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I proved my namesake in a duel of honour. The crayon never stood a chance.

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Twilight had never expected to ever meet Queen Chrysalis ever again. So it was to her great earth-shaking surprise when Chrysalis not only reappeared in her life but with a late Hearthswarming gift no less. It's half-changeling, half-pony, all mischief. Sure, she prefers a morning snuggle or two for breakfast and coccoons her carrots and alfalfa away, her idea of making her bed is building a giant changeling web in the bedroom, it's impossible to tell her from her school friends at pick-up hour, her favourite hide-and-seek hiding spot is the ceiling, and, worst of all, she never puts all the books she reads back on the shelf. And she reads a lot! Still, it was like raising any other filly, right? So Twilight Sparkle, accidental mommy, thought.

Now with official music provided by Citric Acid, Across the Seas

Warning: I have been told that chapter 3 is quite sad, just in case that's not your kind of thing. The rest of the story, however, is generally light-hearted. I would be very grateful if you don't judge the story by chapter 3 alone.

'Huggles shall be demanded! Huggles shall be given!' - The Cutest Deadliest Predator Ever

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Lia is adorable, I want to see more of her. But I bet just living in Ponyville is like being in a very good buffet for her, all that love and friendship in the air must make her mostly full all the time.

Wow this story is cute.

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Yep, you got it. That's Lia feeding. I figured I'd try and imagine what it felt like being Shining Armour having his love being nom'd on. He complained of headaches mostly so that ended up being the main feature.


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I agree, at a glance it'd be just like a buffet, wouldn't it? But then it begs the question, why did Chrysallis have to invade Canterlot? Why didn't she and her changelings just infiltrate, assimilate themselves into pony society, and live off the 'buffet'? It's a question I want to try and explore in this story.


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Thanks! Glad you all enjoyed it. :)

I love Lia even more now. Now, the big question on my mind is if Twilight happens to be her aunt??? If so, I can just picture Shining Armor's eyes threatening to pop out of his head when he meets his daughter.

Adorable and sad at the same time. Chrysalis is obviously best changeling queen if she has a foal as cute as Lia.

... I appear to be leaking from my eyes.

I love it, I need more or I'll die!
Also, I see that you like Ar Tonelico quite a bit... :scootangel:

Those are some feels right there.

Other than the songs I'm loving the story.

'With great pleasure we welcome thee to the Animus. With great care we initialize the CHRYSALLIS_LINKER protocol. Standby.'

'With great dismay we alert thee, CHRYSALLIS.SRV server stability is now compromised.'

The computer styled bits really take you out of the story. It's like they're all connected to a giant computer somewhere, instead of a hivemind. It's awkward to read, and doesn't mesh well with the rest of it.
I'm pretty sure Animus means something like Soul, so the name still works. All the EXE and SRV and Protocol stuff, though, not so much.

But hey, I'm here for the adorable Lia, and we've got plenty of that.:twilightsmile::rainbowkiss:

I don't think Cadence and Shining could hate a foal as cute as Lia. I can't wait to see her meet the CMC and start having fun.

Lia is adorable again and her mimicking Spike's 'attacks' is hilarious. Spike's question to Twilight had me rolling on the floor laughing, now she's going to tear his room and bed apart looking for dirty magazines so Lia doesn't find them. And I can so see Fluttershy cooing over Lia and even glaring down Celestia if the Princess tries to take her away from Twilight.

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The computer styled bits really take you out of the story. It's like they're all connected to a giant computer somewhere, instead of a hivemind. It's awkward to read, and doesn't mesh well with the rest of it.
I'm pretty sure Animus means something like Soul, so the name still works. All the EXE and SRV and Protocol stuff, though, not so much.

Pinkameana's Influence transcends space, time, religion, and dimensional barriers: best to never question it at all.:pinkiesmile:

Yep, Lia's still adorable.:rainbowkiss:

Chrysallis

Chrysalis. One L.

Filomena

Philomena.

Just tell Celestia now Twilight.. Learn from your experience! Or at least drive your logic train far enough to realize that Princess Lia is going to be on the Empress' kill list, which makes all of Ponyville a potential victim of collateral damage.

Wait a second. Princess Lia. Daughter of a dark chitin/armor clad menace. An evil Empress.

Does this make Spike Chewbacca?

Okay so. Rainbow is obviously Han Solo. Fluttershy would make a good C3PO. Celestia could be Obi Wan or Yoda, for the mentor role. I suppose Twilight could fill in for Luke as there are enough similarities, with Chrysalis screwing with her family and the blood tie to the Princess. Pinkie might make a decent R2D2 since they both can apparently do whatever the hell they like.

So now we just need Chrysalis to come back from the dead with a ton of magical cybernetics so she can slice off Twilight's hoof.

Or Lia is Luke and Twilight is Obi Wan, in which case Twilight is boned. Which would make Celestia Yoda, Scoots Han Solo, Apple Bloom Chewbacca, and Sweetie Belle... could pass as Leia?

