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Fallout: Equestria - Short: A Kiss To Build A Dream On

A nice little short about the wasteland of Equestria- a town, a pub and several ponies with whiskey thrown in the mix. The basis of all good stories.

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DerpyDaringDitzyDoo

DerpyDaringDitzyDoo #1 · Apr 21st, 2014 · · ·

Just so you know your story was added to the Fallout Equestria Group! Feel free to PM me if you have any questions!

scootsdabat

scootsdabat #2 · Apr 21st, 2014 · · ·

Awww cuite ending! Any idea about how many words the final copy is going to be?

Comment posted by SweetAutumns deleted Feb 1st, 2015

SweetAutumns

SweetAutumns #4 · May 7th, 2015 · · ·

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Edited and finalised! It's only a few word longer, but we are go. Things have been changed up quite some, the grammar improved where it was lacking and it's a little more descriptive in some places.
I also integrated a few links for the songs to make things easier.
(Yes, I do know that it's been over a year, but I kinda' forgot about this for a good long bit.)

SweetAutumns

SweetAutumns #5 · Apr 5th, 2016 · · ·

Reading back over this now makes me realise that I'm rather unhappy with it: I feel like it was rushed and too short, it has multiple grammatical errors and the general tone doesn't quite hit the mark of what I intended. The beginning is especially irksome as it comes off as edgy. It was a first attempt at writing an actual story, though that doesn't excuse it as I know that I can do better. The environment was intentionally left relatively vague yet it still wasn't fleshed-out enough and the the fact that there is a clear quote of dialogue defeats the written style I was trying as I wanted there to be no dialogue whatsoever (obviously, another story would likely not follow this pattern).

These aren't all of my issues but I've text-walled my own story enough. I will not be making any changes as I believe that my mistakes may provide learning opportunities for however few people read this and that simply writing a new story which fixes these mistakes would be beneficial as the two could then be compared to see which is more effective storytelling.