Shimmering Sparks haven't had it easy, having lost her latest job a month ago and not being able to get a new one (do to reasons that are totally not her fault), short on bits, bills starting to pile up and refusing to ask her parents for help (not giving them the satisfaction of 'we told you so') she asks for a miracle... what she got was getting awoken way to early in the morning, a odd note basicly telling her to 'take care of a being or face the consequences' and a box full of gold bits! Oh and this little thing, this will be easy, right?
...right?
In colaboration with ServerBrony
Edit by The Planyx
Chapters (5)
There are a lot of grammar mistakes such as lack of capitalization and commas, but the premise of the story is interesting. I'd recommend a proofreader to help polish it to make it more enjoyable to read.
4627687 There was a lack of capitalization? and commas?!
(the commas I might miss from time to time, but when did I lack capitalizations?
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Well blame is mostly (90%) on me, that being I'm slightly dyslectic, the fack that I'm Scandinavian, my co-writer is Australian and our editor is Canadian might impact a bit on how the grammar looks as well, still, mostly my fault
Nice to hear you still liked it, thats do to ServerBrony having such good reactions to the stupidity I put his character in
Just as an quriosity, what was it you liked/disliked the most about this chapter? (good or bad, word-y stuff makes this silly bugger happy
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4627847 Sent you a pm with the grammar mistakes I caught.
What I liked about the story is that I feel like Shimmering Sparks has just been giving a ridiculous burden on her life, and is going to struggle to keep the rest of it from falling apart. I have a feeling that either her character will grow and she will become more at ease with herself and the world around her, something foreshadow with the sensitive nature of Sweet Tooth and patience I foresee her needing to interact with her. Or she isn't going to learn lesson and just say "Buck it, I'll deal with it for now."
I look forward to whatever hijinks and stress Sweet Tooth will cause for the comedy, and if the story takes the direction, the growing and companionship the two will form as they begin to understand and learn from each other. However you take the story, I am looking forward to reading it.
4628165 We are a crazy lot.
4630524 Indeed we are.
I'm deeply sorry to hear about your loss and just want to say I hope you'll be able to remember her not as you last saw her, but as the grandmother you've know all your life. Take as much time as you need, I'm sure we'll all still be here when you get back.
4984140 thanks and don't worry, I tend to focus on the good memories.
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As for takeing time... I prefer to just keep writing (it keeps me happy