Twilight is called to Manehattan by Princess Celestia, and decides to have fun around the city while she's there. But when a certain azure unicorn suddenly apperas, things start to go Twilight's way once again.
Was originally all going to be one chapter, but it seemed rather redundant.
Plus I like making cliffhangers.
Due to one of the comments I got i added an explanation to the story, it'll show up the chapter after the next.
The references will ensue the chapter after the next; and randomness will ensue in chapter 2
I just ryhmed, deal with it
I'll upload a chapter when i see fit, when it's done and proofread.
Part 3 uploaded, enjoy guys. Been a while since i've uploaded a chapter on this, so I felt it was time now.
Part 4 coming very soon
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Very strange sequence of events. I'll stay on watch though. Curious to see where it goes next =)
I like it... but i am confused as to how there is an "Italian" restaurant when this is Equestria, and there is no such place as Italy, just something i thought weird. but i'm looking forward to more chapters
Interesting so far, to say the least. But, since this involves two of my top five favorite ponies (Twilight and Trixie), and it's supposed to be romantic, I just HAD to read! I'm curious to see where it goes next, like the first person said~
17987 Probably the same way there can be French haute couture.
17987 You never know.
18012 Well at least you get the joke.
17997 glad you like it
17984 Celestia is always depicted as such a hardened character; like in the first part of the return of harmony she wasn't laid back. So i gave her a more likable persona.
Awesome! thanks for updating! oh and yes "lets just name this and shut the hell up" (you noticed!).
20105 you thought I wouldn't? Always looking out for the readers y'know.
huh. so jamie is older than twilight and the gang. but how much older...hmmm.
20322 When rainbow Dash was a filly (even before the cutie mark chronicles episode, and younger than how she was in My Little Dashie) she was about seven. Jamie was about 12 when rainbow Dash was in the Cutie Mark Chronicles episode. so she's about 20-30, anywhere between there. She's a nice addition to the story, I felt she gave it that comedic relief the story needed. I was rather surprised how well I characterized Jamie though; what is this, who am I? Anyways, thanks for taking notice in Jamie though. I've really yet to have a story where my own O.C. had a larger role in one of my fics.
nice story just makes me read more
i'm the one who allway's liked twilight and trixie ship's
32477thanks, I'm working on another chapter of it, but I'm struggling to get it out
"You just lost who you on the date with you dolt!" the sentence sounds a little awkward...
but a good chapter, worth the wait...
33711 I know, there are still some minor mistakes. But with writer's block taking toll, then me continuing at another time that's sometimes unavaoidable... thanks though! Glad you liked the chapter!
nice story and also good written
there are only one or two sentences that i had to read twice coused on the grammar
34052 yeah, there are some minor issues with grammar and such. Thanks! I just liked the idea of this really, so I got into romantic comedy fics glad you enjoyed
very good story i hope we see more in the near future ^^
34071 there will be more, don't worry
I ALWAYS GET WRITER'S BLOCK ON THIS DAMNED FIC! GRRRRRRAAAAAAGGGGGGGGGGH
*Faceground, for those who lack palms*
i'm really looking forward for new chapter's
38137 The ideas are coming very slowly, sorry but it may be a while until this one continues
Dang ol' writer's block man
well that was quite the argument those two ponies had... Great chapter! what!? only two more?!?!
Can't wait to read them!
That was a very well written "outburst" from Twilight
also, WHY DIDENT I GET THE EMAIL FOR THIS! fdzhfd zgnb zzbgjkrzfbg jkfdng mdfnhhm,ng,n mfghjkkm bnm,xhb jfj ngldrfjgiosrgjh,dfhg h,mfghsjrtg jz,
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Yes Fluttershy, I am mad, very mad.
38792 Yes, did you get the joke behind what Trixie said in the chapter? (It's like we're in a badly written romantic comedy.) It's because they are
38889 Twilight is a rather strange one, but then again, all of these damned ponies are completely and utterly batshit insane.
