This story is a sequel to Just another OctaScratch fic
Sequel to Just another OctaScratch fic
I had no help. I have no-one to edit it. I am probably going to screw it up. And, most likely, it will have more grammatical errors than my 7 year old bro's written work. So just roll with it.
Octavia and Vinyl are a couple. Now they need to learn to work it around their lives. Next door, two new neighbours have moved in: Lyra Heartstrings and Bonbon. Chaos ensues. Now trying to include more characters into my stories so the quality is bound to improve. Eventually.
Now with Derpy and Doctor.
The tag "Alternate Universe" is refering to part of the adventure.
Also, this story can and will be affected by your comments. Just say what you want to see happen and I will make it so. You will also be immortalised in the author's notes if your suggestion is picked.
I will say that I expected them to struggle a bit with suddenly finding themselves in a new dimension. And NOT silly things like not understanding what pants are (yes, I've seen that written.) but things like the new perspective of being taller, or the intricacies of a loping two legged gait. Put yourself in the situation, and write dialogue that way as well. I suppose the time has passed on them discovering their bodies, but it is somehing to keep in mind if you write more pony-human stuff.
As far as story? You're doing great. I'm happily along for the ride.
Sorry I don't have much to say. But at least I commented!
4391352 though your point is valid, I actually did that on purpose. What good is a story without strange things, like Vinyl actually having the ability to hold a conversation when she needs to? Thanks for enjoying the story. It's what I aiming to do. At least you commented unlike everyone else.
Herbivorous Ponies + Bacon + Sausage = Omnivorous Ponies
Well, there goes the planet
4621865 these ponies of mine are omnivorous. Not canon, remember?
So many things happening so quickly... I LOVE IT
I started reading this story really late so I can't really give input. The story is god so far, everything is moving really quickly though.
Anyways, good job.
What? I-... I don-... Ugh... I'm sorry but this is so outlandish... This whole chapter is funny but weird.
Can't really say much in terms of constructive criticism. I like the story, it is moving really fast, pretty much stuff I have mentioned before. Yeah, keep writing. Don't have much else to say.
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I understand that, I was making a poor joke / reference.
Aside from that, if I am still able to give a suggestion, I would like them to return to Equestria, (Whenever you want them to) But they end up in the wrong time and chaos happens. I don't know, it is a weird and dumb idea.
4622079 this was already going to be in the story. For details, you're goin to have to wait.
It's turning into a Bay movie, and it's just lossing my attention... Sorry.
4904646 I know, I'm starting to lose interest myself. I had it all figured out at first, then I wrote some and from there it started changing course and then I couldn't figure out what to do next.