Very little escapes Rainbow Dash's notice when flying. When she notices somepony is bothering Fluttershy, she wastes no time swooping down and confronting the troublemaker, for better or for worse.
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Good story. Like the wordplay, and your characterisations were spot-on. Nice to see Fluttershy being the proactive one, too.
Good story. But don't do footnotes, it's pointless, and makes the reader have to scroll down for something you could've easily stated in the story itself.
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You're scrolling down, anyway, silly.
Also, this isn't a comedy. A comedy story is one that's main point is to make the reader laugh. Having a couple jokes doesn't make a story a comedy. This is definitely a Slice of Life story, so you should change the tag to that.
4223549 It's not the scrolling down that's the problem, it's that the footnotes are kind of unnecessary and could've easily been incorportated into the story.
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They could've been, but I like reading footnotes, so I'm not overly bothered.
4223570 That's cool for you, but for mobile users (like me) it's a chore to scroll all the way down just to read a couple of sentences that anyone could've inferred. I'm not trying to diss footnotes, I actually don't mind them, but for this story they're not needed.
....this isn't a comedy, so don't tag it as such. Ot's more of a Slice-of-Life fic.
This is cute. It felt a bit strange to me that the antagonist is never really explained but it was still fun.
I think it's mistagged though. This is more Slice Of Life than Comedy.
4279060 um if you don't mind me saying I thought Comedy fit it pretty good some parts of it were humorous I really like the ending with the CMC and the explosives
and Slice of Life fits this story as well
Anyways great story it was a blast to read thank you for the delightful story
I really like it! Great work!
That is so Raijbow Dash. Wish she would have had faster reaction time though, you would have thought the dizzinator at Womder Bolts academy would have Knox,Ed her into better shape than that.