The elements of harmony must be sacrificed for the greater good of Equestria. Doing this as the mane six know will put the future at risk as there will be no way to protect them should another villian step in. What they don't see coming is what they will recieve from their sacrifce. However, getting use to these new allies may take a while.
With the exception of the first two chapters, each chapter will have its own story similar to how the show works, so don't expect too much of an overall story arc.
Chapters (11)
Thanks, I guess.
That is funny.
This is a great story
But you should probably find an editor for it
All the errors are detracting from the story itself
Thanks for the feedback, It's been tough having only these other three comments(one of which is mine) being the only responses I've gotten. As for the editor, I'll certainly look for one, but for now is there are stand-out mistakes you see that I should change?
Will give it a read in a minute...
I can't believe how well you avatar fits with that comment.
I do hope you like it though.
My Brain it Hurts this story hurts more than my hand writing xD
STILL HURTS :(
I'm done
Me caveman
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I also realize that "aren't we" isn't proper either. Well thanks for pointing out that mistake.
*And fixed.*
Ow ow ow ow ow. No!
Second paragraph and I cannot take anymore!
Please get an editor to look this thing over.
4337836 I see what you did there!!!!!
Sorry but I'm done. I try give every story a fair chance, but that goes out the window when on of the things I hate happen. Theres 2 in the first 2 chapters, First being that they (they being human/(s) or pony/(ies)) getting over meeting the other for the first time very quickly. It wasn't even end of the first chapter for that to happen. And then ONLY Celestia knows what they are destined to do, then they meet discord and don't really freak out, and they get a house in ponyville with 2 chapters. Saying its rushed it a very very very understatement.
The second thing is; they know of my little pony. Its just a complete turn off for me. Soon as I see the know of the show, i've lost interest. I like the drama of if someone is going to a new world, they know nothing about it. And that will lead to the drama of finding out stuff about the new planet, and how they all deal with the change.
I would recommend heavily on re-writing this. And pace it out more, and this is just me. I would make Celestia know nothing about the guardians. And then make the humans know nothing of mlp. But thats me. However won't be fav'ing or liking this story, but I want be doing the opposite either, so yeah, have a nice day or night or what ever.