Rainbow takes fluttershy on a special trip to canterlot, and during the trip, fluttershy confesses her feelings to rainbow. She gets...Unpleasant results.
I am A LOT happier with this one, as i was able to actually get a nice long story! I hope you all enjoy it, and i know this probably isn't the place, but alot of people have been following the story i wrote "Rainbows and butterflys" instead of watching me.
Because i don't have any more to write on that particular story, there will be no updates, aside from spelling errors. So people that want to see my other stories need to go to my profile and watch ME, not my stories. otherwise you wont see when i post a blog or a new story! Again, rated everyone cause there isn't anything really graphic or descriptive.
-Alex
Really good story, just remember that names always start with a Big leter.
^ yeah the April fools joke really messed some of this fic up.
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Well. . . That had absolutely no build up. I like the rest of the story, but flutter shy just said I love you. No thoughts, she wasn't scared or afraid. She didn't whisper it a few times so rainbow couldn't hear. It was just, meh.
I say this a very good start. I would have liked to see more with the theme of loss. Losing a pet would really hurt anybody and Fluttershy even though she has many animal friends probably would be heartbroken if one of them died. I liked the scene with all the birdcages and stuff because it felt genuine in emotion. I like how Rainbow is doing everything she can to help her friend. I liked this begining even though there are some minor grammar and spelling issues. But I'll forgive because I like the direction its going in.
yeah i miss the bulid up, the tension thet the character feel ... but i like the story:D:D
I liked everything. But I felt that her confession was less than impressive considering the lengths she went through to make the day special for Dash and Rainbow's reaction was rather subdued considering how excited she was to meet the wonderbolts and find out her best friend loves her. I like it but I felt for the build up the confession was rather mute.
That makes me so sad.
This was AWESOME!
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Dont worry, i will be doing alot more with that loss in the future.
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Thanks, Glad you liked it! :D
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The reason fluttershy didn't have a buildup is because she has loved rainbow since the beginning of the story, so she didn't really need the buildup. The point was that rainbow was caught off guard, and that she had to find her feelings. I understand why the buildup is important, but in terms of the story, i didn't really feel it was necessary. Thanks for the constructive criticism though!
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I'll go back and fix it when i get the chance!
Oops
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She may have loved her for a while, but she didn't know rainbow loved her. That's enough reason for her to be nervous to confess. Are you saying fluttershy never expected rainbow dash to reject her? Ever?
I REALLY LIKE! I think this is a great ending. I love that Pinkie called them FlutterDash, just makes sense. I heard you reply to my comment and upon re-reading I understand it better. I felt that this was a great ending and really nice to see them happily together. Great job and hope to read some more from you in future.
5 smiling Pinkies our of 5
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Why thank you my good sir! Im glad you enjoyed it!
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Do you think fluttershy,no matter how she felt, would do anything other than accept the other pony's feelings?
Besides the many, many, many grammatical errors, (
) I loved this story. Though I agree with Skull025 in that buildup was actually necessary. 
Do you have a proofreader? I'd be happy to lend my services.
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No, i don't have a proofreader at the moment.
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Like I said, do you want one, and if so, can I do it?
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Sure! It would be nice to get an outside opinion and also be nice to have someone look over the stories!
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Excellent. Well then it's settled.
So, whenever you wish to write a new story, or update an old one, or add a new chapter to a new one, or whatever, just give me a little preview first. Maybe through the PM system, or email.
Alright then. I feel good about this!
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:D Awesome! Thanks for being my proofreader!
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No problem!
Plot and story seem great so far
However there are alot of capitaliztion errors. Names should be capitalized such as Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy. Also places should be capitalized such as Canterlot. Other than a few other gramtical and spelling errors, the story has a lot of potential.
Yes, this is awesome.
This was the best thing I have ever read! It painted a vivid image of exactly what was happening, timescale was not boring nor rushed, good length . It made me feel all kinds of emotions while reading, it had the best place to end it, I felt very satisfied with how it ended. The only problem was the grammar was quite iffy, but it was still very easy to understand. 99 / 100!