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Verlax


Verlax, polish brony, admin of The Polish Writers Society, author of several fics, big fan of Warhammer 40.000, H.P Lovecraft writing and of course My Little Pony.

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A Price of Loyalty story.

With the three pony tribes uniting, forming Equestria and its government, it seemed that pony kind was finally able to create a nation strong enough to withstand the the test of time. Yet as the wealthy say: everything has its price.

With the newborn nation’s economic system failling, and its leaders unprepared to pay the price necessary to solve the slump, Equestria was plunged into a massive crisis. As inflation runs unchecked and food shortages threaten the population, the threats of poverty and famine become all the more real. Tempers flare, riots erupt across the nation, soon transforming into full-fledged revolts are crushing Equestria’s once bright promise of peace and prosperity.

With its continued existence in jeopardy, merchants gather in the city of Lubuck, hoping to find a way to save their threatened positions were about to change the face of the nation for centuries to come.

Their solution: a confederation.

In the year 4 A.o.E, Equestria witnessed the birth of the Horseatic League. With the sudden shift of power the leading class of Equestria was faced with a situation none of them were prepared for. A new power forming at the edges of the realm, heralding the dawn of a new era, the weakened crown had to cope with a blow to its prestige. Plots were formed and poisons were brewed as the birth of a nation was washed in a river of blood. Yet the year 4 A.o.E was to be remembered as the birth date of the Horseatic League, a league, that was destined to change the face of the world. After all, steel may win battles, but Gold Wins Wars.


Soundtrack is completely optional.

Side Story to “A Song of Storms: Summer Lands
Co-written by Spike the Scribe
Proof-readed by LoyalLiar, 24th Pegasus, and Ruirik
Cover-Art by Ruirik

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 31 )
Comment posted by Brown Books deleted Jun 12th, 2014
Comment posted by Brown Books deleted Jun 12th, 2014

I am fascinated how you wrote the "letters" of the characters. Definitely gave a better feel of there situations or back-stories. This was a nice chapter! Very unigue letter format, kept things interesting and funny (puddingheads speech). I feel the story is gonna be brewing up somethin nice!

Man I looked everywhere and don't see a story like this at all, dude awesome job with this chapter and the naval battle of course.

The song went so well I almost fell of my couch getting too excited and the soundtrack was perfectly fitted into the tension of the scene.

“Not to be rude or anything, but I wouldn’t conquer anything with a cog.” Howling Wind remarked, a smirk playing on his lips.
Winterspell rolled his eyes.
“I didn’t choose the name. I’m not the owner.”

I wonder if that's Grainwood's trade ship?

Wow it turns out the victuals brothers are real, I happened to be playing patrician 4 and they mentioned them in the story mode somewhere.
Also happened to look them up, it was an interesting read. Aww man now I wanna play patrician! :twilightsmile:

Hey bro stay uplifted, awesome story with a lot of potential. I'm personally motivated to write myself (Medieval Fic) because of this Fic.

Pretty interesting start actually. Reminds me a bit of the new 300 movie, with the naval warfare.

This Cold Steel seems to be shaping up to be quite the devious character....
This is certainly a story that takes a little more brainpower to absorb than the usual run-of-the-mill fics out there, but there's nothing wrong with that. Nice work so far!

This story definitely deserves more attention than what it's gotten so far, but sadly I'm not sure if the complex political and economical plot makes it an easy read for the majority of the fandom. I'm certainly no whiz with those topics, so maybe I'll learn a thing or too :).

I'm wondering how intertwined is this going to be in the PoL verse? Obviously it's in the era of 24's work, but will it have any specific ramifications with LL's storyline too?

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Well, I can't speak "directly" in the name of LL and 24th, but...

- Yes, GWW (shortcut for the story) will have impact on LL's writing, but it will not be really lore-breaking. Basically only three little things will be added, one may or may not be part of plot, the rest will be only mentioned.

- Also, LL mentioned something about creating more stuff around this idea, but shhh... I can't spoil anything more.

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Thank you kindly for such big amount of comments. Sorry for answering them so late, lack of time. While I can't guarentee that I will publish a new chapter of GWW quickly, for such awesome readers I will try to speed up the process.

Wow I love Winterspell just for that last scene. The beginning of the chapter was set up nicely. *smells the crispy port air...then chokes at the gruesome aroma. Yep.

The merchants argument was hilarious and the captain played it smoothly, hopefully his lie isn't found out.

