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What a beautiful Sunset.

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Damn, that was hot and fun!

And right after that end line, Rainbow discovers she forgot to lock the door as Rarity walks in to apologize for ditching them, and saying she wouldn't have come in like this but the door was ajar and she was worried.

Jaaska #2 · Apr 15th, 2014 · · 11 ·

Slap me !

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It's human. It's tagged correctly.

I very, very rarely enjoy humanized stuff, but this is a fun exception. Twilight and Dashie are super cute here, and you've got a nice mix of scene-setting and sex.

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Good thing this isn't anthro then, right?

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All my apologies, lazy me should have been more attentive =/

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No worries, man.:raritywink:

This was the best human twidash clop I've ever read! :rainbowderp: It was super hot and surprisingly fluffy for a clop. Well done! :rainbowkiss::heart:

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I must thank you for being one of the few people to actually have the decency to see a couple replies, and apologize & edit your original comment after realizing you made a mistake. And I'm sorry for the less than polite reply I made previously.

4239041 I'm the one who's sorry here. My initial omment was nowhere near polite as well :ajsleepy:


Anyway, I took the time to read my first human clop since a while for the trouble. I'm not disappointed n_n

Agggg!!! How can I like this more!!!!

This was the best twidash story i have read yet. :rainbowkiss::twilightblush:::rainbowwild::twilightsheepish:

An excellent story. Most sex fics seem forced or hollow, but this one flows very naturally and well. I hope you have plans for continuing this!

Hmmm... I... will allow this. :eeyup:

Lesbians are my fetish... Me likey

Nicely done Holy. I like

Twidash ttwidash!!!! Is my otp anyways I like your fic

loved this! would love a sequel, too. just sayan.

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/seconded.

the world needs more Twidash!

I love when FiMFic doesn't show me notifications!
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Thanks, Merlos. :heart:
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Group Hugs for all of you! :heart:

Twilight shook her head to snap her out of “dat ass” mode.

After I finished reading, I had to go back just to laugh at this line some more. :rainbowlaugh:

A sequel is fine with me! Not bad at all. :twilightsmile::rainbowkiss:

"You know me, fast as a cheetah and quiet as a cat,"

Cheetahs are cats...

aCB

This is just the kind of experimental-lesbian story that I really like. I would have liked more emotion and less clop sex, but I realize that's my opinion and I'm in a great minority on this. It did feel a teensy bit rushed, but that didn't stop it from being enjoyable.

This is great, Holy. Seriously, though I pretty much agree with 4242567 about the clop. It wasn't written badly, but this could be something more than a clop oneshot. :raritydespair:

Twidash is cute. :heart: 10/10

While I don't like that people KEEP MAKING DASH GAY, I do respect that that is some people's opinions, now on to actually reading the story :/

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But Dash has to be gay to be with gay Twilight. IT'S THE ONLY WAY.

4243422 It is people's opinions because Dash fits the Stereotypical Lesbian. Sorry but I am of the opinion she is straight, tomboyish(which is kinda sexy in my opinion, the personality before anyone comments on that), but straight never the less

Haven't read it yet, but I love the picture~ :derpytongue2:

to be perfectly frank. by cannon most mares are lesbian through habit and circumstance but lesbian non the less, mainly because of the massive majority of females to males. and another thing horses generally have herds which mean one guy several girls not because the guy is a sociopath but because that just equine instinct. to be fair we don't recognize horses as sentient we talk to them and stuff enough that they might one day gain sentience. any ways my point is why do we insist that all of the main six can't be lesbian?
the only reason why they don't resemble humans in sexuallity is because mares have HEATS(super intense desire to mate while the are incredibly fertile) and after that their desire goes almost dormant.

Deamon #33 · Apr 16th, 2014 · · 1 ·

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Just Dash? The whole of FiM shipping/clop is one gigantic clamfest. That's what you get when you can count the recurring male characters on one hand and have fingers to spare.

Besides, Twidash is just about the cutest thing ever.

4244273 Sorry I am a firm believer in Flash Sentry and Twilight Sparkle so that puts a damper on your whole Twilight/Dash pairing XD

That was a good twidash fic to fap too:twilightsmile:

I don't think this could have been written any better. This was awesome and hot. Great Job, Holy.

4243551 why did you read a fanfic that was obviously lesbian the?

4244917 because like any straight male I find the prospect arousing :twilightblush:

I'll have to chime in with 4242567 and 4243160, this could be a lot more.
But as it stands I think this is my top one-shot "clop" fic.:twilightsmile:

Twilight resisted the urge to stop and ask if Rainbow was okay as she continued her path.

Why? Proper consent is a lot more sensical than the rest of this story.
Because this story really, really didn't make sense to me. No plot, questionable continuity within characters ... It's definitely better than certain stories I've read on this site, but ... a questioning girl eating another girl out on their first night isn't entirely realistic. Of course, Rainbow's choice or whatever to not as Twilight why Twilight is suddenly sexing her is less realistic. Needless to say, redthumb'd

4245573 XD good one XD Still doesn't change my opinion :derpytongue2:

I'm smiling. This story made me smile.

This was good. I think that it has potential to continue the story, But that is not my decision.
Good for what is and rather enjoyable 8/10
~Tobben

I`m only smiling. Nothing else right now, but great story nonetheless!

I smiled, giggled, laughed through out this whole thing. It was fast paced but I don't mind. The best part about this fimfic to me is the social awkwardness of it. I can relate to that. Good job on this fic my friend. :)

This was adorable, sweet, and HOT! Very well done with this story! I whole heartedly approve.:twilightsmile:

4243551 People are not usually under the impression that Dash is a stereotypical lesbian- their under the impression that she is a psychological lesbian. As we humanize the ponies more and more, we can apply more human sciences to them. Using psychology, it can be reasonably estimated that Rainbow Dash, from what we've seen of it so far, has about an 86% chance of having bi- or homoromantic tendencies. It's not stereotypical, or offensive- it's science.

Cyb

Then they won't be able to hear you moan... she thought.

Her body was ready.

That's my girl. I had a couple more quotes I'd have liked to use, but I had to stop. This was nice. 10/10 would come again

4261623 idk why but your explanation sounded strangly familiar

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