, let's see more!
-Zeph
I faved this after reading the first four sentences.
You got promise kid! You just need to tone down the boobs out of the equation and put some more real relationship building in there. Also doesn't Garble look at other parts of an anthro mare's body: Ass, thighs, waist, abs?
PS: Would be great if you added some other mares as the main characters of your story. Such as Pinkie and Applejack!
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Huh. Well then. *moves mouse to fave and like buttons* I guess I better follow those boobies. I hope I'll find some booty too.
4298367 this story will have much relationship building. Also the main character is not garble. He was just transfixed and couldn't coherently say anything
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Jesus Christ, what's with you and anthro? This isn't a snarky comment, I legitimately want to know why you like anthro so much.
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Huh. Brought here by the title, decided to stay because of that ending. Something about eyes is so mystical. And it's Vinyl, so of course I love it.
4299026 Oh hey dude!
You must really like me! I mean to think you're scanning anthro stories, searching for my comments just so you can get to know me... Oh gosh! I'm flattered.
Actually I kinda have to take my comment back on this story... it ain't so good so far. Too much boobies, not enough artistic substance.
But hey about anthro well, the thing is ever since I discovered those anthro sites when I was sixteen, I've been fascinated. These animalistic beings look so human: they think human, they act human, and... they look human. They're just like an exotic breed of people they are. And when I see and anthro woman with a well drawn body... well she seems just like an exotic beauty to me.
4292513 So what? A pelican had sex with a penguin or something?
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Alright, fair enough.
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Not sure if sarcasm, or some who has never heard of the Blue-Footed Booby.
imma,....imma need a minute
okay, cool fic bro.
Just read it. Already I can tell this is gonna be a reallly great fanfic. Protagonist reminds me of a 14-15 yr old hormone driven kid who's completely obsessed with breasts lol. greatly looking forward to the next updates
You kinda need an editor/pre-reader tho OP
4300296 imma see how I do on the next chapter and I'm still getting editing advice then I'll go with one. I'm still trying to get used to the writing style. I've never needed an editor before but I might this time
The best kind of bees: Boo bees!
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It' s interesting...I mean personally I like other words for breasts than boobies (you know: tats, titties, mounds of flesh, the velvet mounds, meat mountains, breasts) but over all I found it funny and especially love the character having heterochromia iridium, nice touch. The idea of the main character having that much of a fear of the opposite sex presents the opportunity of having a rich and complex story without just clop and I am excited to see where you go with it. Now, if you'll excuse me, your story made me want to listen to some songs from the Bloodhoud Gang's Hooray for Boobies soundtrack, farewell.
4303277 thanks bud. im trying to use as many synonyms for breasts as possible
4303477 Great! 'Cause there are MANY of them.
4303552 oh trust me I know
4287567 4287927 Actually, seeing as this level of obsession with boobs is already quite unnerving (and don't get me wrong, I do love them myself) and possibly unhealthy, I think using the words "boobies" and "mommy" works well here, as the protagonist is clearly mentally disturbed.
I shall be favoriting this, to see where this goes. It's difficult to find a good anthro clopfic that doesn't automatically default to futa. That's great and all, but it's saturating the site, know what I mean?
4303876 not a bug fan of futa. I like my chicks sans dicks
4303905 I do too. I only indulge in them on occasion (being a furry, it comes with the real estate). It wouldn't bug me so much if it wasn't the kink of every single anthro clopfic. Stuff that saturates the site in general bugs me. First it was second person human on pony sex (still is), then it was that "cosplayer in Equestria" genre.
This didn't really work for me. If not for the protagonist's bizarre social handicaps and inability to think of women as anything more than walking pairs of breasts, I could dig this. As it stands, though, the protagonist is just an awkward, unlikeable creep, and no sane girl would give him the time of day. So...yeah. Passing on this.
4304466 it cool man. I know it's not for everyone. It's just supposed to be goofy anyway