Just wanted to say that your cover art does indeed look like a pony(and looks great to me) the only thing you might want to change is the background color and her armour other than that good artwork .:pinkiehappy::twilightsheepish:

Lia... Like a combination of Lulu and Tia... More pet names!

Fur on a changeling? Do I detect some hybridization?:twilightoops:

Just how long were Chrysalis and Shining together?:rainbowderp:

Child borne of a demon in love, to a fate not of her choosing. Cursed to a live a life marred by the past sins of her heritage.:pinkiesad2:

Sounds fami!liar. Do go on.:duck:

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HUNGH...
diabetus has killed me dead.

P.s THAT BLOODY TRAGEDY TAG BETTER NOT BE FOR ANY FUTURE/ENDGAME EVENTS.
If it's for what's happened so far it should be sad, tragedy is when you kill the main character or worse (and then the story ends(they stay like that, no DBZ copouts with cosmic powers)). WHICH IF YOU DO TO LIA I WILL HUNT YOU DOWN:flutterrage::twilightangry2:

Apologies for the rage/rant but Lia is simply to adorable for any sort of permanent or long-lasting tragedy.

I died from all of the love

This is pretty good; your jokes are funny, and your songs are original and actually work. I'm not a big fan of tragedy, so I don't know if I'll read on, but I have to say, you've got a pretty good handle on dialogue and story construction from what I can see. If your plotting skills match up, you've got a solid story going here.

Good work!

:ajbemused: you sir, or madam, have done something that only Pen Stroke has done before.


:pinkiehappy::raritystarry::pinkiegasp: made an OC so cute that I am dying of a kuwie, sorry for misspell, overdose.

keep up the good work. :eeyup::scootangel:

This is just a mental construct A body built by our imaginations

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... So. Pinkie Pie either is or knows an elder god of the changelings.
Huh.

This explains everything and nothing all at once.

And Twilight and Spike are left the sole remaining links to Lia's past. That's going to turn out well.

Interesting idea, well done and with funny moments to diffuse the heavy stuff? Great work. :twilightsmile:

And Fluttershys line.... seriously. My poor sides. :rainbowlaugh:

This deserves way more attention. The idea isn't new but its very well implemented.

The way you characterise the Changeling filly OC is amazing, I am currently dieing of an cuteness overdose :pinkiecrazy:

This is a pretty good story. Keep it up.

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I think you shorted out the Star Wars section of my brain from trying to follow that...

Kinda laid the 'Mother' bit on a little thick, but I liked it.

Great story so far. Would love to see more

4266166 Obviously Lulu must be Obi-Wan/Yoda, she's the one to appear in dream sequences.

Also, this is... I Really like this premise! :pinkiehappy: Now to have the Little Princess escape to play with the CMC and cause (more?) havoc!

Wow. Yet another hit. You may not make 3d images form out of enviroments or confuse us with complex literature*cough*background pony by ss&s*cough*

But you truly are a master of words all the same. Another fave.

I don't know how to feel about this...

fluttershy :ajbemused: you'r sweet but are ya sure ya want something with a lv 2 pinkie grade reality bending capability and a kill target by an equestrian enemy nation.:ajsleepy: you might have handled the cmc for a night but I'm not sure if you can handle one permantly... even you might brake after a while:pinkiecrazy:

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:pinkiegasp::pinkiecrazy: I like this idea all we need then is a psycho pinkie or a truly evil discord to join in. CMC TOWN DESTROYERS YAAAA

.yes forget a full evil villan team up all we need is a second smaller less moral bounds known and influentialable pinkie pie and maybe a bad discord to inspire them
:rainbowderp::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy: buck that's scary I can see the ruined town now... or equestrian as a whole ... wonder if the can brain wash a certain baby pheniox to join in give the CMC seems utterly capable of getting extremely dangerous items a few dozen or hundred fireworks could be extremely handy especially if the launch it all at canterlot along with peewee:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

this looks interesting...I shall continue to read.

I shudder at the thought of Lia hanging out with the CMC xD oh god the mahem that would ensue

Can we have more? This is quite good, very entertaining, and full of both feels and dawws.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

Great chapter, I can't wait for the next one.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~

Thanks for the story suggestions. I'll be sure to give them a look.
And while I am slightly disappointed that this story does not get as much attention as it deserves, I do admit that your more crazy stories draw a lot more laughs out of me.
A good D'awww every once in a while is good for you, too.

Has now died from sugary cuteness overdose, little twilight Aurelia is so adorable <3

Twilight Aurelia is so adorable! I could read about her all day!

"Except it's cooler cause it's wireless." Spike added.

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Well, the way to end all conflicts is to point Twilight Aurelia at the fighting parties and let her cuteness overwhelm them. I can't wait to see her meet the CMC... THE CUTENESS SHALL BE QUADRUPLED!!!:pinkiehappy:

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