I knew that was Grainwood's ship, I'm looking forward to this story even more. She's probably going to build an armada now. :twilightsmile:

Chapters are...just too short...Boohoo...I'm kidding great story so far. Job well done lad and don't worry about postin em quick, patience is success after all.


Oh yeah, what I do to live in those times...

Finally managed to find some time to write here.
The first thing that came to my mind after reading this one and Judgement of Carrion: you like the sea, don't you? :trixieshiftright:
First of all, the story was enjoyable. You really know how to write dialogs and portait emotions. Each of the characters was well-written and even when he/she appeared for a just a few pages I could decide whether I like that pony or not - for example, Blank Slate irritated me from the very beginning (like most children do - I'm awful, I know) :pinkiecrazy:
The story itself was quite different from what one can see in most fics (politics and economy over action and adventure). But it's far more interesting that a typical politician's speech. Though I do have to say that in my opinion the "on the sea" scenes top all the rest. Or maybe it's just Winterspell :twilightblush:
The biggest flaw for me was the ending, but not in terms of the story, but the way it was written. I do not like too much chronics, diary entries or letters, even if they serve to give the reader some important information or show the character's view of something. And the whole ending was a bit overflown with them. But that goes under "personal preferences", so it's not really a flaw in the typical meaning.

Good luck in your future projects!

That last song fit perfectly.

Welp, as if I needed any more reason to not trust Cold Steel...:twilightangry2:

“Heck if I know.” Casimir shrugged. “He got it from his father and he never truly explained it to me. I really can’t see any difference between a claymore, flamberge, and a Zweihufer. Also, I don’t think it matters as long as it works properly, right?”

I lol'd at "zweihufer".:rainbowlaugh:

Mercenaries, soldiers of fortune eh! This is gonna rock later can't wait for another chapter!

I love these mercenaries.

Ugh...few things are as terrifying/annoying as a mentalist with an agenda.:facehoof:

Glad to see more of this story!

Ponies on boats. The idea has always baffled me. I look forward to seeing how it is portrayed.

And there's the connection with Winterspell!

Well Mr. Cold Steel, that timing looks mighty suspicions. Did you happen to have anything to do with this death?

Auroch

YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

“Oh, well… it would be really nice if you could pay for our meals and drinks. Weird Hoar especially tends to eat more than our entire group...”
“Good…” Winterspell thought. “Carry on…”
“...and besides that, we’ll work for free.” Casimir finished.

Take the deal! Take the deal! You are not going to get this lucky again. And the Auroch is even a freaking prophet!

Did the civilians have a clear shot at escaping on their own?

I did have to laugh at the mercenaries pulling a Leroy Jenkins.

And now Winterspell has himself a foe. I wonder what the deal is with his odd physical condition. Nice work!

Hahaha, sometimes when you hire mercenaries, they get bored if you don't supply enough fighting.

Man, those pirates sure weren't prepared for this particular band of mercenaries. It didn't exactly end well, but those redshirts went down hard.

Your right about that Robored.

This chapter was an imporvement from the previous chapters! Well done. Just came back to the forum after some months, found you made some updates, and...joy! New GWW chapters...I was excited as usual. You dont find too many political oriented stories around here.

Grainwood is stepping on something trifling...though I may need to reread the chapters again. I like to predict things as I go or analyze everything (I know it's strange).

Keep up the good work with the story :twilightsmile: I squee whenever I read stuff like this, so your on the right track and never give up. Keep writing.

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Me too! Casmir seems like a noble fella for a mercenary. Usually it's the other way around to plunder the village for loot instead.

The charge was freaking awesome! Damn it that bovine really did em nice!

But in all honesty Winterspell should have just killed the bastards...god damn it! I know it sounds immoral to risk the civilians and all but jeez. Sacrifice a few to save many. But well done indeed, simply seeing Winterspell's inner conflict between doing the heroic thing or just stay out of trouble was nice as well.

Goid chapter, sweet and merciless action, wasn't too much annoying description like some people do with fight scenes. Keep up the good work!!!

I like Hornbreaker, hope she shows up later.

From the first chapter I figured Grainwood was gonna be the stereotypical fat merchant covered in gold, I was pleasantly surprised.

Poor Thunder Bone got suicided.

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They had a shot at escaping but were too terrified to do anything, damn peasants. :derpytongue2:

pegasus concentrated on more pressing matters, like trying to decided what to do with the situation at

decide

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