For many years, I wondered why there was always a statue in the park...one of a hooded stallion, hood pulled over to the point all you saw was his muzzle...he wore a hooded robe and a jacket, as well as these odd arm and leg braces...
First of all, I'd like to be hired as your personal critique, I'm hired? Good. Now, I saw this pop up and decided 'hey! I'll read it!' So I did. Great storyline, I like the name 'Dante Quicksilver' Sounds like an assassin to me. You are the perfect person to describe parkour! I've never seen it done better. The only thing I noticed that was wrong, when someone is shouting *unless it's pinkie * you want to keep it lower case and civilized. "Hey, you!" compared to "HEY, YOU!!" See? Overall, I LOVE the story, you get a like
First of all, I'd like to be hired as your personal critique, I'm hired? Good.
Now, I saw this pop up and decided 'hey! I'll read it!' So I did.
Great storyline, I like the name 'Dante Quicksilver' Sounds like an assassin to me.
You are the perfect person to describe parkour! I've never seen it done better.
The only thing I noticed that was wrong, when someone is shouting *unless it's pinkie * you want to keep it lower case and civilized.
"Hey, you!"
compared to
"HEY, YOU!!"
See?
Overall, I LOVE the story, you get a like
4229630 Thanks! Love your critique! It's really helping!
I'M...LEARNING!!!
4229647 YUSSSSSSSSSS
4229630 Would you like to know the original idea for his name?
4229717 Yuss! Was it DMC reference?
4229720 His original name idea was Silent Shadow.
4229724 Oooo...oooh
4229724 mmm yum yum
Apple Buck:
As Fluttershy would say Oh my
Scootaloo:
So, breaking the forth wall already.
Shining Belle:
So, Dante Quicksilver has a geass?