When Queen Fangalla hears stories about a mare named Fluttershy who was a bat pony at one time, she decides to train her to become the princess of the bat ponies.
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YAY! IM THE FIRST ONE TO LEAVE A COMMENT!!
P.S. I like your avatar. 
I like your story, you have earned a, follow, favorite, and a smily face
And if you want I can help extend your story.
3 comment?
I'm .gana read this
No more :(
WHY NO MORE!?!?!?!?!!?
Wow this was real short but I like through :3
The story plot line and stuff
Poor fluttershy now she can't remember noting and only remembers beginning flutterbat
Seems Like it's gonna be cute, but them chapter lengths. Probably would be a good Idea to fuse those chapters.
Sorry if the chapters are short. Sometimes i forget to check to see how long they are.
4188134 don't be srry it's just a mistake everybody at one point of there life makes mistakes :3
4188324
I NO NEED THX I need HAPPY PEOPLE
The story will continue, I just need to think of the next things that will happen
4191951
We'll think what would the mane six find
and we'll flutterbat remember sertin things like who her friends are BUT THEN QUEEN makes her to forget stuff aging? Idk it's your story
Chapter lengths! Improve them!
I typically have a rule of at least 1,000 words per chapter when I write. Many prefer chapters much longer than that. My essays have longer paragraphs than these chapters!
So try to get the word count into four digit before posting the chapter.
Also, detail, detail, exposition, exposition. Showing not telling!
Slow down with story advancement! It's going way to fast!
4193716 i'll try. I know i have to improve on those skills.
4193908
Wells here a trick I tried, It got me to get some chapters up to 2,500 words on minimum(Stories I didn't post) Start somewhere you know you can reach, such as 600 on chapter 2, then go there, and incrementally get larger. Go from 600 to say, 750, 750->1,000, 1,000->1,500 and so on.
4193992 So, are you saying slowly make your way to 1,000 words? I'm sorry, I get confused a lot
4194039 No, I started from 1,000. My goal is to eventually get around 5,000-10,000 word chapters as those are the chapter lengths I like to read.
You should try to get at least thousand word chapters.
Wonder what we'll happen SIR/MIZZ I
STORY BUT TAKE TIME ON IT AND MAKE IT LONGER!!!!
With a bit more details and dislodge or just make 2 chapters one
4195708 why no more?!?!?!
4199018 WHY U NO UPDATE!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
Can't wait for the next chapter
I'll try making more chapters to a lot of my stories during the weekend. Also, is there a way where I can check to see how many words are in a chapter while I'm writing it?
AWESOME STORY! I think i might wright a story about Flutterbat now too. A different story of course
this may be confusing but its the way i write it. publish it really quick to see how many words there are the un publish it if you aren't to sure about the chapter. thats my way of doing it at least.
4246091 Thanks
no prob
Moar pweti pls?!
4252297 It might take a while for chapters to come out. I'll do my best!
kinda rushed but still good story, thumbs up and faved
Could benefit from some small fixes and grammar updates, but you show a good sense of what you're doing, even though everything's very... succinct.
Still, I love the premise. Flutter-royalty just seems funny. 
Lol YAY TWO chapters!!!!!!anyway grammar problems and length other then that GOOD STORY!!!
I love this story and the whole concept of a bat kingdom but, it's a bit too fast paced for me to Really catch up... Otherwise it's great!
I read this and immediately face-palmed because, knowing you have a fang doesn't automatically mean that someone knows a lot about you.
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Unnecessary and would have been found out not too later had you not been so blunt.
4270920 I agree and disagree. I agree that it's way too fast paced and the concept is great but, the execution is what is also lacking RainbowSkunk could have written this much better.
I LOVE THIS BOOK ITS SO AWESOME!