38792 By the way, yes about only two more chapters, I'd like to conclude this as soon as possible while still keeping it as enjoyable as possible for everyone, it's not supposed to be anything special.
this was a nice chapter but, you made two spelling mistakes one is you used bit instead of big , the other is you misspelled cutie mark and the last is you spelled snaking instead of snacking other than that it was good
i also like this chapter but, you should think about rewriting the sentence about the elevator music. also you should change the vegetarian stew to vegetable stew and in the second to last paragraph you should change the you looove to your looove
in the second paragraph you should drop the word hairdo it really isn't needed in the sentence. in the seventh paragraph you should rewrite this sentence "I’ve just not been on a date before, nopony’s ever taken interest in me before." to something like, nopony's ever been interested enough to take me on a date. in the twelfth paragraph you need to rewrite " Twilight stood herself up" take out the word herself. in the sixteenth paragraph the sentence "I just find it funny that you and she haven’t connected better" needs to be rewritten. try writing it as i just find it funny that you and her aren't better connected. in the twenty-second paragraph the sentence "I suppose we should just enjoy they gave the damn things names, at least we can call them something." needs to be rewritten. try , i suppose we should be happy that they named the damn things, so at least we can call them something. also i use the breaks between each group of words as a new paragraph.
39309 Right, that was all writtena while back and will stay as is. Sorry to make you waste such excellent criticism but I don't feel like picking over any older chapters for this. Sorry
ok, Twilight Sparkle was called for a trip to Manehattan by Princess Celestia, the Princess had some madders to take cear of and did them, and wanted to see Twilight, Twilight thinking she was needing for something bog rushed out only to find out she was only needed for a short talk... in Manehattan ? Princess Celestia, is a bitch!
ok, Twilight Sparkle was called for a trip to Manehattan by Princess Celestia, the Princess had some madders to take cear of and did them, and wanted to see Twilight, Twilight thinking she was needing for something bog rushed out only to find out she was only needed for a short talk... in Manehattan ? Princess Celestia, is a bitch!
55294
Sorry for the duel post
Jamie seems to be a little to much like Vinyl scratch.
55294 yes quite
Ok see I hate it when people say that women in the military are bettor then most of the guys. That's only cause the entire army is guys so of course your gonna have a few fuckfaces that do there job crappily if the army was consisted mostly of women then the guys would be considered bettor cause they're fewer cases of them fucking up cause there is as many. (This has nothing I do with the fact women shouldn't be with the military, could care less really. I'm just pointing out facts that other people over look)
55459 lol it's nice but the voice well seems a bit forced. Idk my opinion
2915842 I wrote this loooooooong ago. I have no idea what the hell is even in this story anymore.
2954736 haha really should look at the publish date more often, in that case ill look at you other stories cause I sorta liked this
2954837 Don't do that! I would not wish my stories to destroy your sanity!
2954862 meh sanity smanity. Pretty sure I lost it traveling threw the nth demention. Also did you just come back? Like literally today, or a few days ago or what
2954880 Literally, about 20 minutes ago. I sunk into a depression some time ago. I'm still sunken in it, but it's not quite so... crippling now. The Anxiety does that, now.
2954889 well, sry to hear that. Just, don't expect to go into therapy mode cause really I have no idea how to fix that. All i can say is good luck, plus I'm sure people enjoy your writing and will be glad your back.
2954913 Well, yes. I'm sure some people somewhere enjoy my style of writing.
Perhaps they should see a specialist as well...But, nah. I ain't gonna bore you with my problems. But, hope you enjoy the stories you read!2954920 haha I'm sure I will, although will you take the ones on Haitis off, or are you going to ditch everything and start anew. The other option would be just to read fics and be like fck you to the audience I'm done writing. Haha idc either way I just don't read Haitis stuff
2954939 Haha, some stories will be continued (RTS and Conflicting Emotions) and others, perhaps not. I may continue writing this one. But, I will be honest. I really do not like this story.
2954946 ok what ever floats your boat it did seem forced can't really explain it. But I can tell that you didn't seem to enjoy writing it, even if I did enjoy the plot.
2954956 Hey, it's not my choice. If the fans want more, I can write more.
2954961 Naw don't do that, your story suffers for it. If anything just delete this and either write a similar, bettor story or just ditch it for something you wanna write