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alexmagnet


There are only three real monsters: Dracula, Blackula, and Son of Kong.

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A dinner party at Fancy Pants’s manor turns into an international incident as Rarity is accused of grand larceny. With a foreign delegation demanding justice, it falls to Fluttershy and an ace Canterlot attorney to clear her of the charges. But against the dark plot beneath these events, will their wits, skill, and a loud “Objection!” or two be enough to set her free?


A “spiritual crossover” with the Ace Attorney series, by alexmagnet and Belligerent Sock.
Cover art by Belligerent Sock.

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 70 )

Allow me to be one of the first to voice one's admiration for this work! :) I shall await the next chapter eagerly.

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Goddamnit, now all I get to be is second voice of admiration! :raritydespair:

Allow me to be the fourth voice of admiration! I await more of this wonderfully written story!:raritystarry:

Wow, zebraskin. She must be a wanted serial killer in not-Africa.

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It's actually white tiger, and there's a story behind it.

Nice start to the story so far I can't wait to see where you go with this. :pinkiesmile:

Comment posted by Garnot deleted Apr 25th, 2014

So much win in this one (Repost) :rainbowlaugh:

Oh hey, it's out! And with a great start, too! Keep it up, you two.

Slight typo here:

All I know is that they it’s a mutual feeling.

>red puff tie

It's a triple cravat, or so I'm told.

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Fuck... Sock and I have failed you. We must now commit sudoku.

I'm liking the story so far, though there's something about Fancy Pants always calling Rarity 'Miss Rarity'. I can understand it with Fluttershy, but I thought he and Rarity would be past titles.
Regardless, this is setting up nicely. :twilightsmile:

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A-ha-ha! You are as PRESUMPTUOUS as you are POOR and IRISH!

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A true Gentle Manne of Leisure would know the difference between a cravat and puff tie!

Seriously, though, I thought about giving him a cravat, but I figured that'd be too Edgy. And while that terrible pun sinks in, I suppose that answers the question posed by 4288305. I made the cover art from scratch.

YES! YESSS!

YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEES!

Yes.

You've caught me right after I beat Dual Destinies, so I'm still craving the Phoenix Wright goodness. Do not fail me, alexmagnet.

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If I do fail you, I'll just blame Sock. That's the beauty of having a co-author. Since he's writing at the very least 50% of the fic (really it's probably more like 75%), then he also gets to share 50% of the blame for it failing. But hey, I'm a nice guy, he can have all the blame if we fail.

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OBJECTION!

That's a contract of adhesion and you know it! Your Honor, I move to void this resolution immediately!

...I'll take 25% of the blame and no more. The rest can go to Pav.

Your last few paragraphs seem a bit hectic. However, I think you could have an interesting story to tell.

I do enjoy Ace Attorney stories, I wonder how this will play out.

4289232 Ay! And what's wrong with bein' Irish, lass?!

4289232 Ay! And what's wrong with bein' Irish, lass?!

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Objection overruled. I'll have both your heads if this disappoints.

I really like your portrayal of Fluttershy. You have her voice down pat, and you show us that she's not weak willed-- she just decides to leave some things unsaid.

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All credit for Fluttershy's internal dialogue goes to Belligerent Sock. It was his idea in the first place.

Fluttersnark is great. Loving the setup here.

Hope this cover art is posted on the dA, wanna favorite this quality piece of work~ :coolphoto:

4289232 ...Huh. Not only was that pun terrible, but I'd actually never heard of a puff tie before.

THE MORE YOU KNOW (tm)

A stylish and elegant mystery? I'm in. there aren't enough straight-up genre mystery stories around here. All that comes to mind is A Tip of the Hat and The Unicorn Caper.

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Well...that wasn't very nice. ..

Interesting how you're not using the typical Ace Attorney storytelling model... show a glimpse at the crime, then cut straight to after the murder, let the rest of the story before then be told through the trial and investigation.

Then again, we usually see from Phoenix's point of view, which isn't true here, so I guess it makes sense... I'll be interested to see how you handle the narrative when the actual crime happens.

Lots of good suspects arriving too, good. Plenty of ponies we don't know to cast suspicion on, and one we automatically hate who will probably not be the murderer but I predict will be the prosecutor.

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Tell me, what noble (other than fancy pants) is nice? Not including the O.C's.

None.:applejackunsure:

4360639 I think he left his manners at home. They're probably on the coffee table by the front door.

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I find the better question to be, "How much of the upper crust have we met?" All I can remember are a few nameless characters set in place to show a general attitude, Fancy Pants, Fluer (who uttered hardly a word), and Blueblood. That's not a very large pool to pull from. Most of the other notable high class citizens have been nice enough like Trender Hoof, Photo Finish, Hoighty Toighty, and Sapphire Shores. The idea that none of them are nice seems a flawed statement.

Interesting. I quite like the setup you have going on here. Keep up the good work, you two!

Nice we have a good amount of characters in this. I wonder what other important people we will meet as this progresses. :trixieshiftleft:

Thanks for making me read this alex./ It was a fun read so far. YUO TOO SOCK!

Quite good chapter there. I look forward to read the part where Fluttershy shows that Cairn the beast of an attorney she can be.

Cairn is right, but he's also pretty fucking annoying.

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Ha, called it. He's a lawyer. Unbeatable record? Yeah, he'll be the prosecutor.

I think the story is moving a bit too slowly. If it were up to me I'd make it more Ace-Attorney-ish in the storytellking... maybe have a bit of dialog between the then-unknown murderer and victim (or thief and someone else, in this case?) and then cut to Phoenix Wright (or Pony Wright, or whoever) right before he is asked to take the case by Fluttershy. The story of the actual day in question is told through witness testimony in court, Fluttershy's recounting relevant events to Phoenix, and questioning witnesses during the investigation phase, as the case proceeds. I always liked that, you get a picture for what happened on the critical day in question piece by piece.

Anyways my point is that the story is very slow to start off. We're three chapters in and nothing has been stolen yet! A bit long for the opening act. You gotta hook the reader right off the bat! I'll stick with it though, I have no other complaints. :)

Related: I am going to assume Fluttershy did NOT see some things that will prove critical to the case, such as what Rarity was up to while Fluttershy was returning Opal. Gotta wonder what happened, or rather what the prosecution will CLAIM happened...

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Well, it was either go with a cold opening and let the reader try and sift through all these new characters, places, and events all at once, or ease them into things by establishing a certain status quo before the mystery strikes. We decided on the latter, since the former risked reader confusion. There is, after all, a lot going on in this story, both on the surface and beneath it.

Think of this case as being like 2-4 or 3-5, where Nick and friends are actually present at the scene before everything goes to hell. And start pondering exactly what that could mean for the characters we've been introduced to thus far.

Well, the description says Fluttershy and an ace attorney are defending Rarity, so I think we've met our ace attorney. Cairn is definitely an arrogant bastard, but he's also funny, I think he'll have good chemistry with Rarity and Fluttershy once he needs to work with them.

Big fan of Cairn. Even if he wasn't an Ace Attorney, anyone who can annoy Rarity like that is okay in my book.

He makes Rarity :raritycry:, and that makes me :rainbowlaugh:

4534081 I think Cairn is going to have his impeccable record tarnished by a ponified Phoenix Wright.

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